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Viewing comments for Chapter 68 "under the light of the new moon"I dare you....
19 total reviews
Comment from karenina
Sizzle! Oh, I'd say you passed! I vaguely remember nights like this. Now it's heating pads and inhalers. Lol....
Time flies when you're getting old!
Karenina
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2022
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Sizzle! Oh, I'd say you passed! I vaguely remember nights like this. Now it's heating pads and inhalers. Lol....
Time flies when you're getting old!
Karenina
Comment Written 25-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2022
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hehe thank you karenina :)
Comment from R.B.Bunn
This really captures the feeling of young love and first love very well. Love the vivid imagery and storytelling. Especially since this was a challenge poem. Not quite certain if I like the final four lines but everything else was ace.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2022
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This really captures the feeling of young love and first love very well. Love the vivid imagery and storytelling. Especially since this was a challenge poem. Not quite certain if I like the final four lines but everything else was ace.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2022
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lol thank you rb :)
Comment from BLACKTITANIUM86
Hello Shelley. I see, your still studying your craft.
And that's how it's supposed to be. Nevertheless,
you definitely did your thing on this piece. Keep Writng.
And don't forget to stop by to talk. For, there is always something
new on deck. Stay Connected
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2022
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Hello Shelley. I see, your still studying your craft.
And that's how it's supposed to be. Nevertheless,
you definitely did your thing on this piece. Keep Writng.
And don't forget to stop by to talk. For, there is always something
new on deck. Stay Connected
Comment Written 23-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2022
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thank you titan :-)
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Not sure what illegal passion is, but you created a not so romantic meeting in a pick up truck here. I would like to challenge you to write a traditional sonnet? Can you manage that for me? Love Dolly x
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2022
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Not sure what illegal passion is, but you created a not so romantic meeting in a pick up truck here. I would like to challenge you to write a traditional sonnet? Can you manage that for me? Love Dolly x
Comment Written 23-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2022
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yes, i can do that! will work on it this week. thank you dolly :)
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I shall look forward to it, remember the iambic pentameter. Love Dolly x
Comment from jessizero
I liked your poem very much. You really captured the feel of the two teenagers "under the light of the new moon." Thanks for sharing this with the community.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2022
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I liked your poem very much. You really captured the feel of the two teenagers "under the light of the new moon." Thanks for sharing this with the community.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2022
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cool! thank you jessie :)
Comment from juliaSjames
Great response to the challenge. You set the scene well for this replay of love's first dance. The thrill of breaking societal norms is evident, alcohol, weed, teenage sex..
You use poetic licence with " under the light of the new moon" since the new moon isn't visible. Works well though as a metaphor for new beginnings..
Did you mean "illicit passion" at the end? I guess we've all been there at one time or another.
Thanks for sharing Shelley
Stay safe and blessed
Julia
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2022
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Great response to the challenge. You set the scene well for this replay of love's first dance. The thrill of breaking societal norms is evident, alcohol, weed, teenage sex..
You use poetic licence with " under the light of the new moon" since the new moon isn't visible. Works well though as a metaphor for new beginnings..
Did you mean "illicit passion" at the end? I guess we've all been there at one time or another.
Thanks for sharing Shelley
Stay safe and blessed
Julia
Comment Written 23-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2022
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thank you julia :-)
Comment from Carolyn Dooley
This will hit home to many. This was a great poem. Keep up the great work. The story is real to many. Have a great day. Keep safe. I enjoyed reading your realistic poem.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2022
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This will hit home to many. This was a great poem. Keep up the great work. The story is real to many. Have a great day. Keep safe. I enjoyed reading your realistic poem.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2022
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thank you carolyn :-)
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You are welcome.
Comment from jake cosmos aller
nicely done. This would make a great C and W song. You should send it around to a C and W songwriter and see if some one would pick it up. I can hear it now on a C and W station - not that I am that into C and W mind you. More of a blues man myself.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2022
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nicely done. This would make a great C and W song. You should send it around to a C and W songwriter and see if some one would pick it up. I can hear it now on a C and W station - not that I am that into C and W mind you. More of a blues man myself.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2022
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lol thank you jake :-)
Comment from lindafisher
Well you have certainly fulfilled the brief Shelley Kaye of drinking beer and trucks and a whole lot more. Yes you have passed with flying colours. Well done.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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Well you have certainly fulfilled the brief Shelley Kaye of drinking beer and trucks and a whole lot more. Yes you have passed with flying colours. Well done.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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hehe thank you linda :-)
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I enjoyed reading this challenge and would say you not only passed the challenge but surpassed it. LOL Thank you for accepting this change and sharing it with us. this is good.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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I enjoyed reading this challenge and would say you not only passed the challenge but surpassed it. LOL Thank you for accepting this change and sharing it with us. this is good.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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hehe thank you barbara :)
