Too Ordinary
an afternoon passes97 total reviews
Comment from seaglass
Since retiring, I have learn to savor the ordinary. Many of the actions and sensations you describe are the same with many of us. it is a good exercise to do...smell the roses
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2019
Since retiring, I have learn to savor the ordinary. Many of the actions and sensations you describe are the same with many of us. it is a good exercise to do...smell the roses
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2019
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Thank you.
Comment from Sonaleeka
Amazingly captivating and refreshing i can say.I enjoyed the journey along with your writing.Keep coming new poems.
God bless!
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2019
Amazingly captivating and refreshing i can say.I enjoyed the journey along with your writing.Keep coming new poems.
God bless!
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2019
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Thank you.
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi Victor - A good free verse - each stanza a little gem. I particularly like 'thunderstorm's peaceful violence'. very good. An enjoyable read. Regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2019
Hi Victor - A good free verse - each stanza a little gem. I particularly like 'thunderstorm's peaceful violence'. very good. An enjoyable read. Regards Dorothy
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2019
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Thank you, Dorothy.
Comment from Jackarrie
I enjoyed reading your muse, I did manage to shut of the frontal cortex, and I let my body enjoy it. Great to get into enjoyable moments as these. Well written, Mary
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2019
I enjoyed reading your muse, I did manage to shut of the frontal cortex, and I let my body enjoy it. Great to get into enjoyable moments as these. Well written, Mary
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2019
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Thank you, Mary.
Comment from kiwisteveh
Yes, I enjoyed this portrayal of your 'imprisonment', which you seem to have enjoyed as well, by the end.
That being said, I am a little puzzled by the title which suggests dissatisfaction, at odds with the comfort and the dance at the end of the piece.
Steve
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2019
Yes, I enjoyed this portrayal of your 'imprisonment', which you seem to have enjoyed as well, by the end.
That being said, I am a little puzzled by the title which suggests dissatisfaction, at odds with the comfort and the dance at the end of the piece.
Steve
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2019
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Thank you for reading, Steve.
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi Victor,
Random thoughts that can serve to sooth while in deep contemplation as the storm moves in. And storm always conjure nostalgia.
Nicely done.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2019
Hi Victor,
Random thoughts that can serve to sooth while in deep contemplation as the storm moves in. And storm always conjure nostalgia.
Nicely done.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2019
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Thank you.
Comment from SilverWoulfCreations
Enjoy this I did! Very well written. Resonating and skillfully crafted work of art. Thank you very much for sharing this expressive piece. Greatly enjoyed it!
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2019
Enjoy this I did! Very well written. Resonating and skillfully crafted work of art. Thank you very much for sharing this expressive piece. Greatly enjoyed it!
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2019
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Thank you.
Comment from Kausar_Javeria
Hello there~!
I'm glad your muse forced you to sit down and write, or else, we wouldn't have the opportunity to read such a wonderful poem.
Great Job!
The flow of words was smooth and every line had meaning to it. Well Done!
JazakAllah Khair~!
(God Bless~!)
(^_^)/~KAUSAR~(^_^)
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2019
Hello there~!
I'm glad your muse forced you to sit down and write, or else, we wouldn't have the opportunity to read such a wonderful poem.
Great Job!
The flow of words was smooth and every line had meaning to it. Well Done!
JazakAllah Khair~!
(God Bless~!)
(^_^)/~KAUSAR~(^_^)
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2019
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Thank you.
Comment from Bryana
Hi Victor, I love your poem, it slides down
the page in a way that it was fun to read it.
I like the last stanza...
a stumble
with confidence
becomes a dance
and I, the need
to tap it
Have a nice and inspiring week.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2019
Hi Victor, I love your poem, it slides down
the page in a way that it was fun to read it.
I like the last stanza...
a stumble
with confidence
becomes a dance
and I, the need
to tap it
Have a nice and inspiring week.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2019
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Thank you.
Comment from c_lucas
As we aged we turn from action to reflection. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. Good job.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2019
As we aged we turn from action to reflection. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. Good job.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2019
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Thank you, Charlie.