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Viewing comments for Chapter 13 "Bobbing for laughs ;-)"I dare you....
9 total reviews
Comment from mmichelle97219
This is fun and read to me like an adult Dr. Sesus story. It is really a great piece of comedy, and the ending, although not for children, is classic. I laughed my butt off.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2006
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This is fun and read to me like an adult Dr. Sesus story. It is really a great piece of comedy, and the ending, although not for children, is classic. I laughed my butt off.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2006
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2006
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hehehe
glad ya liked it :-)
Comment from sengwriter
Shelly,
Challenges well met here as usual.
Somewhat in a little lighter vein,
Barring those last few lines
Where you two're busy for pleasure and pain.
Well done my friend.
Good and enjoyable poem.
Gautam
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Shelly,
Challenges well met here as usual.
Somewhat in a little lighter vein,
Barring those last few lines
Where you two're busy for pleasure and pain.
Well done my friend.
Good and enjoyable poem.
Gautam
Comment Written 04-Jun-2006
Comment from wintersknights
well it is very clear that the funny image of dear spongebob is not for children. I had to laugh and then enjoyed the ending.
good work my dear and may the humor continue.
wk
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well it is very clear that the funny image of dear spongebob is not for children. I had to laugh and then enjoyed the ending.
good work my dear and may the humor continue.
wk
Comment Written 03-Jun-2006
Comment from MikeSamford
OK! You got me -damn dog all I could see it that little dog, and you on a walk then the kids, then --you hit me right in the place it hurts most, my male ego! Damn good job I still have a smile on my face from the sudden image of your hubbies face!
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OK! You got me -damn dog all I could see it that little dog, and you on a walk then the kids, then --you hit me right in the place it hurts most, my male ego! Damn good job I still have a smile on my face from the sudden image of your hubbies face!
Comment Written 02-Jun-2006
Comment from luna
LOL I loved it -- the pic of Spongebob is priceless. The writing is really good and makes me want pizza. Loved the ending.....You're right, not for kids...should Spongebob have heard that???????? lol
thanx for sharing
J
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LOL I loved it -- the pic of Spongebob is priceless. The writing is really good and makes me want pizza. Loved the ending.....You're right, not for kids...should Spongebob have heard that???????? lol
thanx for sharing
J
Comment Written 02-Jun-2006
Comment from LateBloomer
Hey Shelley, You made me laugh!
The is quite a lively poem and all the colors make it livelier! This is a cute take on every-day life and I'm sure most of us can relate to some or all of this poem. However, why do I have a feeling that the most popular and memorable line of this poem is going to be:
"as I start my special blowjob!"
Yeah, I think you're gonna get a lot of smiles on that one and not just from Sponge Bob! LOL
On another note,
I'm not sure if you mean ... "a" kneel or "I" kneel in the following line:
as "a" kneel to scratch my dog's back 'cause she had a flea!
Good write, good job, and any day that we can laugh is a good day!
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Hey Shelley, You made me laugh!
The is quite a lively poem and all the colors make it livelier! This is a cute take on every-day life and I'm sure most of us can relate to some or all of this poem. However, why do I have a feeling that the most popular and memorable line of this poem is going to be:
"as I start my special blowjob!"
Yeah, I think you're gonna get a lot of smiles on that one and not just from Sponge Bob! LOL
On another note,
I'm not sure if you mean ... "a" kneel or "I" kneel in the following line:
as "a" kneel to scratch my dog's back 'cause she had a flea!
Good write, good job, and any day that we can laugh is a good day!
Comment Written 02-Jun-2006
Comment from KING SLATON
OK...the poem itself told a pleasant story but was not exactly what I would call poetic by nature. However, based on the ending of this work I find myself in a position of wanting to grant five stars just the same.
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OK...the poem itself told a pleasant story but was not exactly what I would call poetic by nature. However, based on the ending of this work I find myself in a position of wanting to grant five stars just the same.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2006
Comment from Patty Mazzurco
LMAO... Now how am I supposed to edit that out when I read him his poem.........lol
Too funny... Good job on this. I have to admit I was wondering how you could turn those words into something interesting...lol
*as a kneel (I)
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LMAO... Now how am I supposed to edit that out when I read him his poem.........lol
Too funny... Good job on this. I have to admit I was wondering how you could turn those words into something interesting...lol
*as a kneel (I)
Comment Written 02-Jun-2006
Comment from Swtdreamz
in the blue water wanted to play!- my gosh- this is bright-however i like spongebob
and yeha it remninds me of "gary" wanting to play in the "water"
the mess
'cause they are such slobs - well true- but it's fun being a kid- you get to make mistakes
we head to our own room, kissing and teasing, you moan..- yes- a pleasant night indeed
good job
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in the blue water wanted to play!- my gosh- this is bright-however i like spongebob
and yeha it remninds me of "gary" wanting to play in the "water"
the mess
'cause they are such slobs - well true- but it's fun being a kid- you get to make mistakes
we head to our own room, kissing and teasing, you moan..- yes- a pleasant night indeed
good job
Comment Written 02-Jun-2006
