Comment from justswf

Exceptional

This was simply perfect...This is only the 2nd 6 star I have given in almost a year...If there were a 7 you would have it...What a great piece...I was moved...The rhythm without rhyme...The flow without too much clutter...Simply perfect...I wonder what the tear was for...And yes I know that's what made the poem outstanding...You should go far with your style...Good luck...

 Comment Written 13-Jul-2006

Comment from wintersknights

Excellent

as I read the essance of your soul flows through the words.
they echo the depth of your heart and the melodies of your mind.
I did not find any errors and would not change a thing.
wk

 Comment Written 10-Jul-2006

Comment from CarolinasAngel

Excellent

I love that picture! And the poem fits it nicely. This reads with ease and shows every word with vivid imagery. Nothing to change. Awesome.

Candy

 Comment Written 07-Jul-2006

Comment from clhutchinson

Excellent

I love it! Great images watched from inside, and then it's time to get out their with daughter hand in hand and be part of the beauty, feeling it and living it. Great flow and touching scenes.

 Comment Written 06-Jul-2006

Comment from starkat

Excellent

My you are having fun with these challenges. I like the creative way you used 'posterior'. A relaxing picture of summers at the lake. I had to think for a moment about the duck... don't know if I've ever seen one with a fish in it's mouth. Excellent piece. Enjoyed the read.. and how you are living up to these challenges. Cheers. ;-)

 Comment Written 06-Jul-2006

Comment from texyankeefan

Excellent

These challenges are getting crazy.
posterior
ducks
curtain
laughing ???????
Who would have thought that such a beautiful, sentimental poem could have been written from a duck's posterior behind a curtain, laughing?
Now you see why I can't play this game.
Great job. Even without the restrictions of using these four words, this is a beautiful piece and the picture is wonderful.
Great job.

 Comment Written 06-Jul-2006

Comment from Hetty

Excellent

Hi Shelley,

This is a lovely free verse poem with good rhythm and flow. Dont think you need to abbreviate the words you have in here because you are restricted by syllable count. I have done these unrelated noun poems before - they're fascinating aren't they? I think you used them beautifully in this one, lass.

Hetty

 Comment Written 06-Jul-2006

Comment from mayflowerbg

Excellent

Hi, Shelley!

This is the second I've read today and you've really done your job very well. It has got atmosphere, a change in the lonely mood and nice word choices.
No suggestions, it was a pleasure to read!

M.

 Comment Written 06-Jul-2006

Comment from Renee' J Thomas

Excellent

Very nice. I can feel what you are feeling. I think the words flowed very nicely and the sentiments came through very well. good job on this one! Gotta love those old memories of time spent as a child on the lake.

 Comment Written 06-Jul-2006

Comment from easyeverett

Excellent

A very soothing trip through nostalgia and the melancholy of memory. Then, having that melancholy rescued by resharing the experience as the adult with the child instead of the child with the adult. Very good. You have been writing some awesome stuff lately Shelley. I like the expansion of style you have embarked upon. I would change the word "posterior" (usually refering to your rear and not the rear of a cottage) to anterior which is more cottage specific, if you get my drift. easy

 Comment Written 06-Jul-2006