Time Gone By
How sunlight captures our age3 total reviews
Comment from patcelaw
I have a magnifying mirror in my bathroom. I very seldom look into it because there I see all of the many wrinkles I have quired over the years. I enjoyed your short poem. Patricia
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2023
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I have a magnifying mirror in my bathroom. I very seldom look into it because there I see all of the many wrinkles I have quired over the years. I enjoyed your short poem. Patricia
Comment Written 06-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2023
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Thank you for your kind review!
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
Hi there! I was expecting a story since it is listed as one in the feed. You might want to change how you're posting it, and I would look at some of the poetry here and see how you can better present your poem. If you post it as a poem instead of as a story, it will line up under the picture and you can play with font, background color, etc. Especially if you are entering this into a contest, you want it to shine:-)
Your poem is a good one and matches the picture well, but I believe you have 10 syllables in the last line.
If you're new to FS, take some time to look at the poets on the opening page to see what their presentations look like, and play around with your "editor" on the posting page. And always click on your own work to see what the finished product looks like, then edit if you need to.
Good luck, and I hope to see more from you in the future.
Pam
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2023
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Hi there! I was expecting a story since it is listed as one in the feed. You might want to change how you're posting it, and I would look at some of the poetry here and see how you can better present your poem. If you post it as a poem instead of as a story, it will line up under the picture and you can play with font, background color, etc. Especially if you are entering this into a contest, you want it to shine:-)
Your poem is a good one and matches the picture well, but I believe you have 10 syllables in the last line.
If you're new to FS, take some time to look at the poets on the opening page to see what their presentations look like, and play around with your "editor" on the posting page. And always click on your own work to see what the finished product looks like, then edit if you need to.
Good luck, and I hope to see more from you in the future.
Pam
Comment Written 06-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2023
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Thank you for such a thorough review!
Comment from Melodie Michelle
Excellent entry for the 3-6-9 Poem contest and best of wishes in the contest my friend!
Thank you for sharing and may God bless you and your family!!!
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2023
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Excellent entry for the 3-6-9 Poem contest and best of wishes in the contest my friend!
Thank you for sharing and may God bless you and your family!!!
Comment Written 06-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2023
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Thank you and may God bless you and your family!
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