Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 16 "Part 3 Chapter 5"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from jclark
I was most intrigued by the sketching. It made me wonder how accurate I could be if I had to describe someone in my life (never mind the fact that my memory is getting so bad..lol) Can't wait to find out where she is.
Judy
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2011
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I was most intrigued by the sketching. It made me wonder how accurate I could be if I had to describe someone in my life (never mind the fact that my memory is getting so bad..lol) Can't wait to find out where she is.
Judy
Comment Written 18-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from tango494
I have read several other chapters in your book, and while this is not my normal reading material, I love how well you have developed your characters. Your dialogs flows so naturally and everything runs so smoothly together. You are truly a gifted writer. Best wishes and I can't wait to read more.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2011
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I have read several other chapters in your book, and while this is not my normal reading material, I love how well you have developed your characters. Your dialogs flows so naturally and everything runs so smoothly together. You are truly a gifted writer. Best wishes and I can't wait to read more.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2011
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Thank you for the kind review and encouraging words.
Comment from Chris Tee
Another good write here Barbara.
The story is now really taking shape and I think they must not let that horrible husband come near Anna once they find her.
Well done once again and thank you for sharing.
We hope you are getting better now.
Cheers
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2011
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Another good write here Barbara.
The story is now really taking shape and I think they must not let that horrible husband come near Anna once they find her.
Well done once again and thank you for sharing.
We hope you are getting better now.
Cheers
Comment Written 18-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from missy98writer
I was reading your reviews. A minute few are still giving nasty reviews believing they know it all about anything written. I think you did and excellent job. You show and don't tell. Your great dialogue and descriptive scheme drove the story along. I'm glad Troy's aunt was able to draw Anna's likeness. At least Troy remembered the freckles across Anna's nose. I look forward to reading your next chapter. Have a blessed day, my friend. I'm praying for you to rid your body of cancer. Love ya, Melissa.
PS: I like your details you wrote in this chapter, such as; flowered bag, bangs went behind her right ear, hair like honey, yum peach pie with vanilla ice cream and Aunt Margaret's talking about Troy and Anna getting together-- Troy was right when he told her;" don't put the cart before the horse."
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2011
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I was reading your reviews. A minute few are still giving nasty reviews believing they know it all about anything written. I think you did and excellent job. You show and don't tell. Your great dialogue and descriptive scheme drove the story along. I'm glad Troy's aunt was able to draw Anna's likeness. At least Troy remembered the freckles across Anna's nose. I look forward to reading your next chapter. Have a blessed day, my friend. I'm praying for you to rid your body of cancer. Love ya, Melissa.
PS: I like your details you wrote in this chapter, such as; flowered bag, bangs went behind her right ear, hair like honey, yum peach pie with vanilla ice cream and Aunt Margaret's talking about Troy and Anna getting together-- Troy was right when he told her;" don't put the cart before the horse."
Comment Written 18-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2011
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Thank you for your kind review. I tried to gently let that person that I disagreed and they basically said I didn't want to listen and only wrote to get praise from FS reviewers. Thank you for your support.
Comment from Aarondodd1989
Interesting how a piece about something so ordinary can be so enthralling. I have no ammendments, the piece works. The basic descriptive language used for the characters really complimented the extended descriptive comments used for the subject of the drawing. I don't know if that was intentional, just something I was aware of.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2011
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Interesting how a piece about something so ordinary can be so enthralling. I have no ammendments, the piece works. The basic descriptive language used for the characters really complimented the extended descriptive comments used for the subject of the drawing. I don't know if that was intentional, just something I was aware of.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2011
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Thank you for the kind review and encouraging review.
Comment from Piggies Grandma
This is another very cleverly written chapter Barbara. I enjoyed reading and it was very well thought out. I look forward to seeing if they find Anna.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2011
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This is another very cleverly written chapter Barbara. I enjoyed reading and it was very well thought out. I look forward to seeing if they find Anna.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from denhagan
This Part Three of chapter 5 was very interesting to read about Troy over at his parents house describing Anna, along with his dad, to his Aunt Margaret for her to sketch for them.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2011
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This Part Three of chapter 5 was very interesting to read about Troy over at his parents house describing Anna, along with his dad, to his Aunt Margaret for her to sketch for them.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You're welcome. Dennis
Comment from Readywriter52
This chapter seems to be about the sketch and each person's reaction to it. Troy has shown how involved he has become with Anna. Aunt Margaret seems to think that Troy is very serious about Anna.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2011
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This chapter seems to be about the sketch and each person's reaction to it. Troy has shown how involved he has become with Anna. Aunt Margaret seems to think that Troy is very serious about Anna.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2011
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I think Aunt Margaret is correct. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from gramalot8
Barbara, I think it would be so hard to describe someone for a picture like that, even if you know them very well. Just think how hard it must be for new acquaintances, or a stranger who you have to describe. But, in this scenario, hope it helps them find her. Good job as always.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2011
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Barbara, I think it would be so hard to describe someone for a picture like that, even if you know them very well. Just think how hard it must be for new acquaintances, or a stranger who you have to describe. But, in this scenario, hope it helps them find her. Good job as always.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from N.K. Wagner
A good chapter. Margaret must be some artist to get the sketch right so quickly from witnesses who know Anna so slightly and under difficult physical circumstances. :D Good job, Barbara. :) Nancy
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2011
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A good chapter. Margaret must be some artist to get the sketch right so quickly from witnesses who know Anna so slightly and under difficult physical circumstances. :D Good job, Barbara. :) Nancy
Comment Written 17-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
