When Blood Collides
Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "Long Distance Relationship, Part One"A family's love is tested.
25 total reviews
Comment from IndianaIrish
It's a great ending hook, Shari, to make me really want to continue reading about Nicole and Jeff. I liked the insertions of her phone conversation snippets.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2015
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It's a great ending hook, Shari, to make me really want to continue reading about Nicole and Jeff. I liked the insertions of her phone conversation snippets.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment Written 19-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2015
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Thanks, Karyn.
Comment from tfawcus
Distance has both advantages and disadvantages, as you point out. Having both our children living overseas, I can identify with this quite a bit, even though communication is much easier. After the hook in your final liner, I had to wait for Part 2 before reviewing this.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2015
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Distance has both advantages and disadvantages, as you point out. Having both our children living overseas, I can identify with this quite a bit, even though communication is much easier. After the hook in your final liner, I had to wait for Part 2 before reviewing this.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2015
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Thanks, Tony. Yes, with Skype you can not only talk but see. We've done it a few times with our daughter.
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Trouble with Skype is that there's no easy way off it. I was brought up on 3 min international phone calls. Quite long enough in my view!
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Good point. Rule of etiquette is that whoever initiated the call is the one to end it.
Comment from Deniz22
"With modern technology I would have heard from her every day as constant rejection threw her into states of depression." Trying to understand this...do you mean you cut the telephone exchanges short because of the expense and she took it as rejection? Nosey, aren't I? :) Your life is interesting only partly because you tell it so well...:) JB
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2015
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"With modern technology I would have heard from her every day as constant rejection threw her into states of depression." Trying to understand this...do you mean you cut the telephone exchanges short because of the expense and she took it as rejection? Nosey, aren't I? :) Your life is interesting only partly because you tell it so well...:) JB
Comment Written 18-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2015
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I meant the expense was too much to call me every time she got rejected. I'll see if I get any other confused comments.:-) Thanks for the compliment, son.
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Oh, I see...my bad. Sorry. (JB pulls covers over his head)...did you know you got mentioned in a story of the month nominee?
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Hey, congrats to you too. I've been so busy writing I hadn't had a chance to check the latest list. You got my vote!
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Thank you... I was surprised and felt honored as there are some terrific writers in there...
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You're right. I've read several entries that tugged at me emotionally. But yours is different from the usual.
Comment from Eigle Rull
This is interesting and true to life for sure. What beautiful young woman does not want to be an actress. Especially when she's stuck waiting tables. The ending was exciting up to the point when I knew the results of your daughter's visit with her new boyfriend would come next time. I enjoyed reading this well written piece, my friend. It seems that no matter what you write, it is always interesting.
Always with respect,
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2015
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This is interesting and true to life for sure. What beautiful young woman does not want to be an actress. Especially when she's stuck waiting tables. The ending was exciting up to the point when I knew the results of your daughter's visit with her new boyfriend would come next time. I enjoyed reading this well written piece, my friend. It seems that no matter what you write, it is always interesting.
Always with respect,
Comment Written 18-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2015
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Thank you, Eigle. Your reviews always make me feel good. :-)
Comment from Sasha
Epiphanies can be painful, but when given a chance, can also free us of burdens holding us back.
Motherhood is always a work in progress. We do the best we can and too often our children, the ones that once adored us, rebel and become individuals that want nothing to do with us. It is a painful job, but in the end, always (at least for most) worth the pain. Great work with this and I look forward to the next chapter.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2015
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Epiphanies can be painful, but when given a chance, can also free us of burdens holding us back.
Motherhood is always a work in progress. We do the best we can and too often our children, the ones that once adored us, rebel and become individuals that want nothing to do with us. It is a painful job, but in the end, always (at least for most) worth the pain. Great work with this and I look forward to the next chapter.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2015
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Thanks, sasha. My aunt told me that living in California would change my girl. Even though we call every week, I feel as if I've lost her through stupid reactions.
Comment from Muffins
This is the type of relationship most mother's dream of having with their teenage almost adult daughter. From the phone conversation, the closeness does not sound tense or forced. Allowing the reader to hear your daughter's voice in 3 the one sided conversations makes it easier to get to know her daughter better. The reader can picture her he without your input interrupting the process.
Thanks for cutting it in half. My eyes bulge whenever a piece is to long.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2015
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This is the type of relationship most mother's dream of having with their teenage almost adult daughter. From the phone conversation, the closeness does not sound tense or forced. Allowing the reader to hear your daughter's voice in 3 the one sided conversations makes it easier to get to know her daughter better. The reader can picture her he without your input interrupting the process.
Thanks for cutting it in half. My eyes bulge whenever a piece is to long.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2015
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I dread long pieces too. I'm clear to hear your take on the phone conversations. I'm glad the method worked.
Comment from boxergirl
You did a great job painting the relationship between you and your daughter. I could feel your emotional attachment by the details that you provided. I can imagine how hard it was to let her go that far, but at least she had some family there. And just what did you do, Shari, when she brought Jeff home? I know. I have to wait and see. 8-)
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2015
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You did a great job painting the relationship between you and your daughter. I could feel your emotional attachment by the details that you provided. I can imagine how hard it was to let her go that far, but at least she had some family there. And just what did you do, Shari, when she brought Jeff home? I know. I have to wait and see. 8-)
Comment Written 18-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2015
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It wasn't that hard to let her go, since she spent a year with us after college. It made for a smooth transition, but thank goodness, I still had Chris close by.
Comment from joann r romei
Im glad you broke it up, this read great, it gave us details about your daughters personality through her phone conversations, want to here the rest soon,
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2015
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Im glad you broke it up, this read great, it gave us details about your daughters personality through her phone conversations, want to here the rest soon,
Comment Written 18-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2015
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Thanks, joann, for the sixer. I believe you won a prompt contest. Congratulations. I'm working on Part two now.
Comment from Louise Michelle
Hi Shari,
I'm envious of your relationship with your daughter. I wish at least one of my sons would confide in me. Oh, well, I'm probably better off. Sorry this is so short, have a bit of a bug in my system.
Hugs,
Lou
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2015
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Hi Shari,
I'm envious of your relationship with your daughter. I wish at least one of my sons would confide in me. Oh, well, I'm probably better off. Sorry this is so short, have a bit of a bug in my system.
Hugs,
Lou
Comment Written 18-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2015
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Sorry you have a cold. Hey, maybe that's why I've had nightmares about insects the last two night. LOL My son Chris confided in his father and occasionally with me. My daughter is very private anymore because of things said that I deeply regret. -- that's another story though.
Comment from alexisleech
You describe that first separation between mother and daughter really well. Everyone copes with it differently, but I think a lot depends on how busy the mother is to survive the experience without problems. My mother never worked, so the empty nest issue was a hard one to take. It was quite the opposite for me, so the parting of our ways went smoothly. It sounds as though you were busy too. Was this before or after your mother came to live with you?
Alexis x
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2015
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You describe that first separation between mother and daughter really well. Everyone copes with it differently, but I think a lot depends on how busy the mother is to survive the experience without problems. My mother never worked, so the empty nest issue was a hard one to take. It was quite the opposite for me, so the parting of our ways went smoothly. It sounds as though you were busy too. Was this before or after your mother came to live with you?
Alexis x
Comment Written 18-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2015
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You're right about work helping survive. I had a student load of at least 120 to worry about. This is before Mom moved in.
