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Comment from petalangela
I am a poet that writes from my soul I have no knowledge of the correctness of poetry. My sister calls me Shakespeare because my words are feree in more way than one,
So when I read a poem like this one, that touches my soul I am enthral led by its message all else nothing. The message is clear the words a beautiful the artwork stunning
reply by the author on 22-May-2015
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I am a poet that writes from my soul I have no knowledge of the correctness of poetry. My sister calls me Shakespeare because my words are feree in more way than one,
So when I read a poem like this one, that touches my soul I am enthral led by its message all else nothing. The message is clear the words a beautiful the artwork stunning
Comment Written 21-May-2015
reply by the author on 22-May-2015
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THis came from the soul rather than out of the rule book. I only looked at that to see how I could break them Im so glad you enjoyed it. And Thanks for this review.
Comment from inside echo
Two very sad stories in one, yet connected. A love between two that had never been together, then lost. A storm... The tsunami that struck was so terribly heart wrenching. For this girl, and many others, more than just the loss of homes and belongings, of loved ones and lives. But also the loss of so many futures, hopes and dreams. A very sad poem, with great class and respect. Thank you for sharing. Well done.
echo
reply by the author on 22-May-2015
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Two very sad stories in one, yet connected. A love between two that had never been together, then lost. A storm... The tsunami that struck was so terribly heart wrenching. For this girl, and many others, more than just the loss of homes and belongings, of loved ones and lives. But also the loss of so many futures, hopes and dreams. A very sad poem, with great class and respect. Thank you for sharing. Well done.
echo
Comment Written 21-May-2015
reply by the author on 22-May-2015
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I am so pleased you picked up on the lost futures because that is what it is really about. It was thinking about that which sparked the whole thing off so it is encouraging when someone like yourself goes straight to the heart of the matter. Many thanks for the review.
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To me poetry is from the heart. yYou are most welcome... I am a gentle sort, who find the heart and human in whatever I can. Than you for writing a wonderful poem.
echo
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lol, wait...."someone like yourself"? lol, You are most welcome...
echo
Comment from dmt1967
Natural disasters are the worst kind. My heart went out to those people who lost their lives. Homes and loved ones. This poem is a good reminder of how lucky we are. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 21-May-2015
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Natural disasters are the worst kind. My heart went out to those people who lost their lives. Homes and loved ones. This poem is a good reminder of how lucky we are. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 21-May-2015
reply by the author on 21-May-2015
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Thank you for reading this and for your sympathetic review.
Comment from Gloria ....
Hey PG. Love the uninational appeal of this poem. Ha, I'm just ribbing ya because I know you like to have a laugh with your morning coffee. It ruins your keyboard every time.
I've always found the caucasoids were fond of the mongoloids especially the beautiful femalians of the species. I wonder who came up with those ethnic groupings because the verbiage seems to favour the whites -- that is so different - Ha.
Lovely poem my friend. I love the Japanese flavour with the concrete images uncovering that satori moments like waves sweeping to shore and sucking back into the ocean.
Tears for love, love unstarted, love unfinished, but still love even though it will never be requited because her beauty has been swallowed by the sea -- that unrelenting power of nature -- somewhat like love.
You write them up good, so keep going. :)
Gloria
PS: I'm writing another villainess and hopefully I get it right this time. I thought you'd be most interested to know this bit of trivia. ;-)
reply by the author on 21-May-2015
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Hey PG. Love the uninational appeal of this poem. Ha, I'm just ribbing ya because I know you like to have a laugh with your morning coffee. It ruins your keyboard every time.
I've always found the caucasoids were fond of the mongoloids especially the beautiful femalians of the species. I wonder who came up with those ethnic groupings because the verbiage seems to favour the whites -- that is so different - Ha.
Lovely poem my friend. I love the Japanese flavour with the concrete images uncovering that satori moments like waves sweeping to shore and sucking back into the ocean.
Tears for love, love unstarted, love unfinished, but still love even though it will never be requited because her beauty has been swallowed by the sea -- that unrelenting power of nature -- somewhat like love.
You write them up good, so keep going. :)
Gloria
PS: I'm writing another villainess and hopefully I get it right this time. I thought you'd be most interested to know this bit of trivia. ;-)
Comment Written 21-May-2015
reply by the author on 21-May-2015
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Thank you Gloria for this great review. I just have a soft spot for a pretty face whatever her nationality - even Canadians (lol).
Comment from I am Cat
Gynt,
this poem will nearly break your heart... especially if you invest yourself into it... and remove race and country from it... place yourself in the middle...and it soon becomes:
'By great distance though divided
Could have loved, cannot requite it,
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For your loss, love's beauty vanished;
Love unstarted, love unfinished.
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What could have been
Cannot have been; ....'
.....'Blossoms bloom now,
Yours and mine now;
Petals' life abbreviated,
Never to be consummated. '.......
and so...
with a nearly broken heart, I grieve with you....
