The Tree
a story6 total reviews
Comment from Annmuma
I just read the winner! Wonderfully creative and grabs the reader on word one. The ending was a pleasant surprise and I agree with Claire in that life is never fair. It's just about living. Good luck in the contest. ann
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I just read the winner! Wonderfully creative and grabs the reader on word one. The ending was a pleasant surprise and I agree with Claire in that life is never fair. It's just about living. Good luck in the contest. ann
Comment Written 05-Aug-2023
Comment from Jake P.
This is a wonderful, creepy story with interesting twists. I found no errors, and the writing was great. Keep on writing.
A great entry in The Chamber Magazine. Congratulations.
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This is a wonderful, creepy story with interesting twists. I found no errors, and the writing was great. Keep on writing.
A great entry in The Chamber Magazine. Congratulations.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2023
Comment from pome lover
boy, that is some story - growing fingers and looking younger. At first, when you said the boy touched whatever was oozing out of the places on the tree, and screamed, I thought maybe he'd tasted it and it had done something to his mouth or face or something, but your story was weird enough without that. Also, the places on the old woman, related to the nuclear reactor meltdown, I thought the sister would get them, too, so ... some people had bad reactions and some grew back fingers, grew taller, and looked younger. Good imagination and scary happenings. And Claire? Is she supposed to have gotten cancer because she'd been there?
Oh, and the last line was great! :)
Katharine
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2023
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boy, that is some story - growing fingers and looking younger. At first, when you said the boy touched whatever was oozing out of the places on the tree, and screamed, I thought maybe he'd tasted it and it had done something to his mouth or face or something, but your story was weird enough without that. Also, the places on the old woman, related to the nuclear reactor meltdown, I thought the sister would get them, too, so ... some people had bad reactions and some grew back fingers, grew taller, and looked younger. Good imagination and scary happenings. And Claire? Is she supposed to have gotten cancer because she'd been there?
Oh, and the last line was great! :)
Katharine
Comment Written 02-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2023
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Thank you for reading, and for your comments! I know it was pretty long. Everything except the teeth in the tree MIGHT have been natural and unrelated to radiation (Claire's cancer, the deer with the tumor, the cat, the waitress with the spots). These things might have had a totally normal explanation. Also, some people do regrow fingers (especially children). So that might be natural. And Belinda looking younger... well, maybe she just got better makeup, who knows? I wanted to make it all sort of ambiguous. All but the tree teratomas... that was definitely not natural! ;)
Comment from Bill Schott
This is a fantastic story. Your characters seem so real with their reactions and attitudes. The whole idea of the meltdown and following effects rolls out like an episode of a weird television show. The resulting cancer for Bryan's wife and the amazing rejuvenating qualities of the disaster area people is powerful visualization.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2023
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This is a fantastic story. Your characters seem so real with their reactions and attitudes. The whole idea of the meltdown and following effects rolls out like an episode of a weird television show. The resulting cancer for Bryan's wife and the amazing rejuvenating qualities of the disaster area people is powerful visualization.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2023
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Thank you! This story was just accepted by The Chamber Magazine and will appear in their August issue! :)
Comment from nancy_e_davis
That's what we look for, Happy endings. LOL Just kidding. This was interesting and entertaining. Horrible but I couldn't stop reading. I did like the ending after all the disparaging words and ugly mental images. Well done. Nancy:)
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That's what we look for, Happy endings. LOL Just kidding. This was interesting and entertaining. Horrible but I couldn't stop reading. I did like the ending after all the disparaging words and ugly mental images. Well done. Nancy:)
Comment Written 25-Jul-2023
Comment from prettybluebirds
Wow, this is quite a story. Your imagination was working overtime to write this one. This should be an excellent contender in the contest. I wish you worlds of luck in the voting. Your story should be a winner.
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Wow, this is quite a story. Your imagination was working overtime to write this one. This should be an excellent contender in the contest. I wish you worlds of luck in the voting. Your story should be a winner.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2023
