Empty Seat, Empty Life
a romantic story about seniors20 total reviews
Comment from C. Gale Burnett
I was interrupted 3 times as I was reading this story, which was all the better because I would go back to the beginning and re-read with as much interest as I had the first time and second time.
Loved the story of Walter's and Nora's senior romance. What I enjoyed, even more than the happy ending, was Walter's vulnerability. The dialogue was great. Their was wonderful and grand imagery. Really enjoyed the opening paragraph ... it sucked me right in.
Awesome entry for the contest!
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2021
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I was interrupted 3 times as I was reading this story, which was all the better because I would go back to the beginning and re-read with as much interest as I had the first time and second time.
Loved the story of Walter's and Nora's senior romance. What I enjoyed, even more than the happy ending, was Walter's vulnerability. The dialogue was great. Their was wonderful and grand imagery. Really enjoyed the opening paragraph ... it sucked me right in.
Awesome entry for the contest!
Comment Written 17-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2021
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What a treat it was to read this review and hear you read my story THREE times. I am delighted you enjoyed Walter and Nora?s story. It was fun to write. Thank you, C. Gale, so much for all those bright stars, too. Rod
Comment from Bill Schott
This story, Empty Seat, Empty Life, had me worried for a bit as Walter's lonely day at the slots seemed to add up to Nora's death. That made the ending even better.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2021
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This story, Empty Seat, Empty Life, had me worried for a bit as Walter's lonely day at the slots seemed to add up to Nora's death. That made the ending even better.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2021
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I am delighted I could give you a happy ending, Bill. Many thanks for sharing my story.
Comment from JudyE
What a great, heart-warming story. Poor Walter - but it's all good in the finish.
I have a few suggestions if that's okay but ignore you if you like.
gave them till three to gamble and had them back here at the community center no later than six. - I might have deleted 'here'
The other six days of the week. Nora had her life, and he had his. - replace period after 'week' with a comma
On most trips Nora had the luck. - comma needed after 'trips'
"Have fun, Walter. Win big!" . - the period at the end should be deleted
Usually he and Nora would break for lunch only after the crowd at the buffet had dwindled. - comma needed after 'Usually'
For awhile his luck turned. - two words - a while
The cheers began again as the bus load of gamblers found their sea-legs. - one word - busload
Best of luck in the contest.
Judy
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2021
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What a great, heart-warming story. Poor Walter - but it's all good in the finish.
I have a few suggestions if that's okay but ignore you if you like.
gave them till three to gamble and had them back here at the community center no later than six. - I might have deleted 'here'
The other six days of the week. Nora had her life, and he had his. - replace period after 'week' with a comma
On most trips Nora had the luck. - comma needed after 'trips'
"Have fun, Walter. Win big!" . - the period at the end should be deleted
Usually he and Nora would break for lunch only after the crowd at the buffet had dwindled. - comma needed after 'Usually'
For awhile his luck turned. - two words - a while
The cheers began again as the bus load of gamblers found their sea-legs. - one word - busload
Best of luck in the contest.
Judy
Comment Written 16-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2021
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Thank you very much, Judy, for taking the time to read my lengthy story so closely and making all those suggestions. I truly appreciate your efforts to make this a better story.
Comment from Mary Shifman
I liked your story and felt a little sorry for Walter and Nora, too. They had both waited so long for the big win and when Walter finally does make it, he's there without Nora, and she isn't there because she died! I think it's well written and I did enjoy it. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2021
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I liked your story and felt a little sorry for Walter and Nora, too. They had both waited so long for the big win and when Walter finally does make it, he's there without Nora, and she isn't there because she died! I think it's well written and I did enjoy it. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2021
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Mary, thank you for sharing my story, but please reread the ending. Nora did not die.
Comment from pookietoo
A humorous fiction story. Keep up with the story writing. Good luck to you always and best wishes. Keep smiling and sharing your feelings with us.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2021
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A humorous fiction story. Keep up with the story writing. Good luck to you always and best wishes. Keep smiling and sharing your feelings with us.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2021
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I am so pleased you enjoyed my Senior Romance. Many thanks for sharing.
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Comment from Patty Palmer
what a great story for this contest! I thoroughly enjoyed your entry. It held my interest from beginning to end. Good luck with the contest!
You have my Vote!
Patty
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2021
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what a great story for this contest! I thoroughly enjoyed your entry. It held my interest from beginning to end. Good luck with the contest!
You have my Vote!
Patty
Comment Written 16-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2021
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I am so pleased you enjoyed my lengthy Senior Romance, Patty. Thanks you so much for your praise and your vote.
Comment from lyenochka
Oh, that's sweet! I was worried that it would be a sad ending, and we'd find out that Nora died. But for some reason she didn't make it on the bus (wonder why texts would affect the phone ringing). It was her absence that confirmed his feelings for her. Perhaps they aren't just friends after all.
Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2021
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Oh, that's sweet! I was worried that it would be a sad ending, and we'd find out that Nora died. But for some reason she didn't make it on the bus (wonder why texts would affect the phone ringing). It was her absence that confirmed his feelings for her. Perhaps they aren't just friends after all.
Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 16-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2021
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Thank you so much, lyenochka, for sharing my lengthy story and your very kind praise.
Comment from Wendy G
A lovely story - I hope they both enjoy Monte Carlo in the Spring. Lol. I feared you were going to say that she had died! Well told, and imaginative - and fun. Oldies will relate too. Best wishes for your entry!
Wendy
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2021
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A lovely story - I hope they both enjoy Monte Carlo in the Spring. Lol. I feared you were going to say that she had died! Well told, and imaginative - and fun. Oldies will relate too. Best wishes for your entry!
Wendy
Comment Written 16-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2021
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I just had to give this story a happy ending, Wendy. I am so pleased you enjoyed it.
Comment from Zoë Ricard
Hi!
I really enjoyed reading this. It was sweet and sentimental and romantic. All the things I love. I think it's full of good stuff. A love story for the ages :)
Good luck in the contest!
Zoe
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2021
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Hi!
I really enjoyed reading this. It was sweet and sentimental and romantic. All the things I love. I think it's full of good stuff. A love story for the ages :)
Good luck in the contest!
Zoe
Comment Written 15-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2021
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This story was fun to write, and I'm so pleased you enjoyed it, Zoe. Many thanks for your kind praise.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This story was an excellent read, apart from the question of why Nora didn't go to the Casino that day. Personally I found leaving that issue unaddressed weakened the story as her absence seemed to be central to the story.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2021
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This story was an excellent read, apart from the question of why Nora didn't go to the Casino that day. Personally I found leaving that issue unaddressed weakened the story as her absence seemed to be central to the story.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2021
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Thank you so much for reading my lengthy story and your kind praise. It's not made clear till the very end that Nora was delayed by so many cell phone calls and texts she missed the bus.
