Tranquility
A Constanza33 total reviews
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Your first lines in this constanza poem make a beautiful stand alone poem, JLR. Seeking beauty and peace in nature is indeed a wonderful thing to do. A lovely read.
Cheers
Valda
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2023
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Your first lines in this constanza poem make a beautiful stand alone poem, JLR. Seeking beauty and peace in nature is indeed a wonderful thing to do. A lovely read.
Cheers
Valda
Comment Written 17-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2023
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Valda, thank you for this six star validation.
Comment from Paul McFarland
Nice job with this different form. You have conveyed a quiet tranquil mood with this poem. This should be a good club entry. I may try this form.
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2023
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Nice job with this different form. You have conveyed a quiet tranquil mood with this poem. This should be a good club entry. I may try this form.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2023
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Paul, this is quite a fun style to romp around with, please let me know what you come up with, thanks always, Jim
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your club poem was well done, JLR.
O enjoyed reading it. Great job with
the requirements of the style. I liked
the rhymes and the way you developed
your message. The image was a great
addition, too. I liked the line with nature's
band. I could picture everything as I read.
Thanks for participating, Jan
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2023
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Your club poem was well done, JLR.
O enjoyed reading it. Great job with
the requirements of the style. I liked
the rhymes and the way you developed
your message. The image was a great
addition, too. I liked the line with nature's
band. I could picture everything as I read.
Thanks for participating, Jan
Comment Written 14-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2023
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Jan, you are the one who desires the thanks! I appreciate your tremendous commitment to the club and the time and effort you put into helping member explore the world of poetic styles and I am a fan of your works.
Comment from Eternal Muse
This was beautiful. Thank you for introducing me to a Constanza form that I never tried but should try.
You described your perfect oasis of tranquility well. Loved the imagery, visuals, the font and presentation.
Your words take a reader far away, to that perfect heaven, to inhale the magic.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2023
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This was beautiful. Thank you for introducing me to a Constanza form that I never tried but should try.
You described your perfect oasis of tranquility well. Loved the imagery, visuals, the font and presentation.
Your words take a reader far away, to that perfect heaven, to inhale the magic.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2023
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EM; thank you so very much. It is a similar scene I have to pleasure of experiencing just off our back deck everyday .. a stark contrast Hempstead, NY 😊
Comment from Ginda Simpson
Your words so beautifully evoke this place of tranquility that you share with us in your poem. As we read, we see the beauty and hear nature's music and we are also at peace. Thank you for sharing this with us.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2023
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Your words so beautifully evoke this place of tranquility that you share with us in your poem. As we read, we see the beauty and hear nature's music and we are also at peace. Thank you for sharing this with us.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2023
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Thank you so much Ginda!
Comment from Jasmine Girl
This poem is beatifically written. You can seek tranquility by two waterfalls. I'm in my place on Lake Superior and there are many waterfalls here. They are noisy and it's hard to describe the kind of music they belong.
Well done.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2023
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This poem is beatifically written. You can seek tranquility by two waterfalls. I'm in my place on Lake Superior and there are many waterfalls here. They are noisy and it's hard to describe the kind of music they belong.
Well done.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2023
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Jasmine, thank you. I know those huge falls around Lake Superior, the crescendo of which reverberates like wheels on boxcars.
Comment from lyenochka
I'm so glad you have a special place to go and enjoy the peace that nature gives you. Glad you make this a daily practice "embracing the present moment." Great job with your Constanza poem!
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2023
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I'm so glad you have a special place to go and enjoy the peace that nature gives you. Glad you make this a daily practice "embracing the present moment." Great job with your Constanza poem!
Comment Written 13-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2023
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Helen, thank you.
Comment from pome lover
A lovely and well written Constanza.
If I may mention one place that stopped me when I was reading this out loud (twice), is the word, tweak," in the first line of the last verse. Tweak is a good word, but are you saying, ..."everyday I often tweak embracing the present moment..."?
What about, "Sitting thus, I hear God speak"? or "Tis here the sounds of nature speak." OR "Resting here, these thoughts, I tweak,' embracing the present moment.
I do apologize if I am out of line. I hope I haven't been an irritant.
Your poem is thoughtful and peaceful with a lovely accompanying picture.
Respectfully,
Katharine
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2023
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A lovely and well written Constanza.
If I may mention one place that stopped me when I was reading this out loud (twice), is the word, tweak," in the first line of the last verse. Tweak is a good word, but are you saying, ..."everyday I often tweak embracing the present moment..."?
What about, "Sitting thus, I hear God speak"? or "Tis here the sounds of nature speak." OR "Resting here, these thoughts, I tweak,' embracing the present moment.
I do apologize if I am out of line. I hope I haven't been an irritant.
Your poem is thoughtful and peaceful with a lovely accompanying picture.
Respectfully,
Katharine
Comment Written 13-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2023
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Katherine, wow! Thank you so much. Your observation is spot on and I am very grateful for your sharing your wisdom. " Sitting thus, by nature's bouquet" does improve and carry the thoughts forward.
Comment from Sally Law
Ah, this is so lovely in the constanza form, J! My native Georgia has Tallulah Falls and Anna Ruby Falls. One of my brothers took my sister and I hiking over Anna Ruby. We spent the night there listing to the waterfall's sound. Sending you my best today as always.
Sal :))
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2023
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Ah, this is so lovely in the constanza form, J! My native Georgia has Tallulah Falls and Anna Ruby Falls. One of my brothers took my sister and I hiking over Anna Ruby. We spent the night there listing to the waterfall's sound. Sending you my best today as always.
Sal :))
Comment Written 13-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2023
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Sally, I have hiked Tallulah falls on many an occasion. Anna Ruby will be put in my bucket list. Have super Flag Day!
Comment from estory
A nice take on the classic, pastoral romantic tradition. You had the peaceful rhythm of the meter, the rhymes that provided the softening music, and the images of the oasis of nature. But what I also noticed in here were those nagging images of what's bothering you. So it also speaks to the persistence of our anxiety, and how hard it is to really turn the page on them, even in these pastoral places and moments. estory
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2023
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A nice take on the classic, pastoral romantic tradition. You had the peaceful rhythm of the meter, the rhymes that provided the softening music, and the images of the oasis of nature. But what I also noticed in here were those nagging images of what's bothering you. So it also speaks to the persistence of our anxiety, and how hard it is to really turn the page on them, even in these pastoral places and moments. estory
Comment Written 13-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2023
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estory, thank you for your concise and correct analyzation of this poetic work.
