FREE(me)DOM
Being one's authentic self17 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Being true to ourselves is very important to me, to be without influence of others and to know inside what is right and to act upon it without being persuaded otherwise. Your poem is food for thought Sandra. We are individuals with choices and making the right choice takes courage and experience and we draw on our inner conscience and integrity when taking action. The world is full of pitfalls and obstacles and navigating is sometimes hard. We know in our heart what is right and wrong and may God give us the strength to do the right thing when the time comes, much enjoyed Sandra, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2023
Being true to ourselves is very important to me, to be without influence of others and to know inside what is right and to act upon it without being persuaded otherwise. Your poem is food for thought Sandra. We are individuals with choices and making the right choice takes courage and experience and we draw on our inner conscience and integrity when taking action. The world is full of pitfalls and obstacles and navigating is sometimes hard. We know in our heart what is right and wrong and may God give us the strength to do the right thing when the time comes, much enjoyed Sandra, love Dolly x
Comment Written 30-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2023
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Thanks for your review!
Comment from Ricky1024
I enjoyed the depth level into womanhood.
Being that I've not been able to classify myself in that particular situation, it was interesting the way it inferled.
Sometimes violent, sometimes marvelous and sometimes in a dreaming state of morbidality.
Thanks for sharing this and good luck in the contest.
Doctor Ricky
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2023
I enjoyed the depth level into womanhood.
Being that I've not been able to classify myself in that particular situation, it was interesting the way it inferled.
Sometimes violent, sometimes marvelous and sometimes in a dreaming state of morbidality.
Thanks for sharing this and good luck in the contest.
Doctor Ricky
Comment Written 28-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2023
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I appreciate your comments and the exceptional rating. The contest is over.
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
You are there. You just have to speak and you did. Do you have now found yourself! Congratulations! Excellent writing! I enjoyed reading.Best wishes!
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2023
You are there. You just have to speak and you did. Do you have now found yourself! Congratulations! Excellent writing! I enjoyed reading.Best wishes!
Comment Written 28-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2023
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Thanks for your comments and review.
Comment from karenina
Very powerful free verse, contrasting the tough armor you've worn to do battle with life's "slings and arrows" -- while never losing touch with that "unaffected song, muffled at the threshold of my childhood."
That is a fabulous line, pregnant with meaning... Among a series of superbly written passages!
How many would trade their "acquired swagger" for the unstained portrait before the frames of circumstance confined us!
Karenina
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2022
Very powerful free verse, contrasting the tough armor you've worn to do battle with life's "slings and arrows" -- while never losing touch with that "unaffected song, muffled at the threshold of my childhood."
That is a fabulous line, pregnant with meaning... Among a series of superbly written passages!
How many would trade their "acquired swagger" for the unstained portrait before the frames of circumstance confined us!
Karenina
Comment Written 26-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2022
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Your review is so well-stated and very astute. Thank you for your ongoing support.
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You are very welcome, Sandra!
Comment from Fleedleflump
This feels like the twin pulls I have within myself - the dominant shy guy (I enjoyed the implicit contradiction in there!) versus the writer who believes in his words. I love your stanza about your sardonic fork - it's visceral and stark, wielding honesty with power. I wish I still had a six to give you.
Mike
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2022
This feels like the twin pulls I have within myself - the dominant shy guy (I enjoyed the implicit contradiction in there!) versus the writer who believes in his words. I love your stanza about your sardonic fork - it's visceral and stark, wielding honesty with power. I wish I still had a six to give you.
Mike
Comment Written 26-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2022
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Mike, I appreciate your ongoing support. Thank you for hearing and understanding my poetic voice.
Comment from BermyBye50
Sandra,
You've penned another magnificent free verse. Your expertise and mastery of the narrative form of poetry is simply brilliant. Each stanza is well-written with a few expertly chosen words that personalizes the theme of the poem's title. This is a powerful write in keeping with your unique and thought provoking style.
All the best in the Free Verse Poem contest,
Eugene
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
Sandra,
You've penned another magnificent free verse. Your expertise and mastery of the narrative form of poetry is simply brilliant. Each stanza is well-written with a few expertly chosen words that personalizes the theme of the poem's title. This is a powerful write in keeping with your unique and thought provoking style.
All the best in the Free Verse Poem contest,
Eugene
Comment Written 22-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
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Thank you, Eugene, for your exceptional rating of my poem. I appreciate your ongoing support. Your encouragement is valued.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I loved this. I enjoy how the use of repetition works so well to share with us what you are wishing for and how those things aren't material but something more. Very creative and well written.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
I loved this. I enjoy how the use of repetition works so well to share with us what you are wishing for and how those things aren't material but something more. Very creative and well written.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
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Thank you so much for reading and reviewing my poem.
Comment from lyenochka
Your poem is just fabulous! I especially loved:
"I find myself wishing I could soar
like my dream characters,
above the perils of discerning dissimilarity,"
But I'm so glad that you can express yourself so well. As women, we often want to please and not offend. But as we get older, we become a bit bolder in expressing ourselves. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
Your poem is just fabulous! I especially loved:
"I find myself wishing I could soar
like my dream characters,
above the perils of discerning dissimilarity,"
But I'm so glad that you can express yourself so well. As women, we often want to please and not offend. But as we get older, we become a bit bolder in expressing ourselves. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 09-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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Thank you for reading and rating my poem. My mother said I was always this way. She said also that 3/4th of her gray hair came from me. I had 5 other siblings! lol
Comment from Terry Broxson
An excellent poem for this contest, good luck. Each verse creatively expresses a vivid emotion filled with rich imagery. I don't know which one I like best, but when they are all put together it is exceptional writing. Terry.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2022
An excellent poem for this contest, good luck. Each verse creatively expresses a vivid emotion filled with rich imagery. I don't know which one I like best, but when they are all put together it is exceptional writing. Terry.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2022
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Thank you, Terry, for your generous review. You are appreciated.
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi Sandra,
I love the richness of phrases, word combination and alliteration woven throughout this inspirational poem.
I find myself wishing I could pitch
my sardonic folk freely into life's lungs, ripping them open...
Powerful statement!
Dare-devilish puncturing my mundane breathings...
What a strong ending to this first verse.
I could go on raving about your colourful language use, for the more I read, and re-read this poem, I find all that I have enjoyed the first time around amplifying its intent.
As I read it... it actually takes on a melody and tempo of breathing... the up and down of the thoughts reflecting the 'you' through phases of your life.
I love the refrain of...
'I find myself wishing'...
It's very effective.
I find myself wishing,
despite my acquired swagger.
The end lingered, echoed in its statement... a great way to keep the/this reader engaged past the actual read of your poem. Not only a great way to end the poem, but also very clever.
All the very best in this contest Sandra... a truly magnificent free verse poem.
With our thoughts we create...
a state of mind.
Kind regards,
James.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2022
Hi Sandra,
I love the richness of phrases, word combination and alliteration woven throughout this inspirational poem.
I find myself wishing I could pitch
my sardonic folk freely into life's lungs, ripping them open...
Powerful statement!
Dare-devilish puncturing my mundane breathings...
What a strong ending to this first verse.
I could go on raving about your colourful language use, for the more I read, and re-read this poem, I find all that I have enjoyed the first time around amplifying its intent.
As I read it... it actually takes on a melody and tempo of breathing... the up and down of the thoughts reflecting the 'you' through phases of your life.
I love the refrain of...
'I find myself wishing'...
It's very effective.
I find myself wishing,
despite my acquired swagger.
The end lingered, echoed in its statement... a great way to keep the/this reader engaged past the actual read of your poem. Not only a great way to end the poem, but also very clever.
All the very best in this contest Sandra... a truly magnificent free verse poem.
With our thoughts we create...
a state of mind.
Kind regards,
James.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2022
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James, I am grateful for your glowing review of my poem. Thank you for always encouraging me to continue writing and continue writing the way that I do. I appreciate your generous rating and support.
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It was a true pleasure to read your free verse Sandra... for me it's my favorite style of writing poetry... so to read something that allows the mind to stretch out and interpret someone else's thoughts... well, it inspires me.
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Thanks, it's my favorite style of writing too.