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Life is to short sometimes2 total reviews
Comment from T B Botts
What an outstanding poem. I'm sorry for your loss. For reasons I can't comprehend, great sorrow gives birth to great writing. Perhaps we need to really experience pain to be able to tap into our muse. In any event, your pain radiated throughout your poem. Well done.
God bless and keep you.
Tom
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What an outstanding poem. I'm sorry for your loss. For reasons I can't comprehend, great sorrow gives birth to great writing. Perhaps we need to really experience pain to be able to tap into our muse. In any event, your pain radiated throughout your poem. Well done.
God bless and keep you.
Tom
Comment Written 23-Oct-2021
Comment from Carlos' girl
A small.correction stanza one:
..drips softly from the eves should be eaves.
Soft beautiful poem i love the flannel shirt appearing beginning and again end brings continuity to your thoughts. The illustration is perfect..black and white photography works well here with soft theme.
Stanza two could be clarified it's a bit muddled could be improved upon. Otherwise good entry very nicely done. Maybe insert another descriptive like you did with the aftershave. It was killer.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2021
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A small.correction stanza one:
..drips softly from the eves should be eaves.
Soft beautiful poem i love the flannel shirt appearing beginning and again end brings continuity to your thoughts. The illustration is perfect..black and white photography works well here with soft theme.
Stanza two could be clarified it's a bit muddled could be improved upon. Otherwise good entry very nicely done. Maybe insert another descriptive like you did with the aftershave. It was killer.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2021
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Thank you so much your time to review and comments are appreciated a lot. rb
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You're very welcome
