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Whose Love is Superior?

free verse

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Comment from Leineco
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They will do everything they can to convince us
this was a "radicalized Islamic terrorism" thing - a religious jihad
against America and immorality. But they will be lying. . .
protecting

the little club
some someone said
somewhere was law


This was, IMHO, pure homophobia
driven by man's misappropriation of religious documents
and fostered by fearful ignorance of love's true ubiquitousness

"it's written down
IT MUST BE SO"


I couldn't agree with you more

they died because of hate
and anyone who spreads hate
helped kill them


But hate is so much stronger than love - at least
in the hands of the masses and madmen.

Is it so hard to love thy neighbor as thyself?
Somedays (like 9/11 and 6/13) it seems, yes, it is impossible.

and I weep for man's flaws :-(







 Comment Written 14-Jun-2016


reply by the author on 15-Jun-2016
    I couldn't agree more. It's almost like it's a relief to say it's ISIS or some other agenda. I agree, this is pure hatred and homophobia and its a symptom of OUR society, nothing imported and inflicted on us. It IS us. Jeesh. How true what you say is, Is it so hard to love our neighbor as ourselves? Damn, it wouldn't seem like it would be. I guess it's pretty hard. Wow. I weep too. I hope tears are contagious. mikey
Comment from dragonpoet
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This free verse poem is long but it is a fast read. I like that when you talk mainly about love and not letting the idea of hate slither in, you use yellow print. That is the color of the light of the sun. Then why you switch to talk about hate you switch to red print for the blood spilled by hate.

I agree that everyone should be accepted and loved. If the terrorists were loved in the beginning maybe they wouldn't have become vengeful killers.

YOu use some good internal rhymes and some repetition for good effect.

Keep writing

dragonpoet

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reply by the author on 15-Jun-2016
    Ah. Thanks for noticing. I did try and keep the poetic devices and rhythm going here. And thanks for noticing the colours etc. I appreciate you taking the time to give such a thorough reading. Most appreciated. mikey
reply by dragonpoet on 15-Jun-2016
    You're welcome, Mikey.

    Joan
reply by dragonpoet on 17-Jun-2016
Comment from Ric Myworld
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I'm always for the person who speaks out, whether I agree or not. At least they make a stand for what they believe. I am also for any man or woman to live life as they choose. I don't judge, and neither should anyone else. Adults should be able to agree to disagree, and live their own lives any way they see fit, unless it hurts someone else. I just can't figure, how such seemingly simple standards can become so twisted that a hater would kill innocent people in the name of anything. I believe in God, but I don't believe in any religion or cult that would teach violence against our fellow man, woman, child, animal, or anything else. Why don't we learn to cherish our many similarities, rather than degrade and kill over our few differences. Thanks for the read. :-)

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reply by the author on 15-Jun-2016
    I'm not surprised we're on the same page, we usually are. You have the bottom line and I agree a hundred percent.
    Cherish our many similarities rather than degrade and KILL over our few differences. How true as true can be. There isn't a religion I've studied that doesn't say to love one another. The rest of the crap is nonsense. Thanks a bunch. mikey
Comment from sage17611
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This is a very powerful piece, I agree that we should not pass judgement on others. Who can "cast the first stone?" How can we say that our sins weigh less than the other person, passing judgment is a sin in itself. It is so much hatred in the world right now, we are definitely living in the last days. It's a shame that someone can pledge allegiance, and be brainwashed to the point of murdering innocent people. You bring some very interesting points to the surface, thanks for sharing.

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reply by the author on 15-Jun-2016
    I'm in full agreement with you. I think you state things perfectly and in most certain terms. Thanks for your insights and positive review. mikey
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
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I appreciate that you take a stand on this issue, it's so important to speak up on any equal rights issues but with the Orlando shootings is very important to speak up now. I'm very proud of you, Mike.

You start with a statement about an important point on the issue of gay marriage and just the right to love whoever you want. It's love! For christ's sake!

Color rivers... such a poetic way to express diversity and rainbow pride.
Why conceal humanity? We should not be categorized to stick into a box for the bigots of these world who are terrified by what they don't understand.

It's clever to call it ancient. Homosexuality has existed since the beginning of time. It's not a life style. Who in their right mind would choose to be the target of so much hate and victimization? People are so ignorant sometimes.
They think homosexuality is a disease people can catch or be connnived into. They won't open their mind for a minute to understand that it's not a sin it's something you are born with part of genetic structure, not something that can be masked, keep hidden in a closet, coerced into herosoexuality, brained washed, manipulated, etc and other evil ways to abuse human beings who all they ask for is respect, fair treatment, equality, a chance to persue happiness like every other human being can..

OMG!!!! The part of your poem in red gives me goosebumps and makes me want to give you the biggest hug you ever got and a huge smooch on your cheek. Bravo! Bravo! I'm so freaking proud of you right now I could nominate you for king of the word!

I would love to hear you recite this. Would you please record yourself? Please!

Love you, brother Mike.



