When I Die
How to remember me when I die.26 total reviews
Comment from patcelaw
Gee, I just really don't know what to say. It is so sad that a person feels that when they die, there's nothing left of them. Of course there's something left of us when we die. When we die we leave a legacy and hopefully we all work towards perfecting that legacy before we leave. I wish you the very best and hope that you are comforted and your remaining days. Patricia.
Gee, I just really don't know what to say. It is so sad that a person feels that when they die, there's nothing left of them. Of course there's something left of us when we die. When we die we leave a legacy and hopefully we all work towards perfecting that legacy before we leave. I wish you the very best and hope that you are comforted and your remaining days. Patricia.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2023
Comment from kahpot
Wow! what a very absorbing read, you have truly put your feelings into words in this poem, the rhyme and flow are wonderful as you tell us of your life and your needs, very well written****kahpot
Wow! what a very absorbing read, you have truly put your feelings into words in this poem, the rhyme and flow are wonderful as you tell us of your life and your needs, very well written****kahpot
Comment Written 01-Mar-2023
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Charity
This is a long poem that uses repetition to show what you do and don't what at your death. It seems to have had a hard life vs and need you faith to see you through so your victories outweigh your struggles so you visit heaven. I hope your poems do outlive you.
I think victory should be victories.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan.
Hi Charity
This is a long poem that uses repetition to show what you do and don't what at your death. It seems to have had a hard life vs and need you faith to see you through so your victories outweigh your struggles so you visit heaven. I hope your poems do outlive you.
I think victory should be victories.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2023
Comment from susand3022
Hi Charity,
I have to say, it's really brave to put yourself out like that, if that's yourself you're putting.
The other thing I have to say, is that you sound a lot like me. Always the doormat, never the door. I come here for company. I'd stay for more right now... but I'm being called... it's doormat time!
Susan :)
Hi Charity,
I have to say, it's really brave to put yourself out like that, if that's yourself you're putting.
The other thing I have to say, is that you sound a lot like me. Always the doormat, never the door. I come here for company. I'd stay for more right now... but I'm being called... it's doormat time!
Susan :)
Comment Written 01-Mar-2023
Comment from John Ciarmello
Charity! Your impact on this world and its people would be forever lost upon your death. I've read you numerous times, and you have scared the daylights out of me each time, partly because I know what you write is from experience. But death, my dear friend, is the end all, and your voice will be silenced for eternity as the world that knows you now will not know you a century from now. Dead men are soon forgotten. Make your mark amongst the living and keep us engaged for as long as possible. Best, JohnC
Charity! Your impact on this world and its people would be forever lost upon your death. I've read you numerous times, and you have scared the daylights out of me each time, partly because I know what you write is from experience. But death, my dear friend, is the end all, and your voice will be silenced for eternity as the world that knows you now will not know you a century from now. Dead men are soon forgotten. Make your mark amongst the living and keep us engaged for as long as possible. Best, JohnC
Comment Written 01-Mar-2023
Comment from Janet Foor
Excellent artwork. It spoke to me immediately and I thought of death and that we are like a fleeting breath of air floating on the breeze.
the thought of death is is comfort in times of trials if we know where we will spend eternity.
Blessings
Janet
Excellent artwork. It spoke to me immediately and I thought of death and that we are like a fleeting breath of air floating on the breeze.
the thought of death is is comfort in times of trials if we know where we will spend eternity.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 01-Mar-2023
Comment from Aussie
"Oh, Death where is thy sting?" Why write about your death? We all end up in a box. It's what we have achieved through our lives that makes more sense. We are all tempted, some succumb. You may have had a rough life, but many more have had worse. "pick yourself up and start all over again." God needs all of His soldiers for Christ. Depression is real, pills don't make you better, a Zombie perhaps. "Live as you would have lived as a child of Jesus." K xx
"Oh, Death where is thy sting?" Why write about your death? We all end up in a box. It's what we have achieved through our lives that makes more sense. We are all tempted, some succumb. You may have had a rough life, but many more have had worse. "pick yourself up and start all over again." God needs all of His soldiers for Christ. Depression is real, pills don't make you better, a Zombie perhaps. "Live as you would have lived as a child of Jesus." K xx
Comment Written 01-Mar-2023
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This has quite a few intriguing lines. My favorite might be: When I die, there will be nothing left for me to fear.
And also:
No longer wanting to see hell, I want a heavenly view.
I noticed an extra letter here:
All I needed was someone I could talk too.
I think you need 'to' and not 'too.'
This has quite a few intriguing lines. My favorite might be: When I die, there will be nothing left for me to fear.
And also:
No longer wanting to see hell, I want a heavenly view.
I noticed an extra letter here:
All I needed was someone I could talk too.
I think you need 'to' and not 'too.'
Comment Written 01-Mar-2023
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
It's so sad when you feel like that, but it's so good that you are writing it all down. It's the best way to look at your own life through your own words. It somehow makes everything a lot clearer. I do hope it helps you. Warm hugs, Sandra xx
It's so sad when you feel like that, but it's so good that you are writing it all down. It's the best way to look at your own life through your own words. It somehow makes everything a lot clearer. I do hope it helps you. Warm hugs, Sandra xx
Comment Written 28-Feb-2023
Comment from Tom Horonzy
First, the picture drew me in, along with recognizing your name immediately. Your take on life is different.
I understand When I die is the title, but I found it overused more than comfortably for me, like in line four, which I would have written 'for there is nothing left for me on earth' or something similar.
I love line ten and though I only have read you for a year, indeed its clear how you have grown.
As for line thirteen - I tried!
14-15 might be the best lines.
I suggest, too, closing the space at the bottom of the piece by simply deleting the emptiness to tighten the frame.
First, the picture drew me in, along with recognizing your name immediately. Your take on life is different.
I understand When I die is the title, but I found it overused more than comfortably for me, like in line four, which I would have written 'for there is nothing left for me on earth' or something similar.
I love line ten and though I only have read you for a year, indeed its clear how you have grown.
As for line thirteen - I tried!
14-15 might be the best lines.
I suggest, too, closing the space at the bottom of the piece by simply deleting the emptiness to tighten the frame.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2023