Losing You
Remembering my mother45 total reviews
Comment from sukeymackie
The poignancy of the memory is what calls out to me from this piece. Loved people are remembered and this is a nice memoir piece.
Spelling error on shrapnel.
Good job
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2012
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The poignancy of the memory is what calls out to me from this piece. Loved people are remembered and this is a nice memoir piece.
Spelling error on shrapnel.
Good job
Comment Written 15-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2012
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Thank you so very much for the rating and comments. I will correct that spelling error.
Comment from joann r romei
This is a strong piece and should get the attention it deserves, The first paragraph should be taken slower and broken into two separating the thoughts.The third paragraph can begin by saying my first memory is..
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2012
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This is a strong piece and should get the attention it deserves, The first paragraph should be taken slower and broken into two separating the thoughts.The third paragraph can begin by saying my first memory is..
Comment Written 15-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2012
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Thank you so much for your comments. I will take a look at your suggestions.
Comment from 3boysmom
I wouldn't change a thing. It is a beautiful memory or a sad event. I hope writing has continued to help your healing. I am submitting this again because for some reason the sixth star wasn't offered and I mistakely hit four. I'm sorry.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2012
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I wouldn't change a thing. It is a beautiful memory or a sad event. I hope writing has continued to help your healing. I am submitting this again because for some reason the sixth star wasn't offered and I mistakely hit four. I'm sorry.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2012
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Many thanks for your kind words. I really appreciate it, and five stars is fine. :-) Thank you.
Comment from Gooloom
I had a dream few days back when my son came in my dreams, embraced me aand said "I always want you to remember me like this healthy and well." I know what the pain of losing someone very very precious is! No it never never ever goes away. But for their sake we have to be cheerful and happy too--its painful but it has to be done. Yes ofcourse we will meet when the time comes--till then remmber their love days spent in their company and move on. You are a brave lady, U have the courage to write about your trauma. I am not so brave! Keep writing--you have a good style--never maudlin but sincere and to the point. Gooloom
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I had a dream few days back when my son came in my dreams, embraced me aand said "I always want you to remember me like this healthy and well." I know what the pain of losing someone very very precious is! No it never never ever goes away. But for their sake we have to be cheerful and happy too--its painful but it has to be done. Yes ofcourse we will meet when the time comes--till then remmber their love days spent in their company and move on. You are a brave lady, U have the courage to write about your trauma. I am not so brave! Keep writing--you have a good style--never maudlin but sincere and to the point. Gooloom
Comment Written 15-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2012
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Thank you so much. I am honored by your rating and your words. When the contest is over I will post the link to the other biographical story about the night I saw my mother again at the end of this one. I believe our loved ones do come back to us in our dreams to communicate. Hugs to you.
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thanks for understanding. Our loved ones are always there for us. They never really go away. They are just one thought away. If only more people could realize this truth! Unfortunately people like us are treated as morons or "spaced out"! Carry on and someday the truth will make itself mnown to all! Gooloom
Comment from Writingfundimension
This is a beautifully and thoughtfully composed contest entry. I lost my mother at age eight, and I still miss her. I'm sure that your wonderful writing will inspire many to take a look at their mom's a little differently and maybe visit or call a little more often. Nothing replaces a mother -- ever. Good luck!
Warmest regards, Bev
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2012
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This is a beautifully and thoughtfully composed contest entry. I lost my mother at age eight, and I still miss her. I'm sure that your wonderful writing will inspire many to take a look at their mom's a little differently and maybe visit or call a little more often. Nothing replaces a mother -- ever. Good luck!
Warmest regards, Bev
Comment Written 15-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2012
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Thank you so much. I am so sorry for your loss. Hugs to you. I really appreciate your comments and the rating.
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You're so very welcome, and I appreciate your kind thoughts very much. :0) Bev
Comment from paula ann
i read you story understanding every word and every feeling you wrote as it could have been me, speaking about my own mother. mothers are never replaced but we have our memories. thank you for sharing it was lovely.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2012
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i read you story understanding every word and every feeling you wrote as it could have been me, speaking about my own mother. mothers are never replaced but we have our memories. thank you for sharing it was lovely.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2012
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Thank you so very much. I really do appreciate it.
Comment from saychirah
Classic...just what the contest needs,an emotional non-fiction with a positive turn-out. I hope you win,am so looking forward to voting for you. Keep up the brilliant work of taking care of your kids & good memories. Best luck!
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2012
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Classic...just what the contest needs,an emotional non-fiction with a positive turn-out. I hope you win,am so looking forward to voting for you. Keep up the brilliant work of taking care of your kids & good memories. Best luck!
Comment Written 15-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2012
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Many thanks. I am so glad you enjoyed it. Much appreciated.
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
I read this with tears, knowing that at any age one loses a mother one feels like an orphan. And I know about those brief dreams or visions that seem to be gifts from God to give us another little visit. Good luck to you, Jeanie Merceer
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2012
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I read this with tears, knowing that at any age one loses a mother one feels like an orphan. And I know about those brief dreams or visions that seem to be gifts from God to give us another little visit. Good luck to you, Jeanie Merceer
Comment Written 15-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2012
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Many thanks for the wonderful review. It is much appreciated.
Comment from MissMerri
When a story actually makes tears run down my face, I know the writer has done a superb job of communicating her own emotion through her words. You've done that in this story. I didn't see any words or commas or fragments or anything to correct, except I think you've mis-labeled the category. You meant it to be biographical non-fiction I think. Right? Your story is excellently told and beautiful in every way. Obviously your mother had a great impact, and we do not ever stop missing those mothers. I know. Thank you for sharing this heart-felt piece. I loved it.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2012
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When a story actually makes tears run down my face, I know the writer has done a superb job of communicating her own emotion through her words. You've done that in this story. I didn't see any words or commas or fragments or anything to correct, except I think you've mis-labeled the category. You meant it to be biographical non-fiction I think. Right? Your story is excellently told and beautiful in every way. Obviously your mother had a great impact, and we do not ever stop missing those mothers. I know. Thank you for sharing this heart-felt piece. I loved it.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2012
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Wow. Thank you so very much for sharing that with me, and you are correct, I should correct the category and will do so. I am honored by your rating and your comments.
Comment from Karl_Schembri
I think maybe because you wrote it in a rush (unless you've edited already), it came out with the right dose of casual aesthetic, if you will, that makes it very genuine and touching. Death is the one thing that affects everyone except the deceased, for only the living can remember.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2012
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I think maybe because you wrote it in a rush (unless you've edited already), it came out with the right dose of casual aesthetic, if you will, that makes it very genuine and touching. Death is the one thing that affects everyone except the deceased, for only the living can remember.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2012
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Thank you so much, for your comments and the five stars. Both much appreciated.
