First Love Yourself
Lessons learned at fourteen38 total reviews
Comment from Shirley B
Dear Bill, This is a wonderful story. I am so sorry you had to learn it so early in life, but it is good that you remembered it. I am glad you took the message to heart and knew the problem was with Susie and not yourself. This is a great story. Thank you for sharing. Best of luck in the contest, Shirley
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2013
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Dear Bill, This is a wonderful story. I am so sorry you had to learn it so early in life, but it is good that you remembered it. I am glad you took the message to heart and knew the problem was with Susie and not yourself. This is a great story. Thank you for sharing. Best of luck in the contest, Shirley
Comment Written 07-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2013
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Thank you Shirley. You are most generous. I very much appreciate your support and encouragement. Bill
Comment from Dawn Munro
Wow. I really loved this story! Just a couple of tiny edits:
1) Typo - "apparently the only participation (it) encouraged..."
2) "Well. Bill, it could mean a lot of things." << the sentence after this seems to be missing a word.
This reads like fiction, it's so well done. Wonderful!
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2013
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Wow. I really loved this story! Just a couple of tiny edits:
1) Typo - "apparently the only participation (it) encouraged..."
2) "Well. Bill, it could mean a lot of things." << the sentence after this seems to be missing a word.
This reads like fiction, it's so well done. Wonderful!
Comment Written 07-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2013
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Thanks so much for reading and your kind comments. The correction was made. Regards, Bill
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Bravo! Wonderful story! Loud applause, followed by standing ovation! And here I am without any sixes to give this awesome story! This stands a very good chance of winning... good luck!
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2013
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Bravo! Wonderful story! Loud applause, followed by standing ovation! And here I am without any sixes to give this awesome story! This stands a very good chance of winning... good luck!
Comment Written 07-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2013
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Thank you Phyllis for the extremely kind feedback. If I were more concerned with sixes, I would never post at the end of the week. For me, I have to write in the moment. Warm regards, Bill
Comment from barkingdog
You were amazing at fourteen to get so much out of that Popeye cartoon. I think I remember it. I didn't like Bluto and thought Olive was making a big mistake.(It's Bluto not Brutus)
Fine story with natural dialogue. Enjoyable, non-stop read.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2013
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You were amazing at fourteen to get so much out of that Popeye cartoon. I think I remember it. I didn't like Bluto and thought Olive was making a big mistake.(It's Bluto not Brutus)
Fine story with natural dialogue. Enjoyable, non-stop read.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2013
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Thank you for the kind words. I'll check out the Bluto / Brutus thing. Lord knows I've killed a lot of brain cells in the last 50 years! Bill
Comment from c_lucas
You can be only what you are. No more/no less. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very philosophical read. Good job.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2013
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You can be only what you are. No more/no less. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very philosophical read. Good job.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2013
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Thanks Charlie, for reading and the compliment of the six. Especially appreciated since I posted late in the week. If you're like me, not many sixes left by Friday. Bill
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You're welcome, Bill. I save a few sixes for my more skillful writers. Charlie
Comment from Sasha
This is a wonderful and inspiring story. Knowing it is true adds significantly to the impact it had on me. I had a similar situation in school but mine didn't work out as well. Fortunately in time, the lesson I learned sank in and I was a much happier and better person because of it. This is an excellent entry for this contest and I sincerely wish you all the best.
I found one sentence that you may want to look at. It seems to be incomplete:
It could mean what she about just being friends.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2013
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This is a wonderful and inspiring story. Knowing it is true adds significantly to the impact it had on me. I had a similar situation in school but mine didn't work out as well. Fortunately in time, the lesson I learned sank in and I was a much happier and better person because of it. This is an excellent entry for this contest and I sincerely wish you all the best.
I found one sentence that you may want to look at. It seems to be incomplete:
It could mean what she about just being friends.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2013
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Thanks Sahsa - I did make that correction. I very much appreciate your help and support. Both mean a lot to me. I learned a lot of other things about life, not always good, but knowing yourself makes it darn hard to blame others. Warm regards, Bill
Comment from adewpearl
I didn't mean too - to
in encouraged was laughter - it
at a friends' house - a friend's - singular possessive
It could mean what she about - missing word/s
I loves you, Olive - add comma for direct address
I absolutely love this story, Bill and wish I still had a six left, but I'm all out. Great dialogue. Great character development. Excellent pacing to lead up to the point.
A warmly funny and touching story, one of your best :-)
Just for the record, from all the stories I've read about you as a boy, I'm pretty sure I would have fallen head over heels for you :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2013
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I didn't mean too - to
in encouraged was laughter - it
at a friends' house - a friend's - singular possessive
It could mean what she about - missing word/s
I loves you, Olive - add comma for direct address
I absolutely love this story, Bill and wish I still had a six left, but I'm all out. Great dialogue. Great character development. Excellent pacing to lead up to the point.
A warmly funny and touching story, one of your best :-)
Just for the record, from all the stories I've read about you as a boy, I'm pretty sure I would have fallen head over heels for you :-) Brooke
Comment Written 07-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2013
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Thank you so much for your continued support and your help. If I was really concerned about sixes, I would never post on Fridays! Your help and support mean a lot to me. If you had known me as a boy, I could have written you silly poems! LOL Bill
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I was a sucker for that kind of stuff - I married the photographer/artist/poet from school when I was just 19 and stupid LOL :-)
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My first marriage was to the beauty with no substance. I was stupid too!
Comment from Judy Couch
This is a cute story. At 14, you must have been quite mature to come to the conclusions you did. The story flows smoothly and is easy to follow.
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reply by the author on 07-Jun-2013
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This is a cute story. At 14, you must have been quite mature to come to the conclusions you did. The story flows smoothly and is easy to follow.
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Comment Written 07-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2013
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Thanks for reading Judy. In honesty, I was one month away from fifteen. Still a dumb kid! Bill