If I Can't Make the Shot
a swap quatrain133 total reviews
Comment from MizKat
Hi Brooke,
I like your poem about Sawyer trying to make a shot. You always write such nice poems about him. Who could expect less though when he's so cute?
Kat
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2014
Hi Brooke,
I like your poem about Sawyer trying to make a shot. You always write such nice poems about him. Who could expect less though when he's so cute?
Kat
Comment Written 26-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2014
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Kat, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Acquired Taste
Very nice addition to Sawyer's Book of Love by Grandma. I like the rhyming and the positive tone of never, ever giving up. Lovely offering. Jean
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2014
Very nice addition to Sawyer's Book of Love by Grandma. I like the rhyming and the positive tone of never, ever giving up. Lovely offering. Jean
Comment Written 26-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2014
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thank you, Jean, for your thoughtful response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Angel Debbie
Your poetic way of writing is amazing Brooke
The way you make everything flow and the Love you put into each write just amazes me to the point of awe.
I hope you are keeping all these in a binder for Sawyer in the future, he'll love reading how Grandma wrote about him, with great appreciation!
Amen to have a Grandma like you!
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2014
Your poetic way of writing is amazing Brooke
The way you make everything flow and the Love you put into each write just amazes me to the point of awe.
I hope you are keeping all these in a binder for Sawyer in the future, he'll love reading how Grandma wrote about him, with great appreciation!
Amen to have a Grandma like you!
Comment Written 26-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2014
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Angel Debbie, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from GWHARGIS
I'm going to print this out fro my son. He plays basketball on a year around league and when his game is off, he gets so down. I like the light at the end of the tunnel emotion. Just work hard and you will achieve. Great motivator.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2014
I'm going to print this out fro my son. He plays basketball on a year around league and when his game is off, he gets so down. I like the light at the end of the tunnel emotion. Just work hard and you will achieve. Great motivator.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2014
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Thank you so much, Gretchen, for the generous sixth star and for telling me why this resonates with you :-) Brooke
Comment from kiwijenny
That's the spirit..........try your best and work work hard...
What a great lesson .........................wonderful poetry
I like this series ..............well done
God bless
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2014
That's the spirit..........try your best and work work hard...
What a great lesson .........................wonderful poetry
I like this series ..............well done
God bless
Comment Written 26-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2014
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kiwijenny, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Delahay
If at first you don't succeed, keep trying or try something different. If you find you cannot do something one way, find another way to do it. This poem speaks well of perseverance and overcoming obstacles.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
If at first you don't succeed, keep trying or try something different. If you find you cannot do something one way, find another way to do it. This poem speaks well of perseverance and overcoming obstacles.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
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Ward, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Auroraboreal800
This is so beautiful. I like how descriptive this poem is. Brilliant piece that has excellent Rhyme,t structure and rhythm as well. It flows nicely.
Great job Brooke!
:)
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2014
This is so beautiful. I like how descriptive this poem is. Brilliant piece that has excellent Rhyme,t structure and rhythm as well. It flows nicely.
Great job Brooke!
:)
Comment Written 26-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2014
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Aurora, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from royowen
My grandsons have the identical " shooters ring " Brooke. I love your latest poem, when I was a younger man I played a lot of competitive sport so I relate to your poem! A lovely poem, nice smooth flow and imagery,! Some Nice perfect rhyming in couplets, great meter! Blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2014
My grandsons have the identical " shooters ring " Brooke. I love your latest poem, when I was a younger man I played a lot of competitive sport so I relate to your poem! A lovely poem, nice smooth flow and imagery,! Some Nice perfect rhyming in couplets, great meter! Blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2014
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Roy, thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from rod007
An excellent form of poetry where one can see the keen aspiration of Sawyer to achieve what he wants. He'll even plant a tree to get shade! I suppose that desire to accomplish things is in all of us. Well done.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
An excellent form of poetry where one can see the keen aspiration of Sawyer to achieve what he wants. He'll even plant a tree to get shade! I suppose that desire to accomplish things is in all of us. Well done.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
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rod, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from RodG
I am very impressed with how you wove refrains into this poem and used internal and end rhyme. I also like how the Speaker is tenacious and resourceful in his quests. A challenging format, but you handled it very well, Brooke. Just a suggestion to get that internal rhyme in line 2 of your final stanza: to avoid the way that's the same to make the winning score.
Rod
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2014
I am very impressed with how you wove refrains into this poem and used internal and end rhyme. I also like how the Speaker is tenacious and resourceful in his quests. A challenging format, but you handled it very well, Brooke. Just a suggestion to get that internal rhyme in line 2 of your final stanza: to avoid the way that's the same to make the winning score.
Rod
Comment Written 26-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2014
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Thanks so much, Rod, for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke