Woven Lives
Haibun for the contest28 total reviews
Comment from Patty Palmer
Your story with your poem is very descriptive and I could see how you might wonder about those you share a special memory. I haven't seen this style of poetry as yet but I look forward to experiencing new challenges as I learn on this site. Good luck with the contest!
Patty
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2021
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Your story with your poem is very descriptive and I could see how you might wonder about those you share a special memory. I haven't seen this style of poetry as yet but I look forward to experiencing new challenges as I learn on this site. Good luck with the contest!
Patty
Comment Written 11-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from tempeste
Ciao !
I gave you my vote because your prose is something I have often done and could connect to.
I used to watch the moon with my papa ' on summer nights and I would imagine others around the world were doing the same thing ..the moon was what connected us despite the great distances ..
.. different people from all walks of life .. some happy others sad or suffering like your Syrian orphan.
I like that you add the giant tortoise too ( biggrin)
I still watch the moon but it has become a bittersweet moment since my father passed away.
Your closing line sum up nicely your theme!
Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2021
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Ciao !
I gave you my vote because your prose is something I have often done and could connect to.
I used to watch the moon with my papa ' on summer nights and I would imagine others around the world were doing the same thing ..the moon was what connected us despite the great distances ..
.. different people from all walks of life .. some happy others sad or suffering like your Syrian orphan.
I like that you add the giant tortoise too ( biggrin)
I still watch the moon but it has become a bittersweet moment since my father passed away.
Your closing line sum up nicely your theme!
Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 11-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words. Thank you very much for the vote.
Comment from Patty Cicero
"starry windy night
over endless greenfields --
the air that binds us"
*a nicely done entry for this contest ! The air really does bind us all together
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2021
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"starry windy night
over endless greenfields --
the air that binds us"
*a nicely done entry for this contest ! The air really does bind us all together
Comment Written 09-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2021
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Thank you very much for such a kind and encouraging review. I really appreciate it. :)
May sunshine brighten your day ~~~<@
Gypsy
Comment from Ulla
Hola Marival, and it is a beautiful haibun. You took us round the globe from heaven to earth interspersed with historical moments. And then your haiku binds it all together. A wonderful entry. Thank you so much for participating in this contest I sponsored. Thanks so much, also, for your notes which explains the form so much better than I could do. The best of luck. Un abrazo. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2021
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Hola Marival, and it is a beautiful haibun. You took us round the globe from heaven to earth interspersed with historical moments. And then your haiku binds it all together. A wonderful entry. Thank you so much for participating in this contest I sponsored. Thanks so much, also, for your notes which explains the form so much better than I could do. The best of luck. Un abrazo. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 09-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2021
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I didn't know you sponsored this contest... thank you!
Thank you very much for such a kind and encouraging review. I really appreciate it. :)
May sunshine brighten your day ~~~<@
Gypsy
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I'm a member of a small haikuclub in Australia, and I was set a challenge to write a haibun. I got so carried away that I started this contest. My first ever poetry contest. I'm thrilled about the result. Ulla:)))
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job with your contest entry, Gypsy. This style is complex and somewhat difficult to make the prose and poetry parts fit together. I love the image--perfect for your well-thought out words. Your poem shows the human side of a mom while the prose shows the wonderment of a young girl. Your words create great imagery. I could see this as I read it. Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2021
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You did a great job with your contest entry, Gypsy. This style is complex and somewhat difficult to make the prose and poetry parts fit together. I love the image--perfect for your well-thought out words. Your poem shows the human side of a mom while the prose shows the wonderment of a young girl. Your words create great imagery. I could see this as I read it. Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 08-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2021
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Thank you very much, Jan. I appreciate it.
gypsy
Comment from Leann DS
Your idea for this poem was lovely. Tied together through the air... What a concept! It reminds me of when my daughter was about four years old and I was attending college. She would need to stay overnight at her grandparents house once a week, every week. We would both look up at the stars at bedtime and know that we were looking at the same ones. It would help us feel connected. The air, in your poem, does the same thing. Hugs and blessings, and thank you for creating and sharing this lovely poem.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2021
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Your idea for this poem was lovely. Tied together through the air... What a concept! It reminds me of when my daughter was about four years old and I was attending college. She would need to stay overnight at her grandparents house once a week, every week. We would both look up at the stars at bedtime and know that we were looking at the same ones. It would help us feel connected. The air, in your poem, does the same thing. Hugs and blessings, and thank you for creating and sharing this lovely poem.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2021
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thank you very much, Leann, I am glad it brought good memories
Comment from Anne Johnston
"The air that binds us." Your words give us something to really think about. Whatever we are enjoying at the moment, in the same air around the world, who knows what people are experiencing.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2021
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"The air that binds us." Your words give us something to really think about. Whatever we are enjoying at the moment, in the same air around the world, who knows what people are experiencing.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2021
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Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem. :)
gypsy hugs
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You are welcome
Comment from Miss Cookie Atkinson
I love the photo you chose to go with your story/ poem
I could imagine myself being there enjoying the nights breeze thinking of the people high be beyond the sky.
All one can do is pray them get home safe.
Thank you for sharing
Cookie
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2021
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I love the photo you chose to go with your story/ poem
I could imagine myself being there enjoying the nights breeze thinking of the people high be beyond the sky.
All one can do is pray them get home safe.
Thank you for sharing
Cookie
Comment Written 08-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2021
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Thank you very much, Cookie :)
gypsy
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Your more than welcome
Until next time
Cookie
Comment from papa55mike
I have learned to love this form and will write one soon. The memories of grandparents seem to dominate this contest. What a wonderfully written poem.
Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2021
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I have learned to love this form and will write one soon. The memories of grandparents seem to dominate this contest. What a wonderfully written poem.
Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 08-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from royowen
This is more like a haibun, not many can write them well, it's because of the clipped prose and short sentences with a relevant and understandable haiku. So well done Gypsy, good job, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2021
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This is more like a haibun, not many can write them well, it's because of the clipped prose and short sentences with a relevant and understandable haiku. So well done Gypsy, good job, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 08-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Gypsy
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Mmost welcome
