Comment from royowen

Excellent

I like this style of poem Brooke, it has a good rhythm to it, this is a really great children's theme to it it would make a song, it has a positive upbeat tone toy it! It also has that great fantasy feel to it, nice abab rhyming, the meter is great, blessings, Roy.

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 26-Sep-2014

Roy, thank you so much :-) Brooke

Comment from Drew Delaney

Excellent

Very well written, Brooke. It would be very confusing to me to switch at this point when I am trying the opposite or shall I say iambic pentameter. Do you have a struggle when you change the rhythm like this?

Nice picture of Sawyer blowing swishing bubbles. Very cute.

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Sep-2014

Thank you, Drew, for your thoughtful comments :-) Brooke

Comment from Trybuck

Excellent

Dandelions, wands and bubbles
Sure things to end the troubles
Of a little one's mind

Well done with your entry, Buck

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Sep-2014

Buck, thank you so much :-) Brooke

Comment from flylikeaneagle

Excellent

adewperal: So well written with all the rhymes and rhythm. I like the seeds of silks and the meadows once as white as milk. Great visuals. Sawyer must be having a blast with you and his parents at the park! Precious memories, forever times and treasures! flylikeaneagle

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 26-Sep-2014

flylikeaneagle, thank you so much :-) Brooke

Comment from Phyllis Stewart

Excellent

A nice lesson in making the most of what you have instead of grieving for what you've lost. Not only kids need that message, I'm afraid.

Children, raise your magic wands << Great line. THat's the beauty of children... they do have wands and they WORK. I'm afraid my wand stopped working long ago. :)

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Sep-2014

Phyllis, thank you so much, my friend :-) Brooke

Comment from LIJ Red

Excellent

Emily Dickinson called the frost a blonde assassin. Under her poems do you detect a heart of steel as I do? This contest should be a doozy. Excellent poem, even if seeds
grieve softly.

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2014

Comment from mermaids

Excellent

Bubbles, dandelions,breezes, all the elements of fun. Your words take the reader to another world where the bubbles and dandelions rule. Excellent poetic form that evokes fun images and good feelings.

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Sep-2014

Elaine, thank you so very much :-) Brooke

Comment from Pili Pubul

Excellent

I enjoy reading this poem , my mood was a bit gloom , came right on time
to make me smile. Love Sawyer's picture so much. Love the style and delightful imagery, good message. Pili

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 26-Sep-2014

Thank you, Pili, for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke

reply by Pili Pubul on 26-Sep-2014

You are so welcome. Pili

Comment from l.raven

Excellent

Hi Brooke, you know how sad I am to see the Dandelions disappearing...Well...there's always next years...I love your poem...and of course I so love the picture...your so good at all these forms...sigh...very well written...luff Linda xxoo love

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Sep-2014

Linda, thank you so much :-) Brooke

reply by l.raven on 25-Sep-2014

you are so welcome Brooke...luff

Comment from jackpeg

Excellent

Delightful, again, and I don't have to tell you any more about the perfect meter. I must mention that on a couple of my other reviews (turns out they were both by the same poet, i.e. "oatmeal.") the meter was so ragged that I referenced you and Sally Yocom as excellent examples of how to properly execute those skills. Hope you don't mind. Maybe a new fan will come out of it.

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Sep-2014

Thanks so much, John. Oatmeal has been reviewing my poems for many a year :-) Brooke