 Comment Written 14-Jun-2016


reply by the author on 15-Jun-2016
    I'm so touched, Gypsy Friend and Queen. It's been such a struggle to get where we are now and they still don't want to accept things. Damn it. I was in the music forum listening to this song and thinking. I started writing and this came out. I so pleased you approve. I hope it reaches some people. What is wrong with love. Isn't that what God is? Any God and every God? I'm honored by your praise. I'm not the only one that feels this way by a long shot. I'm certainly one of the louder ones though. LOL Love to you and many thanks Sister Gypsy. Big Irish Hugs, mikey
reply by Gypsy Blue Rose on 15-Jun-2016
    To me, God is Love. It's the simplest form of religion and my motto in life is keep it simple, you moron. LOL no, not the ''you moron part''.

    My daughter and her life partner got married in Disneyland in 2013. They lived together five years before that so they have been a couple for eight years. If you met them, Mike, you would love them. They are the sweetest, most generous, and kind people you could meet. It hurts me when people call them names and it makes me so mad when they are treated unfairly. The same goes for everyone facing the same challenges.

    Thank you for the kind words, Brother Mike. God bless you. I love you, my friend. You are alright.
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2016
    Ah. Half my religion. God is love. The other half is, Do onto others as you'd have them do onto you. Pretty complex, yes?
    I don't tolerate name calling etc. It's a big mistake to do that in my presence. A very sad day for someone if they do that. They hate being confronted oddly enough, it turns out they're gutless cowards. Go figure. :))
    Well, thank you, Gypsy Queen, I just try and treat people the way they should be treated, no one deserves a medal for that. The world is pretty screwed up when being decent is some great thing. :)) mikey
reply by Gypsy Blue Rose on 15-Jun-2016
    I believe in that half too, ''do onto.....''
    It was more than doing the right thing, your poem was very well written and very emotional. It made me emotional too. LOL You and I at a pub drinking beer would end up in a crying match. LOL Too emotional LOL
Comment from Susanne M. Psyris
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Mikey, this is absolutely a great read! Loved every line in it. There is great alliteration in last two lines of fourth verse! Your internal and external sometime rhyme also contributes to a great writing and pleasurable read!!! God bless and hugs, Susanne

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reply by the author on 15-Jun-2016
    Hi, Susanne. Thanks for noticing that I DID try and keep it poetic. LOL
    I was in the music forum and I often just post a song and then start writing to the music. I decided to post this one. So pleased you enjoyed. I'll get caught up and do some reviewing soon. Thanks a bunch. mikey
Comment from Slythytove2
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A heart felt rendering of what seems to be wrong with the world and society in general. It's hard not to have these thoughts and universally human, especially in the wake of what happened in Orlando.

 Comment Written 14-Jun-2016


reply by the author on 15-Jun-2016
    I was in the music forum and wrote this to some music. Anyway, I decided to post it. Hope it has some value. Thanks so much, mikey
reply by Slythytove2 on 15-Jun-2016
    Music does seem to inspire thought, that's what its for, Oh- and mating too.
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
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Hi, Mikey

= It would be nice to live in a world where people, "Live and let live".
= So much hatred in the world. This is an excellent write.
= My dad always said, "Assholes are like opinions, everyone has one".
= Sadly, it's those same assholes who insist on inflicting their twisted and hatred to the lethal level.
= Excellent write, my friend.

(*>*) A Smile Is A Frown Turned Upside-down (*>*)
Cheers & Blessings ~ Jacqueline ~ Jackie ~ Jax

 Comment Written 14-Jun-2016


reply by the author on 15-Jun-2016
    I heard the same from my grandma with opinions first. LOL
    It's sad and I see it around here where it shouldn't exist AT ALL. Well. I got it off my chest. Maybe it will help. :))
    Thanks so much, mikey
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
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It's the story of human life, Mikey. We can never stop the hatred for those who merely think differently. Look at ISIS. They torture and kill anyone who doesn't adhere to THEIR beliefs, including people who don't even know what they believe. Each tribe/group has its own culture and belief system. For one to destroy another just for that difference is a cancer on all of humanity.

WE are not the guilty ones, not usually. We tend to be the victims at the moment. But... victims get angry and turn to hating what was done to them, and they end up doing it to others. Mankind has a brain capable of rational thought, yet they hardly ever use it. THey fall back on the inferior guide of emotion. Sad, but it won't change.

 Comment Written 14-Jun-2016


reply by the author on 15-Jun-2016
    It's so frustrating. Why can't everyone just live their lives. Life is rough enough without worrying about what others are up to. True, victims get angry and we get angry for victims. I know that all too well. Emotion is there ready to well up. Great insight and all things to keep in mind. Thanks so much, mikey
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
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Michael,
This is awesome. Your free verse flows smoothly with some rhyme. I like the way you presented your poem. The length did not deter me, a your lines read at a quick pace.

I knew immediately this was about the Orlando massacre. I do not know how anyone could not be affected by that act of terrorism in the name of ????

Your poem could be about that incident and about acceptance on any given day. Your artwork choice is awesome.

Thanks for sharing & caring. Jan

 Comment Written 14-Jun-2016


reply by the author on 15-Jun-2016
    Hi, Jan. I'm so thrilled you enjoyed and felt this. I know what a caring person you are so I'm not surprised. We just have to chose love and reject hate. It seems simple. Thanks so much. mikey