I've Seen Those Days
quatrains in abab rhyme165 total reviews
Comment from victor 66
There is a wonder to the rage of nature, as long as you're not in the middle of it. I find it both captivating and exhilarating. But a beautiful day with breeze, shimmering waves and sun are the best. Enjoyed your poem. Best wishes.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2014
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There is a wonder to the rage of nature, as long as you're not in the middle of it. I find it both captivating and exhilarating. But a beautiful day with breeze, shimmering waves and sun are the best. Enjoyed your poem. Best wishes.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2014
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victor, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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It has been a pleasure.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Such a cheerful, positive outlook in this wonderfully penned, excellently flowing piece, Brooke. How wonderful it must be to always know that the sun will break through the gloom...eventually. There is a light at the end of every proverbial tunnel...or so I'm often told.
Well done!
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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Such a cheerful, positive outlook in this wonderfully penned, excellently flowing piece, Brooke. How wonderful it must be to always know that the sun will break through the gloom...eventually. There is a light at the end of every proverbial tunnel...or so I'm often told.
Well done!
Comment Written 25-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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Dean, thanks so much, my friend :-) Brooke
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You know you're always welcome...
Comment from tony bronk
The sun and its warmth seems to be a popular theme lately, so you're missing out on some originality. Otherwise, I found your poem about the sea and its split personality exciting, and a good work in emotional blackmail by Mother Nature. Minus the ills that the sun can otherwise give, we all love and romanticize about the sun and its gentle, soothing warmth. Who really wants its foe? Not me. I long for spring and summer's sun almost as soon as the cold makes notice of its arrival. A good write.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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The sun and its warmth seems to be a popular theme lately, so you're missing out on some originality. Otherwise, I found your poem about the sea and its split personality exciting, and a good work in emotional blackmail by Mother Nature. Minus the ills that the sun can otherwise give, we all love and romanticize about the sun and its gentle, soothing warmth. Who really wants its foe? Not me. I long for spring and summer's sun almost as soon as the cold makes notice of its arrival. A good write.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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Thank you, Tony, for your thoughtful feedback. Brooke
Comment from Cajungirl
Exceptional ABAB contest entry. Your poem is beautiful and it is very well-written. I enjoyed the read. Even though we have hard times and bad days, looking forward to the good days keeps us strong.
Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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Exceptional ABAB contest entry. Your poem is beautiful and it is very well-written. I enjoyed the read. Even though we have hard times and bad days, looking forward to the good days keeps us strong.
Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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Cajungirl, thank you so very much :-) I truly appreciate your generous sixth star. Brooke
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You are welcome.
Comment from Eternal Muse
Oh God, Brooke, that was a beautiful work. A perfect entry for ABAB contest - appeased a nautical lover in me. Loved your use of feminine lines. A gorgeous picture to accentuate your words.
Loved those:
I've felt the pounding on the shore
as sands were disappearing
and heard the sounding of the roar
as if the end were nearing.
I think this is going to come out a winner. I know it will definitely place. I always know when your pieces do, Brooke, blame it on the Russian witchery in me (smile).
A great piece, my friend.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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Oh God, Brooke, that was a beautiful work. A perfect entry for ABAB contest - appeased a nautical lover in me. Loved your use of feminine lines. A gorgeous picture to accentuate your words.
Loved those:
I've felt the pounding on the shore
as sands were disappearing
and heard the sounding of the roar
as if the end were nearing.
I think this is going to come out a winner. I know it will definitely place. I always know when your pieces do, Brooke, blame it on the Russian witchery in me (smile).
A great piece, my friend.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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Thank you so very much, Yelena. Since you are such an excellent poet in the abab format, I am honored by your comments. Thank you also for your generous sixth star :-) Brooke
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If your piece doesn't win, I'll have to take a refresher course in witchery.
LMAO
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Let us just hope your witchy senses are in good working order :-) The committee has not be kind to me lately. I have a story poem in the current contest that is being decided in the next few days. If that one doesn't do well, I will know something is up.
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Brooke,
Lovely piece of poetry fulfilling all the desired norms and beautifully emitting positive waves!
Simple and impressive wording.
Smooth and enchanting flow throughout the poem.
Nice rhyming scheme with lively imagery and pictorial quality.
The most striking lines are:
"But I have also known the days
when raging waves receded
as sun shone down its loving gaze
and life was unimpeded."
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Last two lines of the last stanza.
Excellent! Good Luck!
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
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Hello Brooke,
Lovely piece of poetry fulfilling all the desired norms and beautifully emitting positive waves!
Simple and impressive wording.
Smooth and enchanting flow throughout the poem.
Nice rhyming scheme with lively imagery and pictorial quality.
The most striking lines are:
"But I have also known the days
when raging waves receded
as sun shone down its loving gaze
and life was unimpeded."
AND
Last two lines of the last stanza.
Excellent! Good Luck!
Comment Written 25-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
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RP, thank you so very much for your thoughtful response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from fairy77
Let's honestly hope so. It has been a very cold winter:(I'm really enjoying your class. I liked your rapping:)Nice job with this uplifting piece:)beth fairy77.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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Let's honestly hope so. It has been a very cold winter:(I'm really enjoying your class. I liked your rapping:)Nice job with this uplifting piece:)beth fairy77.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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Beth, thank you so very much :-) I'm so glad you're enjoying class. Brooke
Comment from Katzintx
You poem is good for structure and theme. It evokes emotion with it inference within word patterns. Nice work and picture choice .
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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You poem is good for structure and theme. It evokes emotion with it inference within word patterns. Nice work and picture choice .
Comment Written 24-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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Katzintx, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from Winslow
Dear Brooke,
A write that could only be written by one who loves life and is an optimist. For though the storm clouds come and go the warmth of the sun's return will restore us. Humans are capable of enduring a lot of pain, but sometimes the storms are horrific. The sun does return, but the cold may linger.
Warm regards,
Winslow
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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Dear Brooke,
A write that could only be written by one who loves life and is an optimist. For though the storm clouds come and go the warmth of the sun's return will restore us. Humans are capable of enduring a lot of pain, but sometimes the storms are horrific. The sun does return, but the cold may linger.
Warm regards,
Winslow
Comment Written 24-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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Winslow, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from twinklepoems
Perfect abab format,great imagery in "the days the sea has raged and drowned the shore in sorrow." Good end line with "when those stormy days occur I know they'll soon be warming."
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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Perfect abab format,great imagery in "the days the sea has raged and drowned the shore in sorrow." Good end line with "when those stormy days occur I know they'll soon be warming."
Comment Written 24-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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twinkle, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
