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I weep

An Elegy

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Comment from fdgsr
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A nice tribute to the folly of mortal man, struggling, as it were, with his nature wild. To eat the flesh of carrion, the buzzard dives. To grasp a fleeing hare, the raptor aims. To catch the running wildebeest, the crouching lion waits. To kill an innocent human being, the soldier fires. To send a message in the devil code, the terrorist strikes. 'Tis the price we pay for our humanity. Why?

 Comment Written 18-Dec-2012


reply by the author on 19-Dec-2012
    Thank you
Comment from Janet Foor
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"I Weep" is a profound message that goes deep into our hearts and really touches a nerve. I wept meets us at in all aspects of our lives. And then you take us to the next time, the next victim. Thank you for saying what needed to be said.
Blessings, Janet

 Comment Written 18-Dec-2012


reply by the author on 19-Dec-2012
    Thank. I'm not sure it needed to be said, but I needed to say it
Comment from Cornelius2000
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A very thoughtful and sensitive poem in response to the terrible massacre in Connecticut. You are more pessimistic than I, about what might lie ahead. The sense of outrage is deeper than I've seen before, and I have the feeling that those in positions to change things will be making an effort, and perhaps, this time, they'll be successful.

 Comment Written 18-Dec-2012


reply by the author on 19-Dec-2012
    Thanks. I don't know. The outrage just seems to be entrenchin people in their preconvictions,but I hope you're right
Comment from teresa.b
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You captured the raw emotion going through our heads beyond the loss of these innocent children. You touched on shame because we have been ignoring the past massacres. That touched a nerve for sure. This poem says what many don't want to acknowledge and that is so necessary now.

 Comment Written 18-Dec-2012


reply by the author on 18-Dec-2012
    Thanks for your review and generous score
Comment from Mary.Clark51
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I wept.. this is strong, deep and well worded. Bringing a lot of feelings to the surface and giving food for thought.
I want to thank you for sharing M

 Comment Written 18-Dec-2012


reply by the author on 18-Dec-2012
    No, thank you for reading and for your generous score
Comment from Mai Mai
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This is a beautiful, powerful piece. It clearly states what needs stating and challenges us to pick a side. Well I choose life and safety. If someone would start MAG (Mothers Against Guns) I would be a supporter (& maybe a member). Great work. Good luck.

Mai Mai

 Comment Written 18-Dec-2012


reply by the author on 18-Dec-2012
    Thank you. I'd rather people didn't pick sides, and rather worked together to fix the problem, regardless of dogma. Thanks for the generous score.
Comment from Rondeno
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You know, by now, that I like your work. But this is on another plane altogether. I'm not writing a lazy, facile point-grabber when I say, this is a truly great lament.

You'll have seen the (frankly crappy) stuff put on here by many Americans, fumbling in their ham-fisted way to express something that you have nailed so neatly.

This poem of yours is full of brilliant lines - wonderful things that I wish i could have written. But it's more than that. You've caught what everyone is trying to say.

It's about the raw tragedy of it all, and about self-loathing. And dead children, younger than my clothing.

I'll stop here, before this lifts off into some kind of dire doggerel. But your poem should be on websites, TV screens, in newspapers ... It's magnificent.

 Comment Written 18-Dec-2012


reply by the author on 18-Dec-2012
    You're too kind. I wish to God I could go back to writing doggerel.
reply by Rondeno on 18-Dec-2012
    What's that thing Hamlet says?

    I could be bounded by a nutshell,
    And count myself king of infinite space ...

    Doggerel is cosy.
Comment from artemis53
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Very well done, Snodlander. I couldn't bring myself to write about this tragedy that has been placed upon the innocent. My candles are lit and days are spent in prayer.

 Comment Written 18-Dec-2012


reply by the author on 18-Dec-2012
    Thank you
Comment from Titanx9
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I've read several poems that paid tribute to the school massacre, but this one said something different. It looks beyond now, this moment, to the future of senseless deaths yet to ensue if something is not done.

"
So pick a side, it matters not who for,
Pro gun or not, it circles endlessly.
A new year dawns, blood-red like those before.
I weep for all the victims yet to be."

Great job!

 Comment Written 17-Dec-2012


reply by the author on 18-Dec-2012
    Thank you
Comment from expressions9
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This is an excellent poem snodlander. You have expressed real empathy and a broken heart for the evil tragedy of that day in Newtown and for others now and in the future. There is much food for thought in your writing.

Thanks for sharing....

Christine

 Comment Written 17-Dec-2012


reply by the author on 18-Dec-2012
    Thank you
reply by expressions9 on 18-Dec-2012
    You're welcome.