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Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "The Curse Within"I dare you....
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Comment from angel of the quill
oh creeping up from tainted crypt
picking up a quill for the script
into the deepened shadows blend
a tale of horror that will not end
there I sit just happy as can be
being just plain ghoulish me
I will read and laugh like the imp
as i become the poet's chimp
I will write with playful style
thanking the poet all the while
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2006
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oh creeping up from tainted crypt
picking up a quill for the script
into the deepened shadows blend
a tale of horror that will not end
there I sit just happy as can be
being just plain ghoulish me
I will read and laugh like the imp
as i become the poet's chimp
I will write with playful style
thanking the poet all the while
Comment Written 08-Dec-2006
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2006
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hehehehe
thanx lots :-)
Comment from mmichelle97219
I think you met the challenge head on, and figuring you were working from someone else's dream, I think you did very well. It has a very eerie feeling to it. I think the font could be a little smaller the super size is a little too much. Otherwise a really good read.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2006
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I think you met the challenge head on, and figuring you were working from someone else's dream, I think you did very well. It has a very eerie feeling to it. I think the font could be a little smaller the super size is a little too much. Otherwise a really good read.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2006
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2006
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i had it one size smaller
but some others kept saying it was too hard to read lol
thanx lots :-)
Comment from rl dubour
The Curse Within good work, all I could picture in this is an angel in the right ear saying do good, do good, do good and the little guy with the fork saying don't listen do what ever you want have some fun, it is probably a good thing I moved him over to the ear that is harder of hearing, cause he used to get me in so much trouble! whooo and big time trouble too. I slept in the dog house and the dog slept inside that how bad I was, good work, ron
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The Curse Within good work, all I could picture in this is an angel in the right ear saying do good, do good, do good and the little guy with the fork saying don't listen do what ever you want have some fun, it is probably a good thing I moved him over to the ear that is harder of hearing, cause he used to get me in so much trouble! whooo and big time trouble too. I slept in the dog house and the dog slept inside that how bad I was, good work, ron
Comment Written 15-Jun-2006
Comment from wintersknights
well i bet one of my coworkers would say it was me.
anyway this is a very good take on the dream. frightening aspect to see the depths of your soul as an evil being. you did it very nicely and i enjoyed it a lot.
wk
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well i bet one of my coworkers would say it was me.
anyway this is a very good take on the dream. frightening aspect to see the depths of your soul as an evil being. you did it very nicely and i enjoyed it a lot.
wk
Comment Written 14-Jun-2006
Comment from Focused True North
Very intriguing, Shelley. You have presented this very well and it was interesting and enjoyable to read. You picked out a spooky font to go with it, too!
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Very intriguing, Shelley. You have presented this very well and it was interesting and enjoyable to read. You picked out a spooky font to go with it, too!
Comment Written 14-Jun-2006
Comment from Norbanus
Oh, man alive, you earned your five,
and brought that dream to verse.
On every line, you did just fine.
I know I'd have done worse.
But please don't fret, those beads of sweat,
squeezed out by fear and scream
will beat that twin, she'll never win.
She'll vanish with the dream.
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Oh, man alive, you earned your five,
and brought that dream to verse.
On every line, you did just fine.
I know I'd have done worse.
But please don't fret, those beads of sweat,
squeezed out by fear and scream
will beat that twin, she'll never win.
She'll vanish with the dream.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2006
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Mirror is a metaphor; one's curse of oneself is within in self-soul
It is a good work with clear message on challenge
The font is so odd and illegible; I could not read many words at my first attempt.
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Mirror is a metaphor; one's curse of oneself is within in self-soul
It is a good work with clear message on challenge
The font is so odd and illegible; I could not read many words at my first attempt.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2006
Comment from KING SLATON
I think I'm ready for some bright and cheerful dancing, singing, gleeful poetry from you about now. It's time to come into the sunlight and smile...
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I think I'm ready for some bright and cheerful dancing, singing, gleeful poetry from you about now. It's time to come into the sunlight and smile...
Comment Written 14-Jun-2006
Comment from 3G Aum
lots of repetition here. i guess it worked out okay with mirror but not so good with spine. it all read pretty run of the mill, to me. nothing spectacular. like glowing red eyes, wicked impish grin, chill went up my spine...all a bit cliche. i would take the idea and try to go somewhere new with it. just my own thoughts. ;)
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lots of repetition here. i guess it worked out okay with mirror but not so good with spine. it all read pretty run of the mill, to me. nothing spectacular. like glowing red eyes, wicked impish grin, chill went up my spine...all a bit cliche. i would take the idea and try to go somewhere new with it. just my own thoughts. ;)
Comment Written 14-Jun-2006
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
This is very well written you have definitely for filled lunas challenge with a very strong poem that is very well presented and I enjoyed I sure luna will enjoy this too regards Fuller
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This is very well written you have definitely for filled lunas challenge with a very strong poem that is very well presented and I enjoyed I sure luna will enjoy this too regards Fuller
Comment Written 14-Jun-2006
