Comment from lancellot

Exceptional

This is very nice. I am sure the FanStory Seniors will get a kick out of this. Well, I know don't know if it will happen to all of us. I don't plan on lasting more than another twenty years at the most. I'll pass on all the embarrassing stuff.

 Comment Written 14-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 15-Feb-2023

It may be preferable to the afterlife, however, depending on which direction you're going. Hey thanks for the 6 stars.

Comment from Jessica Wheeler

Exceptional

I loved it! This had me all smiles- an entertaining, hilarious, and well written piece. Also, manages to put forth an important message about the circle of life.
Well done, and thank you for sharing!
Jessica

 Comment Written 12-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2023

Thank you so much, Jessica, for the great review and all the stars. Very much appreciated. Jim

Comment from Nicki Nance

Exceptional

Just perfect, and so much more than humor. The graphic comes to life in the poem. Though the younger are the jokers, you make it abundantly clear that the joke is on them.

 Comment Written 12-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2023

Thank you so much, Nicki, for the great review and all the stars. Very much appreciated. Jim

Comment from bob cullen

Exceptional

An absolutely brilliant write. Humour is difficult to write, but you Jim have delivered it superbly. You've mastered the vocabulary wonderfully, though I do have one suggestion. In line two, verse two, you use, 'bout ever time it rains.' I'd change 'ever' to ev'ry' making it 'ev'ry time it rains.' To me it flows a little more smoothly.
Truly deserving of that sixth star. Can't wait to read more of your work.

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2023

Thank you so much, Bob, for your very kind review and all the stars. Very much appreciated. Glad you like humor poetry because that's mostly what I write.

If you'd like to see another one in this same style of old-timer hillbilly, see my poem Too Many Characters.

Jim

Comment from Dawn Munro

Excellent

Hahahahaha!!! -- I'll tell ya what that big word means--it's "changes fer the worse." (I loved it all, mind you...)

This is a perfect way to end my night on FanStory. Thank you for the laughs. :)

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2023

Thanks so much Dawn. Happy it made you laugh! Jim

reply by Dawn Munro on 12-Feb-2023

You are very welcome! A pleasure!

Comment from Rickie1

Exceptional

Jim

The picture caught my attention (who drew it?) and enticed me to read your poem. It is delightful. I'm 70 and can identify with much of it. Your humor made me smile. I like it when what I read does that. It makes the work stand out. Good job.

Rickie

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2023

Glad you enjoyed it, Rickie, and thanks for all the stars. Another one you might enjoy that's in the same vein is Too Many Characters. Jim

Comment from jacquelyn popp

Excellent

Great poem. I can definitely relate to the grunts and groans now and then, and aches and pains. It is very true that what goes around comes around. Especially it seems, as we do get older. Very cute poem. I really liked this. Nicely done. Your word flow was great, and rhyming pattern, pefectly done. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2023

Thanks very much, Jacqueline. Glad you enjoyed it. Another one you might enjoy that's in the same vein is Too Many Characters. Jim

Comment from Shirley E Kennedy

Excellent

Indeed it does.
A fun write with confronting truths for us all.
I thoroughly enjoyed your fine poem and I seethe image my children see in me.
I try to convince myself age is just a milestone but as I tick of your list -it seems... I'm getting old.
Blessings
Shirley

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 11-Feb-2023

Thanks, Shirley. I don't remember the exact point it first occurred to me that I'm an old geezer now. My wife and I just started teasing each other about our various foibles, and I think it just came gradually.

Comment from JT traveller

Excellent

I absolutely loved this poem. It reminded me of Pam Ayres style.

Yes, when we are younger we think we shall never grow old. It seems only yesterday I was 25 and getting married!

Great use of humorous language. Good meter and a wonderful energy to your poem.

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 11-Feb-2023

Thank you so much for the great review.

reply by JT traveller on 11-Feb-2023

Always my pleasure Jim Jacqueline

Comment from Michele Harber

Exceptional

I rilly like yer sense of humor, and that you displays it in fun dialict, usin' rilly good rhythm and rhyme. Yer poem made me smile a lot and, while I don't relate to it on quite the same level yit, I's certainly gittin' there! You expressed sum a the problims of agin', an' how the younger generation perceives it, rilly well, an' I appreciates the smiles an' laughs ya dun gave me.

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 10-Feb-2023

This is the funniest, best-written review I've ever gotten, Michele. Glad you enjoyed the spirit and dialect of the poem.

An' thankee kindly for all them stars!

reply by Michele Harber on 10-Feb-2023

Wut were funny 'bout it? I were jes sayin' ma reglar words in ma reglar way.

Seriously, I'm glad you enjoyed it. I figured one good laugh deserved another, and you certainly gave me one good laugh!