The Piper
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Comment from Spitfire
I remember following this story when you first started it. Novel idea for me-the flute having a personality of its own. Your minute details that include the vibration of insects make for a magical forest. You seem well acquainted with the sounds of a flute. Do you play one?
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2023
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I remember following this story when you first started it. Novel idea for me-the flute having a personality of its own. Your minute details that include the vibration of insects make for a magical forest. You seem well acquainted with the sounds of a flute. Do you play one?
Comment Written 09-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2023
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Hi Shari,
Thank you for the shiny six stars to brighten my day. I'm surprised anyone remembers this story since I took two years away before coming back to finish it so thank you for remembering. Just a few more chapters to go.
I don't play the flute. I play piano, 'cello, organ and clarinet. In fifth grade they wanted us to sign up for instruments. I wanted to play the flute, but my father had a clarinet so that was the only option I was given. When I complained, my father said too bad, he wanted a saxophone. Such is life. Maybe, someday I'll take a few lessons on the flute.
Comment from lyenochka
Oh no! We don't want Piper to drink that tea! It's been a while but I remember that Captain Burkehart was a bad guy and he doesn't have good intentions toward Piper. Piper should have listened to his flute and kept his guardian fairy with him!
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2023
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Oh no! We don't want Piper to drink that tea! It's been a while but I remember that Captain Burkehart was a bad guy and he doesn't have good intentions toward Piper. Piper should have listened to his flute and kept his guardian fairy with him!
Comment Written 06-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2023
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Hi Helen,
Thank you for the reaction to this chapter and the insightful comments. Yes, Piper should have...
Debi
Comment from CrystieCookie999
Oh, my, I don't speak flute, either, ha ha. I liked reading this chapter. You definitely have a flair for creating another world. I hope Piper isn't on his way out.
Littlest of fixes:
A twig snapped underfoot as he sifted his weight.
I think you mean 'shifted' and not 'sifted.'
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2023
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Oh, my, I don't speak flute, either, ha ha. I liked reading this chapter. You definitely have a flair for creating another world. I hope Piper isn't on his way out.
Littlest of fixes:
A twig snapped underfoot as he sifted his weight.
I think you mean 'shifted' and not 'sifted.'
Comment Written 06-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2023
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Hi CrystieCookie999,
I appreciat the shiny six stars and your wonderful comments. I appreciate the encouragement.
Thank you for catching the SPAG. It is amazing how many times you can read your own writing and not see things like that.
Debi
Comment from rspoet
Hello Debi,
Another suspenseful chapter in the story of Piper. It seems Captain Burkehart
has revealed his true feelings, no uncertainty here.
"Elfbane. It was deadly to anyone with elven blood. I'll have my answer soon."
So the Captain is willing to kill Piper. I thought he might use a knockout powder and take him back to Castle Welf.
It looks like Jasmine better act quickly if she is to be his guardian faerie.
Or maybe the flute itself will intervene (or Summerstorm or Sheba).
It's been a few years since reading the previous sections, so it's difficult to tell if this is a bit abrupt or not.
But the chapter is very well done.
Best wishes to you (and Piper)
Robert
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2023
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Hello Debi,
Another suspenseful chapter in the story of Piper. It seems Captain Burkehart
has revealed his true feelings, no uncertainty here.
"Elfbane. It was deadly to anyone with elven blood. I'll have my answer soon."
So the Captain is willing to kill Piper. I thought he might use a knockout powder and take him back to Castle Welf.
It looks like Jasmine better act quickly if she is to be his guardian faerie.
Or maybe the flute itself will intervene (or Summerstorm or Sheba).
It's been a few years since reading the previous sections, so it's difficult to tell if this is a bit abrupt or not.
But the chapter is very well done.
Best wishes to you (and Piper)
Robert
Comment Written 06-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2023
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Hi Robert,
Thank you for the wonderful rating and the detailed comments. Thank you for pointing out the line that clears up the uncertainty.
Who will come to the rescure? Will anyone?
I appreciate how you have continued with the story and offered so much support and encouragement.
Debi
Comment from Pam (respa)
-I didn't expect this turn of events, Debi.
