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Act of Endurance

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Dawn of Chaos

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Comment from Lynn27
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I did enjoyed the poem and love the details that you tried to paint with your words.

In a lot of your lines are grammar errors, and I think most of them are you left words or used wrong word.

You need to discover way that you can catch most them yourself.

Lynn

 Comment Written 13-Jun-2016


reply by the author on 14-Jun-2016
    You' re right my search for written comforts has its extremes. Thanking you for generous rate and touching thoughts.
Comment from c_lucas
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Put feet in action and run like hell. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. There is very good imagery.

 Comment Written 13-Jun-2016


reply by the author on 14-Jun-2016
    Yet some state the opposite of your claims, I feel a mid-way compromise. Thanking you for generous rate and captivating views.
Comment from Galactia
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Hi

I find your poem very hard to read, it is a little confuding..

Your firdt line sugestion maybe change to...

I am not a lucky person although i take a chance.

There is quite a lot of sentence structure that neadd rearanging/ fixing.


Regards
Tia


 Comment Written 13-Jun-2016


reply by the author on 14-Jun-2016
    I thank you for your given insights and pits in my writes do exists: I' m slowly learning wish I could blame age. It's me. Thanking you for generous rate and captivating views.
reply by Galactia on 14-Jun-2016
    Don't wory my poems aren't perfect
    eaither, i can tell you know i have grammar and pinctuation issues through mine, i am trying to overcome that issue my self.
    Great job
    Regards
    Tia
reply by Galactia on 14-Jun-2016
    Don't wory my poems aren't perfect
    eaither, i can tell you know i have grammar and pinctuation issues through mine, i am trying to overcome that issue my self.
    Great job
    Regards
    Tia
Comment from Dean Kuch
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Again, far, FAR too much reverse syntax in this lengthy, hefty write, TPAC...
But I get it...
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 Comment Written 13-Jun-2016


reply by the author on 14-Jun-2016
    I still pounding to correct such flaws maybe once mind comprehend such realities: I to advance. Thanking you for generous rate and welcomed thoughts.
reply by Dean Kuch on 14-Jun-2016
    You are more than welcome, TPAC.
    ~Dean
Comment from beizanten
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Angsty poetry, well describe in simple and easy to understand words. The angst and lonely emotion flow quite well and easy to relate to but I think it still has room for improvement. Very descriptive yet I think you could use more powerful words/description to show emotion.


I think this is the best line in this. Very good: My steps endless each move futile, heart in thumps they both dance a tango, they to keep struggling aims.



Interesting, chilling ending

 Comment Written 13-Jun-2016


reply by the author on 14-Jun-2016
    Appreciate your given insights and agree with statements of further improvements and well revise. Thanking you for generous rate and encouraging statements.
Comment from Joan E.
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You certainly communicated fear and anxiety as you described your dark and quiet environment among the trees at night in this prose poem. I hope the ghosts stay away! Cheers- Joan

 Comment Written 12-Jun-2016


reply by the author on 14-Jun-2016
    Wonderful is the reviews received about this write. A complex mix of cross seen by its reader: super creative in suggestions hopes of me tighten on loose strings. Thanking you for generous rate and welcomed views.
Comment from foxangie123
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I had read this before and reviewed and it is a great as it was the first time. You are very creative and write well. I wish you wrote me as a matter of fact. You place yourself and the reader on or within the road or house you write about.

 Comment Written 12-Jun-2016


reply by the author on 14-Jun-2016
    Your opinion unfortunately I too share, yet reality holds weak presented features others can not ignore. Thanking you for your given insights and captivating comments.
reply by foxangie123 on 14-Jun-2016
    Hugs to you always.
Comment from Janet Foor
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A little different form of poem but I felt the fear in each line like:
My chest reacts pressure swell it forth, shell won't hold air, eyes no vision to me: for me at all now". I could almost feel the fear as I read about this walk in the "Wooded Night".

Blessings
Janet

 Comment Written 20-Apr-2016


reply by the author on 21-Apr-2016
    This aim is purpose of any write realistic absorbing its reader taking them within stated content. I wish such achievements by my writes to be. Thanking you for generous rate and touching thoughts.
Comment from richie m
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nothing like a little stream of conscious writing to slap you in the face and confuse the wake-up process first thing in the morning.THREE CUPS 'O COFFEE later this is actually well done and pretty inventive' good job--dm

 Comment Written 20-Apr-2016


reply by the author on 30-Apr-2016
    Thanking you for your generous rate and captivating comments about this write. Still looking for pits within conveyances.
Comment from evesayshi
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I am utterly confused about this poem - I do not know if all the grammatical errors? in the work are actually errors or intended mistakes - if grammatical errors, corrections are in order, if not, it still needs work, which I leave entirely up to you...

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 Comment Written 20-Apr-2016


reply by the author on 30-Apr-2016
    Yeah. I suffer in my writes, constant revisions: yet to improve. Thanking you for generous rate and encouraging statements.
reply by evesayshi on 30-Apr-2016
    You are so welcome, and because you write, you have a great deal to say - keep writing...