Unlikely Occurrence
Potlatch Prose Challenge47 total reviews
Comment from Spitfire
Most unlikely places-- the airplane or the thigh? An odd place to meet him too---a gay bar and she's with another woman. Michael could easily have misconstrued that. Maybe marriage was a cover up for both of them?
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2016
Most unlikely places-- the airplane or the thigh? An odd place to meet him too---a gay bar and she's with another woman. Michael could easily have misconstrued that. Maybe marriage was a cover up for both of them?
Comment Written 04-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2016
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Thanks so much. Everybody thinks they met in a gay bar, I think that's funny. All I meant was that the bartender was gay and therefore being sexist and not attending to her. Thanks again, Ulla:)))
Comment from michaelcahill
Great twist, Ulla. You did give some hints too, so you didn't cheat us at all.
My first wife left me for a woman, so I can relate. LOL Good times.
It's a strange feeling and certainly not exactly the same as being left for another man in my case or another woman in the case of your character. I guess there's the factor that you can't really compete and that takes some of the sting away. But then there's a whole lot of other factors. It didn't bother me though, she was an awful woman. HAHAHA! Great twist. Very inventive. mikey
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2016
Great twist, Ulla. You did give some hints too, so you didn't cheat us at all.
My first wife left me for a woman, so I can relate. LOL Good times.
It's a strange feeling and certainly not exactly the same as being left for another man in my case or another woman in the case of your character. I guess there's the factor that you can't really compete and that takes some of the sting away. But then there's a whole lot of other factors. It didn't bother me though, she was an awful woman. HAHAHA! Great twist. Very inventive. mikey
Comment Written 04-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2016
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Hi Mikey, hahaha. This is a great review. I'm so glad you liked it. The airline bit is true as I flew for more than twenty years, but never experienced the 'thigh thing' personally. hehe Don't know if I'd been as stoically as you. But of course you never know the circumstances. Glad you liked it. These potlatces are a blast. I love it. Ulla:)))
Comment from Sis Cat
Oh, well, so much for Michael. This is a charming, little story. I am glad Mary learned the truth about Mike early in their marriage. You sucked me in with your description of their courtship and surprised me with your ending. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2016
Oh, well, so much for Michael. This is a charming, little story. I am glad Mary learned the truth about Mike early in their marriage. You sucked me in with your description of their courtship and surprised me with your ending. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2016
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Thanks so much and I'm glad you liked it. All best. Ulla;))
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
An unwelcome surprise. Maybe they were at a gay pub. It kind of sounds that way. This is well written and I like the twist at the end. Good work, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2016
An unwelcome surprise. Maybe they were at a gay pub. It kind of sounds that way. This is well written and I like the twist at the end. Good work, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 04-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2016
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Thanks so very much. I'm glad you liked the wee story. All the best. Ulla:))
Comment from JP49
Lovely piece of flash fiction. You build the story so well then bam! the twist at the end. Well done. Your writing flowed beautifully, as normal, and kept my attention throughout.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2016
Lovely piece of flash fiction. You build the story so well then bam! the twist at the end. Well done. Your writing flowed beautifully, as normal, and kept my attention throughout.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2016
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Thank you so much and for a great review. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Oh my gosh, that is so terrible!!! I have to admit, that was one cruel twist! I figured she was going to find him cheating, but with another man, not so much! Very well done.
Good luck in the contest,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2016
Oh my gosh, that is so terrible!!! I have to admit, that was one cruel twist! I figured she was going to find him cheating, but with another man, not so much! Very well done.
Good luck in the contest,
Rhonda
Comment Written 04-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2016
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Hi Rhonda, thank you so much. I'm so pleased that you liked it. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I expected another woman but not a man. In today's society I should not make any assumptions. This is a very good story and I enjoyed reading.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2016
I expected another woman but not a man. In today's society I should not make any assumptions. This is a very good story and I enjoyed reading.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2016
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Hi Barbara, thanks so very much. All the best. Ulla:))
Comment from light
Well that was certainly an interesting outcome. I don't think anything surprises me any more.
You set this up well and held my interest.
Elaine
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2016
Well that was certainly an interesting outcome. I don't think anything surprises me any more.
You set this up well and held my interest.
Elaine
Comment Written 04-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2016
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Hi Elaine, thank you very much. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment from MelB
A good flash story, Ulla. My, that had to be a complete surprise for her! I know I would be shocked. A definite twist at the end of the story.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2016
A good flash story, Ulla. My, that had to be a complete surprise for her! I know I would be shocked. A definite twist at the end of the story.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2016
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Hi Melissa, thanks a lot . Glad you liked it. All the best. Ulla:)))
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You're welcome:)
Comment from c_lucas
I know of two cases where the woman unknowingly married a gay male. Neither married lasted. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words.
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2016
I know of two cases where the woman unknowingly married a gay male. Neither married lasted. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2016
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Thank you so very much and for your comments. All the best. Ulla:))