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A science fiction book about genetic engineering.

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Comment from royowen
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It's amazing what our pride will tell us, and it lies to justify itself, as Archie is finding out by the probing question directed by wise old Sani. They have made it into and reasonably far into the desert. We have a lot of desert in Australia, but aboriginals have existed on food and water from various sources of survival for 40,000 years, foolish people die in the desert unless they know how to survive. Well done Rhonda, good story, (being a Texas girl you'd know about desert. Blessings, Roy

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2017


reply by the author on 29-Jan-2017
    Thank you for the excellent review and comments. I learned a lot from helping Fez with his books about the desert and survival. Unfortunately, just as I need his advice most, he's gone underground. Haha. I hope he surfaces well enough to give suggestions.

    Take care,
    Rhonda
reply by royowen on 29-Jan-2017
    Have a look for "bush tucker man" Rhonda, that might help,
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2017
    I actually have that book. I got it when I started helping Fez with his book. Thanks for the advice!
reply by royowen on 29-Jan-2017
    Well done Rhonda
Comment from prettybluebirds
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Excellent. I find this story absolutely fascinating. It is extremely interesting and draws this reader right into the story. It is one of those books I don't like to put down.

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2017


reply by the author on 29-Jan-2017
    Thank you so much. I appreciate the comments and support. I'll post another chapter as soon as I can get it ready.
    Take care,
    Rhonda
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
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Seems like they did get away, at least for now. I like the way they plan to hide under the ground to sleep... very clever of you to think of it. :)

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2017


reply by the author on 29-Jan-2017
    I actually have a friend who studied under a survival guru, and she has been my resource. There will be more of her advice as the book continues through the desert part, anyway.

    Thanks for your wonderful comments,
    Rhonda
Comment from mbroyles2
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I've been intrigued by this book from the start and now there is so much suspense with Archie and company on the run and the Cougar kin hot on their trails.
Truly a joy to read.
Michael

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2017


reply by the author on 29-Jan-2017
    Thank you for the six stars, Michael! It is as kind as it is welcomed!!
    Thank you for keeping up, as well.
    Have a great week,
    Rhonda
Comment from Heidi M
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Great job on this post, Rhonda. You put in a little bit of animosity between the two males, but not too much. I loved the description of the cave/tent/camouflage Sani devised. Really clever and it added authenticity to your story.
Does Ayala realize yet that Koko is pregnant?

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2017


reply by the author on 29-Jan-2017
    Hi, and thank you for the wonderful six star review, Heidi. How very generous!!
    To answer your question, no she doesn't yet, but Archie's about to spill the beans. i had it in this chapter, originally, but it made it way too long, so I'll post the rest later.
    Take care,
    Rhonda
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
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Wow I love the story line and the teaching you do at the same time. Excellently written and spot on interaction between the players.

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2017


reply by the author on 29-Jan-2017
    Thank you, Barb. Old Sani is full of wisdom, even though they don't always appreciate it. I have Sani as an older character to balance out all of the young characters. They have to have a voice of authority somewhere.

    Thanks again.
    Rhonda
Comment from Ulla
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Hi Rhonda, you've done a great job with this one and I'm so glad they've escaped. I bet the feel the same. Well written and I look forward to the next part. Prey, they don't get caught. All the best. Ulla:)))

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reply by the author on 29-Jan-2017
    Thank you, Ulla!! What beautiful shining stars!!

    The team has a pretty good lead, though I can't promise they won't come across opposition. After all, it wouldn't be a book without it, right??

    Thanks again,
    Rhonda
reply by Ulla on 30-Jan-2017
    So very true.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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I do like this story. You are doing a great job with it. I am so glad Sani is along on this escape. I feel they have a better chance with him. Good job.

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2017


reply by the author on 29-Jan-2017
    Thank you, Barbara.
    I can assure you, they wouldn't be able to do it without him! haha.

    I do appreciate all your time and attention to this book.
    Take care,
    Rhonda
Comment from robina1978
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A great photo of a bare tree that complements this chapter perfectly. Their initial escape seems to run smoothly. Archie even is the son of the president. Nice balance between dialogues and narrative.

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2017


reply by the author on 29-Jan-2017
    Thank you, Robina. If anything, I tend to go with too much dialogue and not enough description. I have to go back and put in details. I think, and this is just a theory, is because I talk to much...

    Take care,
    Rhonda
Comment from papa55mike
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This is the second story line I've read of yours. I loved the episodes of the Daredevil Girls I've read. This is a good plot and I like your cast of characters. Keep the coming!

Have a great day and God bless.
mike

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2017


reply by the author on 29-Jan-2017
    Thank you, Mike. I finally finished the Daredevil Girls a few weeks ago. I ran it for a whole year. I can't believe it!!
    Thank you for reading this one, as well.
    Have a great week,
    Rhonda