A Painted Pastoral Scene
TPH describes a ...21 total reviews
Comment from rspoet
Hello Tom,
This is a marvelously descriptive poem with
wonderful use of color in imagery.
The rhymes are excellent with some creativity added
in the "Cu" and "low" usage.
I like the last stanza with the artistic comparison
and reference to the Original Painter.
Great picture, a marvelous view to enjoy each day.
Well done.
Best wishes.
Robert
reply by the author on 06-May-2023
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Hello Tom,
This is a marvelously descriptive poem with
wonderful use of color in imagery.
The rhymes are excellent with some creativity added
in the "Cu" and "low" usage.
I like the last stanza with the artistic comparison
and reference to the Original Painter.
Great picture, a marvelous view to enjoy each day.
Well done.
Best wishes.
Robert
Comment Written 06-May-2023
reply by the author on 06-May-2023
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Mama?s little boy Must be Growing up. A number Of fanstorians have Liked This piece
More than the five hundred previously posted.I am thrilled. Thank you.
Comment from w.j.debi
You paint such a wonderful scene with your words that the picture is just a compliment to your writing. The vegetation and the animal life make spring come to life. I really liked that second line. Excellent closing.
Since you ask my vote is that you do not need to italicize the varied colors mentioned. You intertwine them well into the verse as it is.
reply by the author on 06-May-2023
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You paint such a wonderful scene with your words that the picture is just a compliment to your writing. The vegetation and the animal life make spring come to life. I really liked that second line. Excellent closing.
Since you ask my vote is that you do not need to italicize the varied colors mentioned. You intertwine them well into the verse as it is.
Comment Written 06-May-2023
reply by the author on 06-May-2023
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You join the consensus not to do anything and leave things as
They are. Thank you for
Your
Time, comments and support.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-I had one six star left, and am happy to award it to you, Tom.
-Very nice image and presentation.
-Your notes are appreciated.
-I don't think you should italicize the colors.
-You paint a wonderful word picture of nature
with many vivid images and rhyme.
-You also do a great job with the colors of nature.
-The closing verse is my favorite with the nod to Monet
and "Angel trumpets."
-An excellent poem with a very good message.
reply by the author on 06-May-2023
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-I had one six star left, and am happy to award it to you, Tom.
-Very nice image and presentation.
-Your notes are appreciated.
-I don't think you should italicize the colors.
-You paint a wonderful word picture of nature
with many vivid images and rhyme.
-You also do a great job with the colors of nature.
-The closing verse is my favorite with the nod to Monet
and "Angel trumpets."
-An excellent poem with a very good message.
Comment Written 06-May-2023
reply by the author on 06-May-2023
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Thanks. I am blushing red.
If reviews were rewarded stars, you'd get a six fer sur!
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I'm surprised it wasn't golden to match the stars! You deserved them and the review. One of your best poems.
Comment from Teri7
This is a very beautiful and well written poem of the month you have penned about your place. You used very good descriptive words and lovely imagery from the photograph you took. A very lovely place to live and enjoy! Best wishes in the contest. Teri
reply by the author on 06-May-2023
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This is a very beautiful and well written poem of the month you have penned about your place. You used very good descriptive words and lovely imagery from the photograph you took. A very lovely place to live and enjoy! Best wishes in the contest. Teri
Comment Written 05-May-2023
reply by the author on 06-May-2023
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you betchum! Thank you
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent poem with beautiful concrete imagery.. good word choices. The presentation is beautiful.
The rhymes are not forced and flow well. Well done!
reply by the author on 05-May-2023
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Excellent poem with beautiful concrete imagery.. good word choices. The presentation is beautiful.
The rhymes are not forced and flow well. Well done!
Comment Written 05-May-2023
reply by the author on 05-May-2023
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Thanks for the read anad comment.
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
Beautiful poem with very descriptive words and colorful imagery. My first reaction was yes colorize the words but I think that would make your poem less effective. It would be distracting. I'm not sure if you can, but maybe you could work in a few smilies like"as orange as..." That's another way to pop the color I would think.
Best wishes!!
reply by the author on 05-May-2023
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Beautiful poem with very descriptive words and colorful imagery. My first reaction was yes colorize the words but I think that would make your poem less effective. It would be distracting. I'm not sure if you can, but maybe you could work in a few smilies like"as orange as..." That's another way to pop the color I would think.
Best wishes!!
Comment Written 05-May-2023
reply by the author on 05-May-2023
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We ok?
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Ha the woman thing? If I'm remembering That's what I hate about the Internet I am sarcastic funny sometimes I imagine it comes off the opposite of that sorry Alex
Comment from shelley kaye
wow this poem was so colourful and rich in imagery!
it has an awesome picture and colour scheme
beautiful word choices with smooth flow and rhyme
as for your question about italics... imo, no.
but maybe try out...
stanza 1 in yellow
stanza 2 in white
stanza 3 in light blue
stanza 4 in light pink
you asked, i answered :)
a great poem - congrats on being in the poem of the month booth and good luck!!
shelley :)
reply by the author on 05-May-2023
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wow this poem was so colourful and rich in imagery!
it has an awesome picture and colour scheme
beautiful word choices with smooth flow and rhyme
as for your question about italics... imo, no.
but maybe try out...
stanza 1 in yellow
stanza 2 in white
stanza 3 in light blue
stanza 4 in light pink
you asked, i answered :)
a great poem - congrats on being in the poem of the month booth and good luck!!
shelley :)
Comment Written 05-May-2023
reply by the author on 05-May-2023
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Made my day, you did, you did. Thank you.
Comment from Ginda Simpson
Since I am a painter, I can say you wrote this as if at an easel, you eye taking credit to our Creator at the end, turns it into a prayer. You count your blessings.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2023
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Since I am a painter, I can say you wrote this as if at an easel, you eye taking credit to our Creator at the end, turns it into a prayer. You count your blessings.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2023
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What did you think of the ending? We had Angel Trumpets ahead of a heavenly procession. If I could have found another way but didn't, so I asked why not for He is the Artiste mMagnifique. (fr.)
Thanks Ginda? not Glinda? Later. Tom H
Comment from BethShelby
This is a nice photograph which still doesn't contain nearly as many colors as you have included in you poem. I wouldn't think it would be necessary to make the colors Italic. If anythinig I might put the last line in italics,because the last words are quotes.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2023
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This is a nice photograph which still doesn't contain nearly as many colors as you have included in you poem. I wouldn't think it would be necessary to make the colors Italic. If anythinig I might put the last line in italics,because the last words are quotes.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2023
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I see, I think, though I didn't intend the line to be quotes, I see where they could be. Fondly yours for your time. Tom
Comment from royowen
No I don't think you should italicise the colour, it's part of your descriptive text. You're displaying your poetic abilities here, the rural scene is like painting a scene with words, some may even say the artwork is unnecessary, a slightly controversial subject, beautifully written Tom, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2023
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No I don't think you should italicise the colour, it's part of your descriptive text. You're displaying your poetic abilities here, the rural scene is like painting a scene with words, some may even say the artwork is unnecessary, a slightly controversial subject, beautifully written Tom, blessings Roy
Comment Written 25-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2023
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Is your reference in regard to the final line? Not sure what else could be controversial. Appreciate the read and comment.
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No, I didn?t really find any fault with it Tom,
