The Magic Speaks for Itself
All it takes is a magic show22 total reviews
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is a great story. It has all the elements a ten-year-old would love, especially blood. The only change you might make is starting with Joey running out of the house and asking Billy what he was all excited about. The beginning you have makes it seem as if the story is told by Billy, but it is really Joey's story.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2023
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This is a great story. It has all the elements a ten-year-old would love, especially blood. The only change you might make is starting with Joey running out of the house and asking Billy what he was all excited about. The beginning you have makes it seem as if the story is told by Billy, but it is really Joey's story.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2023
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Okay. Thank you for pointing it out!
Greatly appreciated,
John
Comment from jacquelyn popp
Your dialogue is authentic. Each scene is clearly described, and provides excellent imagery. I loved reading your story. Nicely done, and very well written. Great photo that you used to go with your story. Your story was beautifully written. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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Your dialogue is authentic. Each scene is clearly described, and provides excellent imagery. I loved reading your story. Nicely done, and very well written. Great photo that you used to go with your story. Your story was beautifully written. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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Jacquelyn, thank you so much for an outstanding review.
John
Comment from LJbutterfly
The dialogue is authentic. Each scene is clearly described, providing excellent imagery. The magic acts with the hat are completely detailed, and the story is compelling with a satisfying ending. Spellbound, like a child watching a magic show, I totally enjoyed this story.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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The dialogue is authentic. Each scene is clearly described, providing excellent imagery. The magic acts with the hat are completely detailed, and the story is compelling with a satisfying ending. Spellbound, like a child watching a magic show, I totally enjoyed this story.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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Thank you, LJ for reading, sharing and those six stars.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Nicely done. Well written.
Getting yourself killed, the more gruesome-the better, will do it every time. Excellent way to make friends.
Good work.
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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Nicely done. Well written.
Getting yourself killed, the more gruesome-the better, will do it every time. Excellent way to make friends.
Good work.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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Thank you, Wayne for a good review.
Comment from LateBloomer
Hi John, thank you for sharing this childhood memory with me. I could see the whole scene. The street filled with children. I could feel the excitement and anticipation of the crowd. Of special note:
Lazard pulled the saw from the box. Thick red fluid oozing from the teeth of the saw, drippi
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The kids ran up to the porch and formed a circle around him. Jumping and patting him on the back, they chanted his name, "Joey, Joey, Jo..."
(The making of a star)
Well done; well told. Perfect photo choice. A pleasure to read. Keep the blue waters flowing. Margaret ~ LateBloomer
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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Hi John, thank you for sharing this childhood memory with me. I could see the whole scene. The street filled with children. I could feel the excitement and anticipation of the crowd. Of special note:
Lazard pulled the saw from the box. Thick red fluid oozing from the teeth of the saw, drippi
Also:
The kids ran up to the porch and formed a circle around him. Jumping and patting him on the back, they chanted his name, "Joey, Joey, Jo..."
(The making of a star)
Well done; well told. Perfect photo choice. A pleasure to read. Keep the blue waters flowing. Margaret ~ LateBloomer
Comment Written 24-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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Margaret, thank you for a great review. Much appreciated.
John
Comment from royowen
Heh heh, well done John, Joey will probably never get an opportunity to ever be famous and invincible ever again like this! Oh but will he? Beautifully written my friend, an excellent post, good job, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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Heh heh, well done John, Joey will probably never get an opportunity to ever be famous and invincible ever again like this! Oh but will he? Beautifully written my friend, an excellent post, good job, blessings Roy
Comment Written 24-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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Thank you, Roy. I?m glad you enjoyed this.
John
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Welcome
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
I admit, I was expecting a more sinister ending, lol!
This seems to have been another time, as I can't imagine kids being that impressed with a magic show these days. But it's a nice story of a new kid in the neighborhood, who has suddenly found fame and friends with the help of his friend, Billy.
This was different, and I like different. Also, your description of the magician's tricks was very engaging. Thanks for giving us an upbeat story full of magic:-)
Pam
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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I admit, I was expecting a more sinister ending, lol!
This seems to have been another time, as I can't imagine kids being that impressed with a magic show these days. But it's a nice story of a new kid in the neighborhood, who has suddenly found fame and friends with the help of his friend, Billy.
This was different, and I like different. Also, your description of the magician's tricks was very engaging. Thanks for giving us an upbeat story full of magic:-)
Pam
Comment Written 24-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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Pam, you?re absolutely right. Kids today would probably think it?s corny. Generally I try to think about when I was younger.
Thank you for reading and sharing.
John
Comment from JT traveller
Your descriptive powers bring this story to life, right down to the details of Mr Lazard's attire.
Vivid imagery created a wonderful read, "...thick red fluid oozing from the teeth of the saw..."
A fantastic and enjoyable read.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2023
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Your descriptive powers bring this story to life, right down to the details of Mr Lazard's attire.
Vivid imagery created a wonderful read, "...thick red fluid oozing from the teeth of the saw..."
A fantastic and enjoyable read.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2023
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Thank you for the great review.
John
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My pleasure.
Comment from Jamison Brown
Great story, John. Your descriptions had me believing I was there on the lawn watching. I enjoyed it. Well done. - Jamison
P S You had me worried on that trick with the saw...glad it turned out the way it did.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2023
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Great story, John. Your descriptions had me believing I was there on the lawn watching. I enjoyed it. Well done. - Jamison
P S You had me worried on that trick with the saw...glad it turned out the way it did.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2023
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I?m glad it had you believing the worst?
Thanks for a great review.
John
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
What a fun story, John. I enjoyed reading it.
The details of the magic show were great.
I could see all the kids watching closely and
being amazed. The sawing act was well described.
I'm thrilled Joey became a hero and was accepted by others.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2023
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What a fun story, John. I enjoyed reading it.
The details of the magic show were great.
I could see all the kids watching closely and
being amazed. The sawing act was well described.
I'm thrilled Joey became a hero and was accepted by others.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
Comment Written 23-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2023
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Thank you, Jan. Your review made my evening,
John
