~ Back To The Past ~
A poem on The Good Old Days....11 total reviews
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello author, a poem of truth. I especially liked:
Playing with friends til the street lamps came on
Running & bike riding until our energy was gone
Time spent outside where parents didn't worry
(Those were the good 'ol days. Kids were free to play, and parents did not have to worry that harm would come to them. It's a time when neighbor looked after neighbor, and "almost" any adult could correct a child's behavior. It was a time when children said yes ma'am, yes sir, and backtalk was seldom heard.)
Nice rhyming. Well-chosen artwork choice. A pleasure to read. Thank you for taking me down memory lane.
LateBloomer
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2021
Hello author, a poem of truth. I especially liked:
Playing with friends til the street lamps came on
Running & bike riding until our energy was gone
Time spent outside where parents didn't worry
(Those were the good 'ol days. Kids were free to play, and parents did not have to worry that harm would come to them. It's a time when neighbor looked after neighbor, and "almost" any adult could correct a child's behavior. It was a time when children said yes ma'am, yes sir, and backtalk was seldom heard.)
Nice rhyming. Well-chosen artwork choice. A pleasure to read. Thank you for taking me down memory lane.
LateBloomer
Comment Written 16-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2021
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Thank you so very much for your beautiful, kind words. You gave me a very much needed smile tonight. I appreciate you
Comment from Ramona Scarborough
Loved the memories you chose. Perhaps by reading the poem aloud you would see some problems with meter. Some commas are in order throughout.
Wasn't happy with the last line. There are lots of other words that rhyme with days.
With a little more going over, I think this is a very worthy submission.
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reply by the author on 16-Dec-2021
Loved the memories you chose. Perhaps by reading the poem aloud you would see some problems with meter. Some commas are in order throughout.
Wasn't happy with the last line. There are lots of other words that rhyme with days.
With a little more going over, I think this is a very worthy submission.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2021
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Thank you so much for your complete honesty. I will definitely go back over and consider some changes.
Comment from Patty Palmer
Good old memories from way back when. Kids now days have no idea the fun we could have without electronic toys and computers. When we were young only big businesses might have used a computer but the computer was the size of an entire room~ Good luck with the contest~
Patty
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2021
Good old memories from way back when. Kids now days have no idea the fun we could have without electronic toys and computers. When we were young only big businesses might have used a computer but the computer was the size of an entire room~ Good luck with the contest~
Patty
Comment Written 16-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2021
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Back in the day it was so much fun. Truly kids today will never know sadly. Thank you so very much.
Comment from Liz O'Neill
Your final stanza pretty well sums it up. Many a reader will identify with the games you have mentioned. The setting will also ring familiar. You may even get some stories of their good ole days. Well done.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2021
Your final stanza pretty well sums it up. Many a reader will identify with the games you have mentioned. The setting will also ring familiar. You may even get some stories of their good ole days. Well done.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2021
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Thank you so very much my friend. I really appreciate your beautiful kind comment
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***smile***
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
A lovely sequence of reminiscing, looking back to those simpler less constricted times. It seems strange now to think that in fact all our gains have been losses.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2021
A lovely sequence of reminiscing, looking back to those simpler less constricted times. It seems strange now to think that in fact all our gains have been losses.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2021
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Thank you so much my friend. It sure does feel that more times passes the more we've lost
Comment from royowen
Yes indeed, I remember when things were simple, when, as a child, l could spend the evening at a friends place, and quite happily walk home in the dark, reading and swapping comics, a lovely time in my life, and yours. Loved your poem, you took me back, to the good old days, well done, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2021
Yes indeed, I remember when things were simple, when, as a child, l could spend the evening at a friends place, and quite happily walk home in the dark, reading and swapping comics, a lovely time in my life, and yours. Loved your poem, you took me back, to the good old days, well done, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 15-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2021
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Such great memories....thank you Roy for the awesome comment you posted. You made my day 😀
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Most welcome
Comment from Pantygynt
At first sight I thought this was a Shakespearean sonnet wit the three quatrains and couplet and it could said tat it was a kind of modern sonnet as the old rules no longer seem to apply. This is true to its rhyme scheme in couplets throughout, though its rhythms are more those of free verse, dependent on content, than on anything imposed from without.
A clear glimpse of those safer better days.
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2021
At first sight I thought this was a Shakespearean sonnet wit the three quatrains and couplet and it could said tat it was a kind of modern sonnet as the old rules no longer seem to apply. This is true to its rhyme scheme in couplets throughout, though its rhythms are more those of free verse, dependent on content, than on anything imposed from without.
A clear glimpse of those safer better days.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2021
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Wow....thank you for your beautiful words!! I appreciate you a great deal
Comment from oliver818
This is a nice poem with a sweet feel to it. I hope the good old days really were as good as you say. Personally; I prefer some things from the past and some from now for my own reasons. Thanks for sharing this and have a great day
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2021
This is a nice poem with a sweet feel to it. I hope the good old days really were as good as you say. Personally; I prefer some things from the past and some from now for my own reasons. Thanks for sharing this and have a great day
Comment Written 15-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2021
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Hello,
Thank you so very much. I appreciate your very sweet words 😀
Comment from Lloyd T. Okoko
The objective correlative of the work reminisces the protagonist's diary of a serene past.
The work highlights the not too easily wished away memories of the past; days, when playtime lasted longer than expected devoid of hassles; days, when nature comprised the only available toys devoid of electronics; and when friendship and bonds were so easily bonded.
The work earns its texture through the effective use of flashbacks and supportive anecdotes.
Excellent work. Bravo.
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2021
The objective correlative of the work reminisces the protagonist's diary of a serene past.
The work highlights the not too easily wished away memories of the past; days, when playtime lasted longer than expected devoid of hassles; days, when nature comprised the only available toys devoid of electronics; and when friendship and bonds were so easily bonded.
The work earns its texture through the effective use of flashbacks and supportive anecdotes.
Excellent work. Bravo.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2021
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Thank you so very much for the awesome, kind words. You started my day with a smile.
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Remain Blessed.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
You have shared your good old days, as a child you ever played long hours with friends till lights are on; you used no electronics, Nature was best used; friendships and bonds were easily fused; well said, well done; keep writing. ALCREATOR LITT DEAR
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2021
You have shared your good old days, as a child you ever played long hours with friends till lights are on; you used no electronics, Nature was best used; friendships and bonds were easily fused; well said, well done; keep writing. ALCREATOR LITT DEAR
Comment Written 15-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2021
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Thank you so very much!! You made my day 😀