The Animal Doctor
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Comment from Jade Lawson
as if a hot spring was welling up inside of her... I liked that.
Great descriptions of when they were involved and then I enjoyed how sweet he was talking to Eva. Great dialogue between these two. He said he loved her for the first time wow. Finally it seems that Nathan also loves her back. He learned to love her I guess. Well, I hope he comes back safe.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2013
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as if a hot spring was welling up inside of her... I liked that.
Great descriptions of when they were involved and then I enjoyed how sweet he was talking to Eva. Great dialogue between these two. He said he loved her for the first time wow. Finally it seems that Nathan also loves her back. He learned to love her I guess. Well, I hope he comes back safe.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much Angel for taking the time to read and review. I really do appreciate it.
Comment from PrincessinPurple
Wasn't expecting to walk right into a love making scene right off the back. I do like the chapter. It's a sweet chapter. I hope they end up together in the end.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2013
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Wasn't expecting to walk right into a love making scene right off the back. I do like the chapter. It's a sweet chapter. I hope they end up together in the end.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2013
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I held off for five chapters, smile. I thought it was time; Thank you for reading and reviewing.
Comment from barkingdog
This is a lovely chapter. Eva and Pete are so much in love. There love making and him fixing her breakfast, all the tenderness they shared is so touching. I got a kick out of the attitudes you mentioned about the car. It's not starting, people preferring the old means of transportation to the noisy vehicle. Old Pete is very authentic and proud to be driving.
In the beginning you use the phrases with the word 'like' many times. You may want to re-work that a bit.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2013
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This is a lovely chapter. Eva and Pete are so much in love. There love making and him fixing her breakfast, all the tenderness they shared is so touching. I got a kick out of the attitudes you mentioned about the car. It's not starting, people preferring the old means of transportation to the noisy vehicle. Old Pete is very authentic and proud to be driving.
In the beginning you use the phrases with the word 'like' many times. You may want to re-work that a bit.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2013
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I think you mean Eva and Nathan, not Eva and Pete. 1917, that would have meant a scandal. LOL Thank you for reading and reviewing. I'll take a look at those phrases again.
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Oops. My mistake. Sorry. Yes, Eva and Nathan.
Comment from Tomes Johnston
This story pulls on the heart-strings. It is an age old story of love and war. It is told with great skill and I was captivated by it right from the start. I managed to pick up the story fairly easily. Well done.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2013
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This story pulls on the heart-strings. It is an age old story of love and war. It is told with great skill and I was captivated by it right from the start. I managed to pick up the story fairly easily. Well done.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2013
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Thank you Tomes for your review.
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No problem.
Comment from Flamingbush
Great job with this, deep and full of feeling. Your descriptions are excellent, so is the dialogue. The way you weave this together takes great skill. I think it could use a warning concerning sexual content, but other than that I couldn't find any flaws. You've written this piece very well. Thanks for the author notes which help to clarify parts that might otherwise confuse.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2013
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Great job with this, deep and full of feeling. Your descriptions are excellent, so is the dialogue. The way you weave this together takes great skill. I think it could use a warning concerning sexual content, but other than that I couldn't find any flaws. You've written this piece very well. Thanks for the author notes which help to clarify parts that might otherwise confuse.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much for your review. I didn't use explicit language, so I thought I wouldn't need a warning. I hope you weren't offended. I'll give it a lot of thought, though.
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You're welcome and no, I wasn't offended. I just don't know how what you described might affect a younger reader. It's kind of hard to tell. Some have more vivid imaginations than others, but you weren't explicit, so more than likely no harm done. Thanks again for a delightful read.
Flaming
Comment from robina1978
I liked the way you wrote your intro. And amazing that the night before he left was the first time Nathan said "I love you" to Eva. He is brave to go and fight for his country and family.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2013
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I liked the way you wrote your intro. And amazing that the night before he left was the first time Nathan said "I love you" to Eva. He is brave to go and fight for his country and family.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2013
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Thank you robina for you review.
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welcome, Ine
Comment from Zue65
This story is a nice take off putting side by side the travails of love and the trials of war. There is nothing much yet in this first piece of course but the introduction of the lead characters but the scene of the waving of goodbyes is a prelude to the action that will turn out in the next pieces. Well done.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2013
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This story is a nice take off putting side by side the travails of love and the trials of war. There is nothing much yet in this first piece of course but the introduction of the lead characters but the scene of the waving of goodbyes is a prelude to the action that will turn out in the next pieces. Well done.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2013
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Thank you nassus for your review.
Comment from alexgeorge
Very well written love scene. And a red head too...lovely.
The dialogue and descriptions of the auto set the 1917 scene really well--clever way of putting us in the correct time frame. You paint a very vivid picture, amahra.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2013
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Very well written love scene. And a red head too...lovely.
The dialogue and descriptions of the auto set the 1917 scene really well--clever way of putting us in the correct time frame. You paint a very vivid picture, amahra.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much alexgeorge. I really appreciate you taking the time to read my chapter. I think, though, this is my last period story. whew! historical research is a Bleep, LOL I'm doing research right now, and my eyes are going together.
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Hang in there, for all our sakes.
Comment from chasennov
The Animal Doctor. 'Of Love And War.' An excellent chapter you have penned here which I really enjoyed reading, and I thought your formulation was neat too.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2013
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The Animal Doctor. 'Of Love And War.' An excellent chapter you have penned here which I really enjoyed reading, and I thought your formulation was neat too.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2013
Thank you so much.
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You're very welcome.
Comment from Mastery
Hello, Amahara. How did the surgery go? Itrust you are feeling well with it done and all.
This chapter is very sensuous and well-written. The descriptive and imagery are outstanding, my friend. Example:
"Eva arched her back until her soft flesh met the hard ripples on his abdomen; she rocked to the rhythm of multiple orgasms as he thrust his manhood like the beat of a soft drum. Beads of sweat rolled off their bodies like loose pearls. The sounds of their passionate cries filled the room and hovered over them like a sweet invisible fog. They lay panting and wet in each other's arms for what seemed an hour before Nathan finally broke the silence."
Wow! Good writing. Bravo, Bob (Mastery) (btw...i Just posted a new chapter today myself called "Lewis" and I would appreciate your opinion of course.)
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2013
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Hello, Amahara. How did the surgery go? Itrust you are feeling well with it done and all.
This chapter is very sensuous and well-written. The descriptive and imagery are outstanding, my friend. Example:
"Eva arched her back until her soft flesh met the hard ripples on his abdomen; she rocked to the rhythm of multiple orgasms as he thrust his manhood like the beat of a soft drum. Beads of sweat rolled off their bodies like loose pearls. The sounds of their passionate cries filled the room and hovered over them like a sweet invisible fog. They lay panting and wet in each other's arms for what seemed an hour before Nathan finally broke the silence."
Wow! Good writing. Bravo, Bob (Mastery) (btw...i Just posted a new chapter today myself called "Lewis" and I would appreciate your opinion of course.)
Comment Written 14-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much Bob for the review. I'm well, thank you. I was so busy writing my next chapter, I didn't check my notification, but I'll will certainly read it.
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:) Bob
