The Animal Doctor
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "The Saint Mary's Ball"Love Among the Thorns
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Comment from barkingdog
I enjoy your full descriptions of the dress of the time. It's pulls the reader into the time period.
Nate made quiet an impression with Margaret. She kissed him back. I love this budding romance.
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2013
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I enjoy your full descriptions of the dress of the time. It's pulls the reader into the time period.
Nate made quiet an impression with Margaret. She kissed him back. I love this budding romance.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2013
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Thank you for for this review my dear. Hope you'll continue to enjoy.
Comment from G.B. Smith
OH Amahra...
Lady, you deserve the six I do not have. This is so well crafted. Your dialogs and characters are superb, and I love the tenderness of the love scene at the end. You have a magnificent talent
Bear
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2013
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OH Amahra...
Lady, you deserve the six I do not have. This is so well crafted. Your dialogs and characters are superb, and I love the tenderness of the love scene at the end. You have a magnificent talent
Bear
Comment Written 01-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2013
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Oh thank you Bear. I really appreciate the five.
Comment from Schalk Jacobs
Brilliant, just love the flow of events and the strong descriptions. Not normally my type of reading genre but I must admit, I did enjoy it.
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2013
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Brilliant, just love the flow of events and the strong descriptions. Not normally my type of reading genre but I must admit, I did enjoy it.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2013
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Thank you Jacobs.
Comment from robina1978
I almost forgot you started this book. It is nice about this young and still training vet. Funny how the servants giggle about him. At the ball he receives much interest but he only fancies Margaret. Held my attention all the way and is very realistic.
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2013
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I almost forgot you started this book. It is nice about this young and still training vet. Funny how the servants giggle about him. At the ball he receives much interest but he only fancies Margaret. Held my attention all the way and is very realistic.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2013
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Thank you robina. Glad you enjoyed it.
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welcome and yes I did, Ine
Comment from Selina Stambi
A nice follow up to the first chapter, amahra!
Your characters are developing well. I'm still not too crazy about this doctor, though - he dumped a nice young girl! :)
Spags/suggestions
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downstairs (one word)
The poor little thing - suggest: poor thing ... he's not little, is he?:)
the Texas rich gave the important events - suggest: hosted important events
horseshoe-shaped (missed the hyphen)
sliced smoke(d) hams
filled the night (,) performing
dipping his wife and sending her thudding .... (better than which sent her thudding)
angelic (sounds better than angel-like)
hugged her hour glass figure (i'd stop there and drop 'round buttocks' - it doesn't sound quite ladylike!)
pulled her to his chest ... suggest: pulled her towards him
she slapped him ... more detail here ... slapped him on the wrist? on his cheek? lightly? hard? I would suggest lightly
sucked it and teased it with her own ... I would drop this line ... the response would be a little unladylike for the time.
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2013
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A nice follow up to the first chapter, amahra!
Your characters are developing well. I'm still not too crazy about this doctor, though - he dumped a nice young girl! :)
Spags/suggestions
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downstairs (one word)
The poor little thing - suggest: poor thing ... he's not little, is he?:)
the Texas rich gave the important events - suggest: hosted important events
horseshoe-shaped (missed the hyphen)
sliced smoke(d) hams
filled the night (,) performing
dipping his wife and sending her thudding .... (better than which sent her thudding)
angelic (sounds better than angel-like)
hugged her hour glass figure (i'd stop there and drop 'round buttocks' - it doesn't sound quite ladylike!)
pulled her to his chest ... suggest: pulled her towards him
she slapped him ... more detail here ... slapped him on the wrist? on his cheek? lightly? hard? I would suggest lightly
sucked it and teased it with her own ... I would drop this line ... the response would be a little unladylike for the time.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2013
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Thank you reachingforthestars for you keen eyes and great review. I really appreciate it my dear.
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always a pleasure to help dear aunty Harriett! :)) xxx
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LOL!
Comment from emjaihammond
You have such a talent for great descriptive scenes and characters as well. I enjoyed reading this, just as I did your last chapter. You handled the kissing scene with just the right emphasis. Romantic but not over the top. I look forward to the next chapter.
reply by the author on 31-May-2013
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You have such a talent for great descriptive scenes and characters as well. I enjoyed reading this, just as I did your last chapter. You handled the kissing scene with just the right emphasis. Romantic but not over the top. I look forward to the next chapter.
Comment Written 31-May-2013
reply by the author on 31-May-2013
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Thank you so much emjaihammond. I'm so glad you enjoyed it. I'm starting the next chapter now. Oh, I put more dialogue in the first chapter.
Comment from mikenbel
This is a very good story. I am not typically one for romance novels but this has just enough and yet not too much to be saccharine sweet. I like it! I noticed that in paragraph 73 - the word "jesters" - may be better as "jests".
reply by the author on 31-May-2013
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This is a very good story. I am not typically one for romance novels but this has just enough and yet not too much to be saccharine sweet. I like it! I noticed that in paragraph 73 - the word "jesters" - may be better as "jests".
Comment Written 31-May-2013
reply by the author on 31-May-2013
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Thanks for all of your help with my story. I really do appreciate it. I don't remember the word jesters.
Comment from adewpearl
Yes, you too, Ella - add comma for direct address
excellent descriptive detail of setting and characters
good use of natural-sounding dialogue
I'm coming, Pete - add comma
white-gloved hand - add the hyphen
good humor in his conversation with the driver
nice romantic/passionate tone in the final scene :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 31-May-2013
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Yes, you too, Ella - add comma for direct address
excellent descriptive detail of setting and characters
good use of natural-sounding dialogue
I'm coming, Pete - add comma
white-gloved hand - add the hyphen
good humor in his conversation with the driver
nice romantic/passionate tone in the final scene :-) Brooke
Comment Written 31-May-2013
reply by the author on 31-May-2013
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Thank you Brook. I went back and made the corrections. I'm glad you liked the passion in the last scene.
Comment from Titan Black
I grew up, watching classics, liks Shirley Temple; and even though your book have grown characters, I must say that you are an exceptional writer. You held my attention with witty sarcasm, and (subtle) sexual innuendo. Nevertheless, I can only hope, that the actuall book is as good as the coming attractions. Keep up the good work.
reply by the author on 31-May-2013
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I grew up, watching classics, liks Shirley Temple; and even though your book have grown characters, I must say that you are an exceptional writer. You held my attention with witty sarcasm, and (subtle) sexual innuendo. Nevertheless, I can only hope, that the actuall book is as good as the coming attractions. Keep up the good work.
Comment Written 31-May-2013
reply by the author on 31-May-2013
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Oh, thank you Titan Black. I really appreciate you feeling that way about my story and my writing. I'm so glad you liked it. And I still watch Shirley Temple and Bill Robinson. Smile.
Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens
This is an era I love. You have the setting and making of a great romance novel. I enjoyed every word of it. His brown eyed angel is most likely to be non-resistant from this moment on.. I found one edit, not bad for a full chapter.
:-)
collard---collared
Great job, Carolyn
reply by the author on 31-May-2013
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This is an era I love. You have the setting and making of a great romance novel. I enjoyed every word of it. His brown eyed angel is most likely to be non-resistant from this moment on.. I found one edit, not bad for a full chapter.
:-)
collard---collared
Great job, Carolyn
Comment Written 31-May-2013
reply by the author on 31-May-2013
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Thank you Carolyn. I'll make the correction immediately dear. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
