The Piper
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Comment from royowen
I didn't think I'd missed an episode, but I do so much reviewing I really wouldn't know, but it doesn't surprise that they haven't missed an episode, although they only review my most promoted ones, I love the uniqueness of your story. Others write mystical ones, but not as well as you, well done, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 09-Jul-2023
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I didn't think I'd missed an episode, but I do so much reviewing I really wouldn't know, but it doesn't surprise that they haven't missed an episode, although they only review my most promoted ones, I love the uniqueness of your story. Others write mystical ones, but not as well as you, well done, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 09-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2023
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Hi Roy,
No slight was intended in not mentioning you. You got me wondering so I went back through the reviews for each chapter. You have reviewed faithfully since chapter 27--never missing a chapter. Before chapter 27 you reviewed 4 chapters here and there. I was rather inconsistent in posting and even took a couple years off from posting chapters so you can blame me for any you may have missed. I also didn't post as high for the earlier chapters so that may be another reason you missed them. My confidence was rather low when I started posting prose.
I appreciate you following the story and will give you credit in the author notes for your help. You will never know how much your encouragement has meant to me.
Thank you for the comments about the writing on this chapter and especially mentioning how much you enjoyed the mystical story.
Who knows, maybe Piper will make a comeback in another story.
Thank you again for your support. It means the world to me.
Debi
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No condemnation meant dear Debi, I couldn?t remember if I did or not, I?m sorry to have caused you any worry. Blessings Roy
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No problem, Roy. It was actually nice to look at some of the old names that aren?t on site anymore. All friends that I?ve left for one reason or another. Have a wonderful day.
Comment from John W Walker
I know I do not know the rest of this story, but what I have read is enticing and very well done. The mechanics are impeccable and the prose drew me in quite forcibly throughout. The dialogue is perfect and keeps the reader trapped in its completeness. Well done!
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2023
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I know I do not know the rest of this story, but what I have read is enticing and very well done. The mechanics are impeccable and the prose drew me in quite forcibly throughout. The dialogue is perfect and keeps the reader trapped in its completeness. Well done!
Comment Written 09-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2023
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Hi John W Walker,
Thank you for the six stars and the encouraging comments about the writing. I appreciate you stopping in to read and review this final chapter.
Debi
Comment from Faith Williams
That opening paragraph is a delight for the senses and creates a lovely image in my mind. Your second paragraph further enhances the picture with benches made from vines and the sounds of a flute in the moonlight. Animal sounds add to the magic of the music. I love the line, 'Music casts its own enchantment.'
A wonderful final chapter with an enchanting air, strong verb choices, believable dialogue and an unanswered question. Hmm... I wonder what Piper will decide. Are you planning on writing a sequel? I have enjoyed reading these last chapters.
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2023
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That opening paragraph is a delight for the senses and creates a lovely image in my mind. Your second paragraph further enhances the picture with benches made from vines and the sounds of a flute in the moonlight. Animal sounds add to the magic of the music. I love the line, 'Music casts its own enchantment.'
A wonderful final chapter with an enchanting air, strong verb choices, believable dialogue and an unanswered question. Hmm... I wonder what Piper will decide. Are you planning on writing a sequel? I have enjoyed reading these last chapters.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2023
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Hi Faith Williams,
Thank you for the six stars for this chapter. I appreciate the detailed comments about the writing. Thank you for citing the line you liked. I am delighted you enjoyed these last few chapters. A sequel? Perhaps. Piper hasn't made it to Hamelin yet.
Have a wonderful day.
Debi
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I'm sorry this is the last chapter. I will miss my friends. Thank you for sharing this with us.
A few stars winked down at the scene. (good description)
He looked over his shoulder. "Hello, Father." (There are so many stronger verbs you could use instead of looked, it's common. This included other looked, too.)
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reply by the author on 09-Jul-2023
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I'm sorry this is the last chapter. I will miss my friends. Thank you for sharing this with us.
A few stars winked down at the scene. (good description)
He looked over his shoulder. "Hello, Father." (There are so many stronger verbs you could use instead of looked, it's common. This included other looked, too.)
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Comment Written 09-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2023
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Hi barbara.wilkey,
Thank you for the kind comments about missing the characters going forward.
I appreciate the suggestions for improvement and have made alterations.
Debi
