Steve's Story-Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 35 "Redemption"A collection of my poems
97 total reviews
Comment from watergirl
Wow this is some story in poetic form! Your rhyming was great, and the story line really good. Redemption or no, it is a story full of meaning and concern. I liked it a lot.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2013
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Wow this is some story in poetic form! Your rhyming was great, and the story line really good. Redemption or no, it is a story full of meaning and concern. I liked it a lot.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2013
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Thank you!
Steve
Comment from Treischel
A long and delightfully well written story with a powerful message and a sweet gentle ending. Excellent ABAB rhyming throughout with consistent meter. Well crafted and versed. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2013
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A long and delightfully well written story with a powerful message and a sweet gentle ending. Excellent ABAB rhyming throughout with consistent meter. Well crafted and versed. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2013
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Thank you for the warm words.
Steve
Comment from Joan E.
I admired your alternating rhymes in these quatrains, along with your splendid meter--shades of Edgar Allen Poe in structure and theme! Your "film-reel" simile and "wolf" metaphor were quite vivid and your use of alliteration added to the intensity. Well done! Best wishes in the contest. Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2013
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I admired your alternating rhymes in these quatrains, along with your splendid meter--shades of Edgar Allen Poe in structure and theme! Your "film-reel" simile and "wolf" metaphor were quite vivid and your use of alliteration added to the intensity. Well done! Best wishes in the contest. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 11-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2013
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Joan, thank you so much for the thoughtful reading of the poem and the six stars.
Steve
Comment from Donya Quijote
Wow! What a tale! This would a great read around a campfire for sure. Fine rhyme no doubt. Fluid, well paced, and vivid imagery. Best of luck on the contest...
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2013
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Wow! What a tale! This would a great read around a campfire for sure. Fine rhyme no doubt. Fluid, well paced, and vivid imagery. Best of luck on the contest...
Comment Written 11-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2013
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DQ thanks for the great response to my tale.
Steve,
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DQ thanks for the great response to my tale.
Steve,
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DQ thanks for the great response to my tale.
Steve,
Comment from Mai Mai
Wow. This is a superbly written story. I love the duality of it and I was quickly drawn into to story being told. The piece is very creative, well paced and heart touching. Superb work and good luck.
Mai Mai
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2013
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Wow. This is a superbly written story. I love the duality of it and I was quickly drawn into to story being told. The piece is very creative, well paced and heart touching. Superb work and good luck.
Mai Mai
Comment Written 11-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2013
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Mai Mai, thanks a lot for the warm words and the six stars.
Steve
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Mai Mai, thanks a lot for the warm words and the six stars.
Steve
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Mai Mai, thanks a lot for the warm words and the six stars.
Steve
Comment from tfawcus
A marvellous poem, Steve. Overtones of Edgar Allen Poe in places. Some great images (eg the cloak of danger - a jerky film-reel blinking On a silent, dusty screen - the dark wolf, death). Much enjoyed!
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2013
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A marvellous poem, Steve. Overtones of Edgar Allen Poe in places. Some great images (eg the cloak of danger - a jerky film-reel blinking On a silent, dusty screen - the dark wolf, death). Much enjoyed!
Comment Written 11-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2013
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Tony, thanks for the kind words and the generous rating.
Steve
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Tony, thanks for the kind words and the generous rating.
Steve
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Tony, thanks for the kind words and the generous rating.
Steve
Comment from giovannimariatommaso
A wonderful fantastic poem and message that builds up to a climax with its cadences of fear and plateaus of calming respites, ending in the culmination of peace and love. I see no spelling or grammatical errors; the rhythm and rhyme are fitting.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2013
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A wonderful fantastic poem and message that builds up to a climax with its cadences of fear and plateaus of calming respites, ending in the culmination of peace and love. I see no spelling or grammatical errors; the rhythm and rhyme are fitting.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2013
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Thanks so much for the warm words and the six stars.
Steve
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Thanks so much for the warm words and the six stars.
Steve
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Thanks so much for the warm words and the six stars.
Steve
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The FanStory.com Computer was acting up last evening & it looks like you got 4 stars. In Fact FanStory.com had a bad computer day all day yesterday. giovanni
Comment from Dawn Munro
Yet again, your flawless rhyme and meter are only equalled by the marvelous imagery and sentiment evoked by your splendid writing. All the very best in this contest, with this masterpiece of story in a poem. A beautiful ABAB entry!
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2013
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Yet again, your flawless rhyme and meter are only equalled by the marvelous imagery and sentiment evoked by your splendid writing. All the very best in this contest, with this masterpiece of story in a poem. A beautiful ABAB entry!
Comment Written 10-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2013
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Dawn, thanks so much for the kind words.
Steve
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Dawn, thanks so much for the kind words.
Steve
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Dawn, thanks so much for the kind words.
Steve
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My pleasure, Steve!
Comment from TOMORAL
Whoa..what a gruesome story that left me breathless as you told of the bloody bodies of the children. Awesome tale, is it true? Perfect rhyme, meter and flow.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2013
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Whoa..what a gruesome story that left me breathless as you told of the bloody bodies of the children. Awesome tale, is it true? Perfect rhyme, meter and flow.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2013
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Thanks for the kind words.
Steve
Comment from emjaihammond
Wow, nicely done! I love a story inside the lines of a poem. This one is so well done and it never gets too long or looses it's appeal. The ending is perfect.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2013
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Wow, nicely done! I love a story inside the lines of a poem. This one is so well done and it never gets too long or looses it's appeal. The ending is perfect.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2013
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Thanks for the warm words and the six stars - appreciated.
Steve