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Viewing comments for Chapter 74 "outside my windows (edit: pt 1!)"I dare you....
14 total reviews
Comment from karenina
And now you've got my attention! Take me behind the snapshot!
How does that morning sun feel on your face? Is the terrace lovely, with flowers, or a simple concrete slab...
Is the apartment building welcoming?
Threatening?
Modern or decrepit? Shiny steel or brick walked graffiti?
How do those children sound?
Are they little tykes bubbling with laughter!?
Junior High cool kids and bullies???
Can you smell the bus fumes?
You cracked the color and gave us a peek!
Challenge: Flesh it out! Tell is more!
Karenina
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2022
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And now you've got my attention! Take me behind the snapshot!
How does that morning sun feel on your face? Is the terrace lovely, with flowers, or a simple concrete slab...
Is the apartment building welcoming?
Threatening?
Modern or decrepit? Shiny steel or brick walked graffiti?
How do those children sound?
Are they little tykes bubbling with laughter!?
Junior High cool kids and bullies???
Can you smell the bus fumes?
You cracked the color and gave us a peek!
Challenge: Flesh it out! Tell is more!
Karenina
Comment Written 04-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2022
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hmm.... will work on that today! thank you k :)
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challenge accepted and achieved! (it's 'outside my windows pt 2' :-)
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You aced it!
Love how you're taking on these challenges!
Comment from Cedar
Hello Shelley,
I can personally relate to this one. Although, I don't live in a city.
I am a country person and have been all my life. Due to my age and various health issues, I spend a lot of time on my front and back porch sitting and daydreaming.
I enjoyed this one very much. Have a great day...Bill
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2022
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Hello Shelley,
I can personally relate to this one. Although, I don't live in a city.
I am a country person and have been all my life. Due to my age and various health issues, I spend a lot of time on my front and back porch sitting and daydreaming.
I enjoyed this one very much. Have a great day...Bill
Comment Written 03-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2022
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sounds nice! thank you bill :)
Comment from BLACKTITANIUM86
Damn, I wish life was really that easy for me! And you did a good job with this. Keep writing. And don't forget to stop by. For, there is always something new on deck. Stay Connected
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2022
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Damn, I wish life was really that easy for me! And you did a good job with this. Keep writing. And don't forget to stop by. For, there is always something new on deck. Stay Connected
Comment Written 03-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2022
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thank you titan :-)
Comment from royowen
Perhaps you can share your daydreams with us, I was a very devoted daydreamer when I was a boy, I dream of many things that little boys dream of, I've shared a few of those drams, I wrote one yesterday, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2022
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Perhaps you can share your daydreams with us, I was a very devoted daydreamer when I was a boy, I dream of many things that little boys dream of, I've shared a few of those drams, I wrote one yesterday, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 03-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2022
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thank you roy :-)
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Welcome
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your free-verse poem describes the everyday sights and sounds we observe from within our homes on any normal day. These are the events that make up the biggest portion of life.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2022
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Your free-verse poem describes the everyday sights and sounds we observe from within our homes on any normal day. These are the events that make up the biggest portion of life.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2022
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thank you janice :-)
Comment from Terry Palardy
I like your style of poetry, and we share an affinity for some things. I once had a website titled Beyond Old Windows ... where I wrote every day. And then I forgot to renew the domain, and so lost it. Sometimes we lose things ... sometimes we miss them. I've had a lot of loss these past five years. I'm coming back here to read poems such as yours, to find inspiration for who I used to be. Thank you for writing.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2022
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I like your style of poetry, and we share an affinity for some things. I once had a website titled Beyond Old Windows ... where I wrote every day. And then I forgot to renew the domain, and so lost it. Sometimes we lose things ... sometimes we miss them. I've had a lot of loss these past five years. I'm coming back here to read poems such as yours, to find inspiration for who I used to be. Thank you for writing.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2022
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thank you terry :-)
Comment from Anne Johnston
Well done on this poem, describing what you see outside your window at different times of day, giving you inspiration for your writing. Everyone of us has different views from our windows.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2022
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Well done on this poem, describing what you see outside your window at different times of day, giving you inspiration for your writing. Everyone of us has different views from our windows.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2022
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thank you anne :-)
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You are welcome
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
I love your poem. The artwork drew me in immediately and set the tone. The color story adds a moodiness to your writing. I love reading free verse poetry. Well done.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2022
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I love your poem. The artwork drew me in immediately and set the tone. The color story adds a moodiness to your writing. I love reading free verse poetry. Well done.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2022
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thank you kl :-)
Comment from Jasmine Girl
Wow. You are living in the inner city so what you can see are walls and other windows. I have been to NYC a dozen times so I know. I'm glad in your day dream, you can see kids and school buses. Keep dreaming.
Well done.
You should write Ballad.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2022
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Wow. You are living in the inner city so what you can see are walls and other windows. I have been to NYC a dozen times so I know. I'm glad in your day dream, you can see kids and school buses. Keep dreaming.
Well done.
You should write Ballad.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2022
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i hear the kids and buses
not in the inner city - just a big apt complex lol
Comment from Teri7
This is a very interesting and well written poem about the things you see outside your window and heart from outside. You used very good descriptive words and very nice imagery from the art work you chose. Best wishes if this is a contest entry. love and blessings Teri
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2022
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This is a very interesting and well written poem about the things you see outside your window and heart from outside. You used very good descriptive words and very nice imagery from the art work you chose. Best wishes if this is a contest entry. love and blessings Teri
Comment Written 02-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2022
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thank you teri :-)
