The Chase
tiny tale about a big ape16 total reviews
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Ha, ha, ha such a funny story, Yeti and Big Foot romantic encounter that started as a quarrel over food, but ended up in an interesting friendship. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2022
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Ha, ha, ha such a funny story, Yeti and Big Foot romantic encounter that started as a quarrel over food, but ended up in an interesting friendship. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2022
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Thank you. Elaine
Comment from Gunner Lil
A nice short store where you let dialog take over to move it along. Great story for grade school children to read.
Maybe, Big Foot trips on an icy patch and falls shoulder deep in a snow bank. Only his butt is showing.
Hand them over.... should read, Hand them over...
Really enjoyed this read. Thank you!
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2022
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A nice short store where you let dialog take over to move it along. Great story for grade school children to read.
Maybe, Big Foot trips on an icy patch and falls shoulder deep in a snow bank. Only his butt is showing.
Hand them over.... should read, Hand them over...
Really enjoyed this read. Thank you!
Comment Written 03-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2022
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Thank you. Elaine
Comment from royowen
They are indeed very cute little people, but I know they are normally very timid, so this is one tough little dude, well done, what a great little story, good luck with this. entry, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2022
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They are indeed very cute little people, but I know they are normally very timid, so this is one tough little dude, well done, what a great little story, good luck with this. entry, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 03-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2022
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Thank you for reading and enjoying. Elaine
Comment from Bridge
I loved your cute little story. Guinea pigs are so cute. Very well written. I was with you right from the beginning to the end. Thanks for sharing.
With regards
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2022
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I loved your cute little story. Guinea pigs are so cute. Very well written. I was with you right from the beginning to the end. Thanks for sharing.
With regards
Comment Written 30-May-2022
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2022
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Thank you for a great review. Elaine
Comment from LisaMay
Oh, this is a charmingly delicious little story of wrong accusation and the beginning of a new friendship, well told with appealing humour.
Suggestions:
Slowly Bigfoot rises up (it is unnecessary to add 'up')
You said that your name is Yeti? My cousin is a yeti? (no question mark needed after yeti as it isn't a question but a statement. Use a full stop.)
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2022
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Oh, this is a charmingly delicious little story of wrong accusation and the beginning of a new friendship, well told with appealing humour.
Suggestions:
Slowly Bigfoot rises up (it is unnecessary to add 'up')
You said that your name is Yeti? My cousin is a yeti? (no question mark needed after yeti as it isn't a question but a statement. Use a full stop.)
Comment Written 30-May-2022
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2022
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Thanks for your suggestions. Thank you for enjoying my story. Elaine
Comment from John Ciarmello
This is cute and imaginative. The best ideas for stories are always gathered close to home or derived from a personal situation. It takes a good writer to take a workable idea and run with it. Well done!
reply by the author on 07-May-2022
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This is cute and imaginative. The best ideas for stories are always gathered close to home or derived from a personal situation. It takes a good writer to take a workable idea and run with it. Well done!
Comment Written 12-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 07-May-2022
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Thank you so much. I appreciate your encouraging words. Elaine
Comment from Chris Davis
Nice read. An ape being threatened by a feisty guinea pig. Great imagination. Loved the symbolism througout. I wonder how many humans think their Amazon items were stolen when only delayed.
reply by the author on 07-May-2022
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Nice read. An ape being threatened by a feisty guinea pig. Great imagination. Loved the symbolism througout. I wonder how many humans think their Amazon items were stolen when only delayed.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 07-May-2022
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Thank you so much for a positive review. Elaine
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
What a fun story, Mermaids. Love it. I'm thrilled the two
critters became friends in the end. I could see everything
as they talked. Your words were fun and descriptive. This
would make a great children's book.
embaressed --embarrassed
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 07-May-2022
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What a fun story, Mermaids. Love it. I'm thrilled the two
critters became friends in the end. I could see everything
as they talked. Your words were fun and descriptive. This
would make a great children's book.
embaressed --embarrassed
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 12-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 07-May-2022
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Thank you so much. Elaine
Comment from Spitfire
A David and Goliath story of a whole different nature -er- species. Love the reference to Amazon and a reminder that crooks do steal packages on people's doorsteps.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2022
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A David and Goliath story of a whole different nature -er- species. Love the reference to Amazon and a reminder that crooks do steal packages on people's doorsteps.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2022
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Thank you for enjoying my story. Happy New Year. Elaine
Comment from judiverse
It seems that small animals are unafraid of tackling the big ones. Yeti is pretty brave for standing up to Bigfoot. She is afraid he has stolen her precious bananas, but when she discovers her supply has just arrived, she is fine. It looks like the two will become good friends. Funny that the guinea pigs like banana yogurt. This is a delightful story, and I enjoyed very much. judi
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2022
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It seems that small animals are unafraid of tackling the big ones. Yeti is pretty brave for standing up to Bigfoot. She is afraid he has stolen her precious bananas, but when she discovers her supply has just arrived, she is fine. It looks like the two will become good friends. Funny that the guinea pigs like banana yogurt. This is a delightful story, and I enjoyed very much. judi
Comment Written 16-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2022
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Love your review. Thanks for reading and enjoying. Hope you had a wonderful holiday season. Elaine
