What Once Was Heard
Rictameter Contest Prompt Entry30 total reviews
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
This is really rather lovely,
albeit so sad -- has a smooth
flow to the words, cleverly
crafted as a Rictameter Poem.
Well penned, my friend.
Good luck with the contest.
Margaret.
This is really rather lovely,
albeit so sad -- has a smooth
flow to the words, cleverly
crafted as a Rictameter Poem.
Well penned, my friend.
Good luck with the contest.
Margaret.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2009
Comment from joan marie
This is really good. Echoes. Never thought about it like that. I know the smallest things can trigger memories. But I like them being called echoes because that means they'll always come back. joan marie
This is really good. Echoes. Never thought about it like that. I know the smallest things can trigger memories. But I like them being called echoes because that means they'll always come back. joan marie
Comment Written 20-Apr-2009
Comment from starkat
Hi diane,
This is a kind of a metaphorical trip through the rooms of memory. Echoes are heard and felt throughout the house, as you open and close the doors. There is a choice which doors to open and close... and I think that as time goes by, people close the doors of sadness and open wide those of love and laughter. We want to identify those rooms where tresured memories are stored.
Beautifully written and presented rictameter. Lovely imagery abounds that invite the reader to perhaps look at the rooms in their memories, and see which doors are opened or closed.
Enjoyed your rictameter. Excellent contest entry. Wishing you the best of luck. Cheers.. ;) Art
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2009
Hi diane,
This is a kind of a metaphorical trip through the rooms of memory. Echoes are heard and felt throughout the house, as you open and close the doors. There is a choice which doors to open and close... and I think that as time goes by, people close the doors of sadness and open wide those of love and laughter. We want to identify those rooms where tresured memories are stored.
Beautifully written and presented rictameter. Lovely imagery abounds that invite the reader to perhaps look at the rooms in their memories, and see which doors are opened or closed.
Enjoyed your rictameter. Excellent contest entry. Wishing you the best of luck. Cheers.. ;) Art
Comment Written 20-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2009
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Hello Art!
Much appreciation for your heartfelt and kind reviiew! diane
Comment from Writewoman
Hmmm -- interesting poem in content and structure. It eloquently describes grief. I thought perhaps you were widowed until I read your profile. Thank you for sharing.
Hmmm -- interesting poem in content and structure. It eloquently describes grief. I thought perhaps you were widowed until I read your profile. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2009
Comment from sherrygreywolf
A nicely done entry for the Rictameter contest. I didn't see any problems with the form requirements or spelling. Your words carry a poingant, yet sweet sentiment. I especially loved the first three lines, "Echoes - Of your laughter - Serenade the stillness". Very nice!
great work - sherry
A nicely done entry for the Rictameter contest. I didn't see any problems with the form requirements or spelling. Your words carry a poingant, yet sweet sentiment. I especially loved the first three lines, "Echoes - Of your laughter - Serenade the stillness". Very nice!
great work - sherry
Comment Written 20-Apr-2009
Comment from Crusty
Ooh, I like this poem very much. It has a really nice feel. It flows exceptionally well, and I love your word choices. This line. [ Serenade the stillness ] just wonderful. You have a beautiful gift. I feel honoured to have reviewed this for you, and I look forward to reading more of your work in the future. Thank you for sharing it.
Cheers.
Brad...
Ooh, I like this poem very much. It has a really nice feel. It flows exceptionally well, and I love your word choices. This line. [ Serenade the stillness ] just wonderful. You have a beautiful gift. I feel honoured to have reviewed this for you, and I look forward to reading more of your work in the future. Thank you for sharing it.
Cheers.
Brad...
Comment Written 20-Apr-2009
Comment from rmdelta
Mrs. KT,
excellent writing and a well thought out story. The descriptives are wonderful and the story offers us a great message. A good contest entry. Well done
Reggie
Mrs. KT,
excellent writing and a well thought out story. The descriptives are wonderful and the story offers us a great message. A good contest entry. Well done
Reggie
Comment Written 20-Apr-2009
Comment from Wendyanne
Hi Diane. This is such a beautiful piece of poetry written in rictameter style. It has a wonderful, haunting quality to it. This is certainly a winner in my opinion. Good luck
Hi Diane. This is such a beautiful piece of poetry written in rictameter style. It has a wonderful, haunting quality to it. This is certainly a winner in my opinion. Good luck
Comment Written 20-Apr-2009
Comment from skye
Lovely words in this structured and formal style poem.
I love these lines...
-- Serenade the stillness
they make the echoes come alive.
Very well done.
Lovely words in this structured and formal style poem.
I love these lines...
-- Serenade the stillness
they make the echoes come alive.
Very well done.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2009
Comment from Judian James
Lovely, lovely, lovely. It's always such a treat to read a post of yours and this is no exception. I've sort of developed an attitude toward these short forms because so many think they're an easy way to polish off a piece in few words and post crap. Not the case here. Did I say lovely yet? excellent, my friend, truly excellent.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2009
Lovely, lovely, lovely. It's always such a treat to read a post of yours and this is no exception. I've sort of developed an attitude toward these short forms because so many think they're an easy way to polish off a piece in few words and post crap. Not the case here. Did I say lovely yet? excellent, my friend, truly excellent.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2009
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Hey Judian!
Much appreciation. I haven't been able to do much writing as of late, but this is a form that interests me. Just wish I had time to write a pantoum...or a story in a rhyming format that flows well! Again, thank you for your kind review and I hope all is well! diane
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I tried a new form for me with "Tomorrow" I think you'd like that one.