The Interview
Fate visits two men in different ways.137 total reviews
Comment from robg
Well structured story, easy to read and the style contributes to the smooth flow and quick pace of the story. Very effective use of dialogue and thoughts brings out the human side and the description of the elderly waitress plays with the emotions, leaving one concerned for her and wondering if she will feature later or in another story. Attention to detail (like the eating of the donut) adds to the authenticity.
Fantastic build up to the interview, but then it all fell a little flat for me. So much dramatic potential missed out on - like the resignation/retrenchment from the previous job being the result of a nasty incident, a corrupt boss, etc. What about Greg being over eager, faltering in the interview, etc.
I was waiting for a twist in the story, but Brad seemed only to keen to employ Greg - an unlikely situation given that Greg had previously struggled to find work. Or maybe this was the twist.
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2006
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Well structured story, easy to read and the style contributes to the smooth flow and quick pace of the story. Very effective use of dialogue and thoughts brings out the human side and the description of the elderly waitress plays with the emotions, leaving one concerned for her and wondering if she will feature later or in another story. Attention to detail (like the eating of the donut) adds to the authenticity.
Fantastic build up to the interview, but then it all fell a little flat for me. So much dramatic potential missed out on - like the resignation/retrenchment from the previous job being the result of a nasty incident, a corrupt boss, etc. What about Greg being over eager, faltering in the interview, etc.
I was waiting for a twist in the story, but Brad seemed only to keen to employ Greg - an unlikely situation given that Greg had previously struggled to find work. Or maybe this was the twist.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2006
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2006
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Thanks for the review, rob...I appreciate your comments. Will you be joining fanstory soon? Bob
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Yes Bob - in the process of signing up. Look forward t oyour next stroy.
Comment from aparna_a
magnificent! just outstanding!! no one will know till the last paragraph, what is coming in. i could feel the pressure of work and it just presented the scene alive in front of my eyes. i like this kind of last line jolt and feel that sometime they make one think about the story for a long time. a very good work of art, indeed!
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magnificent! just outstanding!! no one will know till the last paragraph, what is coming in. i could feel the pressure of work and it just presented the scene alive in front of my eyes. i like this kind of last line jolt and feel that sometime they make one think about the story for a long time. a very good work of art, indeed!
Comment Written 26-Jul-2006
Comment from Kimmbr
The story was very good. Your descriptions were great. As you continued to define your character, I remained as anxious as he was to find out if he got the job or ...something. Then "boom!', you literally made me jump with that ending, bringing in a reality that could be felt deep within. Great job! Now I will try my hand at one of these!
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The story was very good. Your descriptions were great. As you continued to define your character, I remained as anxious as he was to find out if he got the job or ...something. Then "boom!', you literally made me jump with that ending, bringing in a reality that could be felt deep within. Great job! Now I will try my hand at one of these!
Comment Written 08-Jul-2006
Comment from Marjorie D.
Very enjoyable. Well-written. The story gives a good sense of the nervousness Greg's going through. The bits of humor are nice touches. The dialogue was very believable and you handled the different "voices" of the Brad and Greg very well.
Well done!
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Very enjoyable. Well-written. The story gives a good sense of the nervousness Greg's going through. The bits of humor are nice touches. The dialogue was very believable and you handled the different "voices" of the Brad and Greg very well.
Well done!
Comment Written 04-Jul-2006
Comment from Shades
This story is terrific, your use of imagery and description is perfect, this is one of those stories that absolutely gripes the reader with it's plot, story line, imagery e.t.c.
This is an excellent piece of short story, Your story also enticed me with the use of humor, the ending was brilliant, your glistening talent shines through this piece. Well done!!!!
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This story is terrific, your use of imagery and description is perfect, this is one of those stories that absolutely gripes the reader with it's plot, story line, imagery e.t.c.
This is an excellent piece of short story, Your story also enticed me with the use of humor, the ending was brilliant, your glistening talent shines through this piece. Well done!!!!
Comment Written 12-Jun-2006
Comment from maureenmak
Excellent descriptions of people and places, especially in the beginning. It kept my interest and made me want to read on. The interview conversation itself wasn't very interesting to me, dragged on too long and didn't seem real that someone would just get hired so quickly and with so little interaction. But overall, very well written, kept my interest, and great descriptions that enabled me to visualize the setting and characters.
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Excellent descriptions of people and places, especially in the beginning. It kept my interest and made me want to read on. The interview conversation itself wasn't very interesting to me, dragged on too long and didn't seem real that someone would just get hired so quickly and with so little interaction. But overall, very well written, kept my interest, and great descriptions that enabled me to visualize the setting and characters.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2006
Comment from suzee
Great use of visual words to make the reader feel "there" with the characters. You feel Sanbetter's nerves as he waits to interview, and you see the surroundings through his eyes in vivid detail. You remember those times you have tasted the last thing you ate again due to stress! Wonderful characterization of both the interviewer and interviewee! Good descriptions including "thin lips," the Budweiser "paunch," and other ways to create life-like pictures in the readers' minds.
The ending was great--you had me right up to September 12!
Good story! I cannot offer any suggestions to make it better!
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Great use of visual words to make the reader feel "there" with the characters. You feel Sanbetter's nerves as he waits to interview, and you see the surroundings through his eyes in vivid detail. You remember those times you have tasted the last thing you ate again due to stress! Wonderful characterization of both the interviewer and interviewee! Good descriptions including "thin lips," the Budweiser "paunch," and other ways to create life-like pictures in the readers' minds.
The ending was great--you had me right up to September 12!
Good story! I cannot offer any suggestions to make it better!
Comment Written 07-Jun-2006
Comment from Diny
Just checking in to see what youv'e been up to A great story! The ending was priceless... Another gem in your cap!
My new job is a bit daunting to me- but I am having the time of my life learning new things- Now if I can just get used to these hours I would have it made!
write on always a pleasure to read... Now you made me want a jelly donut- shame on you... Diny
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Just checking in to see what youv'e been up to A great story! The ending was priceless... Another gem in your cap!
My new job is a bit daunting to me- but I am having the time of my life learning new things- Now if I can just get used to these hours I would have it made!
write on always a pleasure to read... Now you made me want a jelly donut- shame on you... Diny
Comment Written 03-Jun-2006
Comment from wintersknights
you know I said when I read that this was a very good story by how it began. then you pulled me along with excellent descriptions that made me able to visualize the surroundings and the characters. love this one and hate I missed the contest.
thank you.
wk
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you know I said when I read that this was a very good story by how it began. then you pulled me along with excellent descriptions that made me able to visualize the surroundings and the characters. love this one and hate I missed the contest.
thank you.
wk
Comment Written 27-May-2006
Comment from Dreamdancer
Hello my friend,
All I can say is Wow... This whole story-- it's as if it is told in first hand experience. Makes one think of their own existence and how fragile it is... Awesome write my friend... Buddy
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Hello my friend,
All I can say is Wow... This whole story-- it's as if it is told in first hand experience. Makes one think of their own existence and how fragile it is... Awesome write my friend... Buddy
Comment Written 26-May-2006