-A well written chapter that seems to have
Piper confused about his flute and music.
-The faeries seem to be trying to communicate
a problem via the flute, but Piper seems distracted.
-I certainly didn't expect to see Burkehart, and it's
never been clear what side he is on, but if the
mixture he put in Piper's tea is any indication,
I don't think this is a good thing, but Piper
seems drawn to him.
-If the ending is any indication, the faerie realm
is very upset, but then the question is what
realm does Piper really belong in, and will
he continue to have his flute?
-Well done, my friend.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2023
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-I didn't expect this turn of events, Debi.
-A well written chapter that seems to have
Piper confused about his flute and music.
-The faeries seem to be trying to communicate
a problem via the flute, but Piper seems distracted.
-I certainly didn't expect to see Burkehart, and it's
never been clear what side he is on, but if the
mixture he put in Piper's tea is any indication,
I don't think this is a good thing, but Piper
seems drawn to him.
-If the ending is any indication, the faerie realm
is very upset, but then the question is what
realm does Piper really belong in, and will
he continue to have his flute?
-Well done, my friend.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2023
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Hi Pam,
Thank you for the detailed review and your insights on the characters and the realm. I'm glad it raises questions that need to be answered. I appreciate your continued support and encouragement.
Debi
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You are very welcome and deserving of the review and comments, as well as the support.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is a very interesting fantasy. I believe I read a chapter earlier and wished I'd gotten in on the beginning. You have ended this chapter with a great cliffhanger as Burkehart is going to poison Piper if he is elven. Only one problem: . . . dirt clung to his (clothes).
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2023
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This is a very interesting fantasy. I believe I read a chapter earlier and wished I'd gotten in on the beginning. You have ended this chapter with a great cliffhanger as Burkehart is going to poison Piper if he is elven. Only one problem: . . . dirt clung to his (clothes).
Comment Written 05-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2023
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Hi Carol Hillebrenner,
Thank you for the encouraging comments and the mention of the clilffhanger. I appreciate you catching the SPAG so I can correct it.
Debi
Comment from lancellot
This is well written and an interesting story (chapter). I will have to read more.
notes:
What magic would do that? He adjusted to a kneeling position and peered through the trees. What charm would make the faeries desert the plateau?
- The questions... Should these be his thoughts, rather than the narrator? I did notice that sometimes he asks questions in him (italics) and sometimes the narrator does it.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2023
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This is well written and an interesting story (chapter). I will have to read more.
notes:
What magic would do that? He adjusted to a kneeling position and peered through the trees. What charm would make the faeries desert the plateau?
- The questions... Should these be his thoughts, rather than the narrator? I did notice that sometimes he asks questions in him (italics) and sometimes the narrator does it.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2023
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Hi lancellot,
I appreciate you jumping in to read a chapter in the middle of the story. I also appreciate your insights about the character's thoughts and those of the narrator. I felt something was off, but wasn't quite sure what. Thank you! I will do some re-writing.
Debi
Comment from prettybluebirds
You have certainly used some imagination to create this story. It is very cute and nicely written. You have done an excellent job with the dialogue, and the descriptions are vivid. Nice writing.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2023
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You have certainly used some imagination to create this story. It is very cute and nicely written. You have done an excellent job with the dialogue, and the descriptions are vivid. Nice writing.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2023
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Hi prettybluebirds,
I appreciate you jumping in to the story to read and review. Thank you for the encouraging comments about the writing.
Debi.
Comment from royowen
Why would Captain Burkehart put something in Piper's tea that might kill or maim him, but then again why would he want to create a wall or worse with the fairy folk in this enchanted place. With the flute carrying on a treat, well done Debi, it's been awhile. Well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2023
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Why would Captain Burkehart put something in Piper's tea that might kill or maim him, but then again why would he want to create a wall or worse with the fairy folk in this enchanted place. With the flute carrying on a treat, well done Debi, it's been awhile. Well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 05-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2023
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Hi Roy,
Thank you for the encouraging review. I know, it has been a while. I appreciate you jumping in and reading this chapter.
Debi
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Most welcome
