Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Part Two Chapter One"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from teacherdub
This part is definitely a "hook". It pulls the reader deeper into Anna's plight, but it also adds the context of hope with the arrival of Troy's message and revelation. Well developed plot scenario imbedded into the theme of family violence. Great job here. NO ERRORS FOUND. td
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2011
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This part is definitely a "hook". It pulls the reader deeper into Anna's plight, but it also adds the context of hope with the arrival of Troy's message and revelation. Well developed plot scenario imbedded into the theme of family violence. Great job here. NO ERRORS FOUND. td
Comment Written 14-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2011
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Thank you for the encouragement and the kind review.
Comment from RaymondJohn
Usual stylish writing. I'm not familiar with the story but the question is a good one. If she's married, why is she thinking about this guy. Realistic situations, good flow and pace. Best wishes. ray
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2011
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Usual stylish writing. I'm not familiar with the story but the question is a good one. If she's married, why is she thinking about this guy. Realistic situations, good flow and pace. Best wishes. ray
Comment Written 14-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2011
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She's thinking about this guy because he has been nice to her and her husband is an abuser. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from eliz100
This was a good read from beginning to end, as usual. You have described your male character as a white knight and given the reason so it is believable.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2011
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This was a good read from beginning to end, as usual. You have described your male character as a white knight and given the reason so it is believable.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from MS Writer
I guess I became a fan late because this story is new to me. I am very anxious for the next installment to see what happens. You can touch these characters and they speak like we would in the same circumstances. Great story.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2011
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I guess I became a fan late because this story is new to me. I am very anxious for the next installment to see what happens. You can touch these characters and they speak like we would in the same circumstances. Great story.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and encouraging words. This is only the second post in this story.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is a great chapter that you have here, barbara, i am glad you were able to save this post, it is a tender and emotional scene about someone who wants to helo this woman
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2011
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this is a great chapter that you have here, barbara, i am glad you were able to save this post, it is a tender and emotional scene about someone who wants to helo this woman
Comment Written 14-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Connie P
Don't you hate those glitches, they are few but maddening when they occur.
Troy may have good intentions after all. I despise Bobby. Any man who beats someone whose only option of defense is to kill him in his sleep is a dog.
Good chapter, I didn't spot any corrections needed.
Connie
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2011
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Don't you hate those glitches, they are few but maddening when they occur.
Troy may have good intentions after all. I despise Bobby. Any man who beats someone whose only option of defense is to kill him in his sleep is a dog.
Good chapter, I didn't spot any corrections needed.
Connie
Comment Written 14-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2011
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Thank you for your kind review. I hadn't thought of having Anna kill him. It just might work. Good idea.
Comment from N.K. Wagner
So very well done, Barbara. I like the way you just let the dialog take over. There was no need for anything else. Very well written (which is probably the reason EE was being so difficult). :D Nancy
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2011
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So very well done, Barbara. I like the way you just let the dialog take over. There was no need for anything else. Very well written (which is probably the reason EE was being so difficult). :D Nancy
Comment Written 14-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2011
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Thank you for your kind review. EE rarely bothers me, but he did this time.
Comment from Belinda
Wow, Barbara, this relationship between Anna and Bobby is scary. And along comes Troy. I, like Anna, would like to know more about this knight in shining armor. Very interesting chapter.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2011
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Wow, Barbara, this relationship between Anna and Bobby is scary. And along comes Troy. I, like Anna, would like to know more about this knight in shining armor. Very interesting chapter.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2011
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We will find out more about Troy, I promise. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from shy1250
Excellent and very realistic. I read this out of curiosity, having survived an abusive marriage. Although the abuse was largely verbal, I got in the habit of wearing turtlenecks so that when I did have to hide the bruises, no one wondered. Dialogue, both inner and outer, perfection. Intruiging; I hope she and troy can get it together! later, shy
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2011
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Excellent and very realistic. I read this out of curiosity, having survived an abusive marriage. Although the abuse was largely verbal, I got in the habit of wearing turtlenecks so that when I did have to hide the bruises, no one wondered. Dialogue, both inner and outer, perfection. Intruiging; I hope she and troy can get it together! later, shy
Comment Written 14-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2011
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Thank you for sharing your story. I hope you keep reading so I can gage and make sure I stay realistic.
Comment from R. K. Alan
Hi, Barbara. The two are becoming involved it seems. I wonder what his business is, maybe he works for a shelter since he said the baby would be welcomed. Need more... ray aka R. K. Alan
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2011
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Hi, Barbara. The two are becoming involved it seems. I wonder what his business is, maybe he works for a shelter since he said the baby would be welcomed. Need more... ray aka R. K. Alan
Comment Written 14-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2011
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His business. I will let you know much later. Troy has some secrets himself. Thank you for your kind review.
