Consider the Fallen Leaf
Checking the ground where I walk.38 total reviews
Comment from Norbanus
I wonder at the choice of metaphor
for all those bits of me I've left behind.
I hope that somewhere in that massive heap
that someone find a morsel they will keep
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014
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I wonder at the choice of metaphor
for all those bits of me I've left behind.
I hope that somewhere in that massive heap
that someone find a morsel they will keep
Comment Written 13-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014
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Thank you for reading my work and for your supportive review.
Comment from Bryana
Beautiful about something as mundane as a falling leave, a sign of the wonderful imagination of the poet. How many of us have felt as a fallen leave at times and need a friend to hold us.
Your poem, dear friend, is about a simple leave and yet is very profound that makes us think about us humans.
Un abrazo para ti.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014
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Beautiful about something as mundane as a falling leave, a sign of the wonderful imagination of the poet. How many of us have felt as a fallen leave at times and need a friend to hold us.
Your poem, dear friend, is about a simple leave and yet is very profound that makes us think about us humans.
Un abrazo para ti.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014
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Thank you dear friend. Always, my amiguita.
Comment from Starlit Ink
You make such beauty out of a simple fallen leaf, and make it meaningful instead. The imagery is good in this free verse, that tells a short but compelling story, with a wise message. Yes, we do leave more behind than we think.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014
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You make such beauty out of a simple fallen leaf, and make it meaningful instead. The imagery is good in this free verse, that tells a short but compelling story, with a wise message. Yes, we do leave more behind than we think.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014
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Thank you for these profound comments. Thank you.
Comment from Spitfire
Oh my! This made me catch my breath. What makes a good poem is that it can be read on at least two levels. The repetition of the title line takes on more meaning each time.
Universal line:we always leave something behind...
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014
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Oh my! This made me catch my breath. What makes a good poem is that it can be read on at least two levels. The repetition of the title line takes on more meaning each time.
Universal line:we always leave something behind...
Comment Written 13-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014
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Thank you for saying all those beautiful things. Such a receptive heart, the grace goes all to you. I mean it.
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello amada, A thought-provoking poem. Of special note:
Consider the fallen leaf.
I held one of them today.
Cold, it clung to my hand
seeking warmth,
(As if it were a delicate life, perhaps a newborn)
And:
But one remained on my palm:
a reminder,
perhaps,
that we always leave something behind
(Like a friend who's saying good-bye or the passing of a loved one.)
And so ...
The fallen leaf rests
but the western winds
whirls its friend back
into the deep blue sky.
amada, very good. This leaf is done yet. Smiles, LateBloomer
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014
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Hello amada, A thought-provoking poem. Of special note:
Consider the fallen leaf.
I held one of them today.
Cold, it clung to my hand
seeking warmth,
(As if it were a delicate life, perhaps a newborn)
And:
But one remained on my palm:
a reminder,
perhaps,
that we always leave something behind
(Like a friend who's saying good-bye or the passing of a loved one.)
And so ...
The fallen leaf rests
but the western winds
whirls its friend back
into the deep blue sky.
amada, very good. This leaf is done yet. Smiles, LateBloomer
Comment Written 13-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014
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Such a great interpretation. I'm so glad that this work called to your talent and sense of wonder. I'm honored.
Comment from Righteous Riter
Good alliteration with twisted/turned...cold/clung...couldn't/cuddle...smile/sparkle/sigh. Good simile use with like sacred golden dust. Good complimentary photo followed by a clear message.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014
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Good alliteration with twisted/turned...cold/clung...couldn't/cuddle...smile/sparkle/sigh. Good simile use with like sacred golden dust. Good complimentary photo followed by a clear message.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014
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Thank you for reading and commenting.
Comment from royowen
A poignant, beautifully written work about the temporal Beauty and the fragility of life, whether it be animal or vegetable, it is still subject to time, and the vessel becomes a shell! A well written free verse! Descriptive language is poignant and lucid! Well done, Blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014
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A poignant, beautifully written work about the temporal Beauty and the fragility of life, whether it be animal or vegetable, it is still subject to time, and the vessel becomes a shell! A well written free verse! Descriptive language is poignant and lucid! Well done, Blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014
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Thank you Roy.
Comment from Glasstruth
The fallen leaf is fragile as our existence. In the end it crumbles and goes back to earth. The cycle shall continue. Seems as if I read something similar like this. Did you rewrite something, or just build on a previous idea? Either way, SUPERB! Les
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014
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The fallen leaf is fragile as our existence. In the end it crumbles and goes back to earth. The cycle shall continue. Seems as if I read something similar like this. Did you rewrite something, or just build on a previous idea? Either way, SUPERB! Les
Comment Written 13-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014
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Thank you for reading and commenting.
Comment from nancyjam
You really captured the fragility of
the leaf in this lovely free verse.
Great descriptive writing - lots of detailed description
that gives the reader an "up-close" picture.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014
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You really captured the fragility of
the leaf in this lovely free verse.
Great descriptive writing - lots of detailed description
that gives the reader an "up-close" picture.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014
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Thank you Nancyjam for reading and commenting in this work.
Comment from kiwijenny
My favorite stanza is ....but one remained on my palm....a reminder...perhaps....that we always leave something behind....a smile a sparkle a sigh..........well written.i,liked it a lot
God bless
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2014
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My favorite stanza is ....but one remained on my palm....a reminder...perhaps....that we always leave something behind....a smile a sparkle a sigh..........well written.i,liked it a lot
God bless
Comment Written 12-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2014
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Thank you for reading my work...and liking it, of course :-)
