Another Jackie O
Written in Chicago doing the beat clubs 196369 total reviews
Comment from Ric Myworld
I read little poetry and don't know the first thing about it. But, like prose, or general conversations, it's basically words, which consume most minutes of everyone's days and keeps us up-to-date on what others are thinking. Great job! And thanks for sharing.
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I read little poetry and don't know the first thing about it. But, like prose, or general conversations, it's basically words, which consume most minutes of everyone's days and keeps us up-to-date on what others are thinking. Great job! And thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2024
Comment from Jacob1395
I really liked the flow of this piece which kept me really engaged in the writing and I thought it was excellent how you brought the story of this person to life. A well written piece, I enjoyed reading it.
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I really liked the flow of this piece which kept me really engaged in the writing and I thought it was excellent how you brought the story of this person to life. A well written piece, I enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2024
Comment from BermyBye50
easyeverett1,
You are not only a highly talented poet but a brilliant story teller also. There are a medley of various creative verses, phrases and metaphor creatively composed and state government place throughout this poem, with a story that has a beginning a middle and an striking end.
All the best,
Eugene
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easyeverett1,
You are not only a highly talented poet but a brilliant story teller also. There are a medley of various creative verses, phrases and metaphor creatively composed and state government place throughout this poem, with a story that has a beginning a middle and an striking end.
All the best,
Eugene
Comment Written 19-Jan-2024
Comment from Treischel
I think I'm speachless, probably because this incredible stream of consciousness sucked my breath away. About the only word that comes to mind is WOW! My mind is twisted from reading it. The alliterations, the poetic imagery, the names, the rush. Sheesh!
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I think I'm speachless, probably because this incredible stream of consciousness sucked my breath away. About the only word that comes to mind is WOW! My mind is twisted from reading it. The alliterations, the poetic imagery, the names, the rush. Sheesh!
Comment Written 19-Jan-2024
Comment from Ulla
Hi there, I see this and read this poem as being written by someone who is utterly confused about what is happening around him. I see this was written in 1963 and it needs to be understood in that context. The whole world went upside down back then. At least in the Western world. Ulla:)))
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Hi there, I see this and read this poem as being written by someone who is utterly confused about what is happening around him. I see this was written in 1963 and it needs to be understood in that context. The whole world went upside down back then. At least in the Western world. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 19-Jan-2024
Comment from John Ciarmello
I'm trying to understand this piece as your reference to Jackie O is woven in deceit and hate. I'm guessing she is used as an Idol and not a reference to the actual person but rather the times and your recollection of events.
The sixties were as good and as bad as today in retrospect. Best, JohnC
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I'm trying to understand this piece as your reference to Jackie O is woven in deceit and hate. I'm guessing she is used as an Idol and not a reference to the actual person but rather the times and your recollection of events.
The sixties were as good and as bad as today in retrospect. Best, JohnC
Comment Written 19-Jan-2024
Comment from jenintorre
Wow wow wow! This is a masterpiece. I love character studies especially in a poem and this one is truly brilliant. It is definitely worth more than a mere 6 stars.
The best poem I've read for a very long time. Love Jen.
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Wow wow wow! This is a masterpiece. I love character studies especially in a poem and this one is truly brilliant. It is definitely worth more than a mere 6 stars.
The best poem I've read for a very long time. Love Jen.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2024
Comment from Jonadab Ezerie
You use words and phrases that evoke a sense of despair and desolation. You employ literary devices such as alliteration ("ragged faded lady hoarder") and metaphor ("milky-eyed maiden"). Good job; I will read more of your piece.
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You use words and phrases that evoke a sense of despair and desolation. You employ literary devices such as alliteration ("ragged faded lady hoarder") and metaphor ("milky-eyed maiden"). Good job; I will read more of your piece.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2024
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This poem is half-rap, half-narrative. I liked this part best:
time is always lazy for a lady goin' crazy;
midnight, brain-drain, middle of the boulevard,
ragged lady bag-hag, screamin' out her rage.
and also:
with her hag-bag shop rags
ready to go.
This is a lady with an attitude, it sounds like.
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This poem is half-rap, half-narrative. I liked this part best:
time is always lazy for a lady goin' crazy;
midnight, brain-drain, middle of the boulevard,
ragged lady bag-hag, screamin' out her rage.
and also:
with her hag-bag shop rags
ready to go.
This is a lady with an attitude, it sounds like.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2024
Comment from Christine Currie
Like you, I am a returning FanStorian, so we have that in common. I think this poem is what we used to call 'DEEP' in the Old Days. I don't claim to completely understand it, it would take more than one reading for me to understand it to the point of being able to do it justice, but in the meantime, I can tell you that I enjoyed reading it. Very vividly written. Thanks for sharing it.
I look forward to reading more of your writings.
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Like you, I am a returning FanStorian, so we have that in common. I think this poem is what we used to call 'DEEP' in the Old Days. I don't claim to completely understand it, it would take more than one reading for me to understand it to the point of being able to do it justice, but in the meantime, I can tell you that I enjoyed reading it. Very vividly written. Thanks for sharing it.
I look forward to reading more of your writings.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2024