A beautifully haunting poem, with or without
time and space...
love.
in its simplest form.
If I had another six... well, you know you're more than that .
Cat
reply by the author on 21-May-2015
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Gynt,
this poem will nearly break your heart... especially if you invest yourself into it... and remove race and country from it... place yourself in the middle...and it soon becomes:
'By great distance though divided
Could have loved, cannot requite it,
............
For your loss, love's beauty vanished;
Love unstarted, love unfinished.
........
What could have been
Cannot have been; ....'
.....'Blossoms bloom now,
Yours and mine now;
Petals' life abbreviated,
Never to be consummated. '.......
and so...
with a nearly broken heart, I grieve with you....
A beautifully haunting poem, with or without
time and space...
love.
in its simplest form.
If I had another six... well, you know you're more than that .
Cat
Comment Written 20-May-2015
reply by the author on 21-May-2015
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Thank you for yet another beautiful review. You quote all the right parts. This one seems to be touching quite few where it hurts. I think I made the right choice over which of my tsunami poems to include in this collection and post.
Comment from patcelaw
This is a beautifully written and presented about the aftermath of an earthquake in the ocean. The lose of lives and the destruction resulting. Blessings, Patricia
reply by the author on 21-May-2015
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This is a beautifully written and presented about the aftermath of an earthquake in the ocean. The lose of lives and the destruction resulting. Blessings, Patricia
Comment Written 20-May-2015
reply by the author on 21-May-2015
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Thank you for reading and this sympathetic review.
Comment from royowen
I like the way you have used, your writing, almost like a machine gun, and at the same time staccato influence to give it a harsh edge. I actually watched these events unfold on TV, tragic even after the tsunami that happened in Sri Lanka, Indonesia, Thailand, etc, in fact there have been many over the some more severe than others, particularly where the "ring of fire" in the pacific. I enjoyed this free verse poem depicting one of the tragic events of the tsunami. Well done, blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 21-May-2015
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I like the way you have used, your writing, almost like a machine gun, and at the same time staccato influence to give it a harsh edge. I actually watched these events unfold on TV, tragic even after the tsunami that happened in Sri Lanka, Indonesia, Thailand, etc, in fact there have been many over the some more severe than others, particularly where the "ring of fire" in the pacific. I enjoyed this free verse poem depicting one of the tragic events of the tsunami. Well done, blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 20-May-2015
reply by the author on 21-May-2015
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Thank you Roy for this searching and sympathetic review.
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Most welcome
Comment from gailjorben
Riveting poem. Brings to light the potential that was lost with those that were taken by the Tsunami too soon. I can feel the love that was a thought, but never tested.
Good job
reply by the author on 21-May-2015
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Riveting poem. Brings to light the potential that was lost with those that were taken by the Tsunami too soon. I can feel the love that was a thought, but never tested.
Good job
Comment Written 20-May-2015
reply by the author on 21-May-2015
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Many thanks for this review.
Comment from walbc
This is my third attempt to review your wonderfully crafted poem, Gynt. The other two just disappeared off my screen. If this one does I will kick the computer out the window in sheer frustration.
You talk of seeing a young girl in a news flash, and she seems to symbolize your raw emotions over the destruction of the tsunami. She also brings out the tenderness in you, feelings of possibilities of love...that cannot ever be. The different styles of writing in your stanzas are apparent to the reader, making the poem most unique and interesting. The first and final stanzas are inverted, with only a word change.
There is a gentleness to your words, despite talking of the sheer destruction of the tsunami. Well done Gynt.
Warm regards, Wendy.
reply by the author on 21-May-2015
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This is my third attempt to review your wonderfully crafted poem, Gynt. The other two just disappeared off my screen. If this one does I will kick the computer out the window in sheer frustration.
You talk of seeing a young girl in a news flash, and she seems to symbolize your raw emotions over the destruction of the tsunami. She also brings out the tenderness in you, feelings of possibilities of love...that cannot ever be. The different styles of writing in your stanzas are apparent to the reader, making the poem most unique and interesting. The first and final stanzas are inverted, with only a word change.
There is a gentleness to your words, despite talking of the sheer destruction of the tsunami. Well done Gynt.
Warm regards, Wendy.
Comment Written 20-May-2015
reply by the author on 21-May-2015
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I thought I'd replied to this Wendy! Perhaps I replied to one that vanished off your screen. Whatever, many thanks for these wonderful words of review. They are really appreciated. I'm sure I replied and nominated you. I'm going mad.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I thought you did a terrific job of showing us the sorrow here with a framework of a terrible quake. The word choices are wonderful. The way you intertwined this was excellent. Great job.
reply by the author on 21-May-2015
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I thought you did a terrific job of showing us the sorrow here with a framework of a terrible quake. The word choices are wonderful. The way you intertwined this was excellent. Great job.
Comment Written 20-May-2015
reply by the author on 21-May-2015
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Thank you for this kind review, much appreciated.
