GULBRANDR- God's Sword
Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "Joshua Meets Dyster"A child is born who will be a champion
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Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Where to begin, Rox, your story is so good, I could sit and read the whole of it in one go. I'm glad Hamish is a 'prisoner' in the fortress, but I wish he wasn't. I don't trust that man. Perhaps one of the cats will have him for dinner!!! :)) Joshua is really determined to be the best there is, and he will, and I'm sure he'll make 'friends' with Dyster and the cat. Now, who is this lovely girl? Her description is very much like Joshua's mother! Don't be long with the next part, my friend! :) Sandra xxxx
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2018
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Where to begin, Rox, your story is so good, I could sit and read the whole of it in one go. I'm glad Hamish is a 'prisoner' in the fortress, but I wish he wasn't. I don't trust that man. Perhaps one of the cats will have him for dinner!!! :)) Joshua is really determined to be the best there is, and he will, and I'm sure he'll make 'friends' with Dyster and the cat. Now, who is this lovely girl? Her description is very much like Joshua's mother! Don't be long with the next part, my friend! :) Sandra xxxx
Comment Written 11-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2018
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Thank you so much. You are so encouraging to me. I'm never sure if its good and it's never good enough. I"m constantly 'fixing' it. But I am really enjoying writing again. I'm glad you like it and thanks for the great review. I have the next chapters done, it's just getting the member bucks to promote. If you don't have a decent amount, no one wants to read. I'm the same way so can't complain. We all want money. Were so greedy. =} Thanks again.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Well,well, well, who's the girl? Friend or foe? I'm sure it means romance is in the making. He has his dragon and pet cat,(Almost), now a female companion. What more could a guy want? I must say your story is different and refreshing change from the norm. Well done Roxanne. Nancy
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2018
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Well,well, well, who's the girl? Friend or foe? I'm sure it means romance is in the making. He has his dragon and pet cat,(Almost), now a female companion. What more could a guy want? I must say your story is different and refreshing change from the norm. Well done Roxanne. Nancy
Comment Written 11-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2018
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Yes romance is in the wind. =} He is one fortune fellow. =} Thanks so much Nancy.
Comment from Debbie Pope
I love that you made Dyster so beautiful and the cats so exquisite. You do so much with color. How appealing that Dyster is brilliant blue with a green belly. He must be a sight flying through the air. And the cats, being golden with dark brown around their eyes and down their nose. Such a pretty image. And the addition of Riddare as Dyster's loyal companion is a sweet touch. I'm glad that cat is still in the story. The idea of giant cats riding dragons is a great touch for your story. It is all these details that make the story work for me. Your conclusions to each chapter are good as well. You always bring up something, the girl in this case, that makes me want to keep reading.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2018
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I love that you made Dyster so beautiful and the cats so exquisite. You do so much with color. How appealing that Dyster is brilliant blue with a green belly. He must be a sight flying through the air. And the cats, being golden with dark brown around their eyes and down their nose. Such a pretty image. And the addition of Riddare as Dyster's loyal companion is a sweet touch. I'm glad that cat is still in the story. The idea of giant cats riding dragons is a great touch for your story. It is all these details that make the story work for me. Your conclusions to each chapter are good as well. You always bring up something, the girl in this case, that makes me want to keep reading.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2018
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Thank you so much. I'm so glad you are enjoying it. It is a huge departure for me from what I usually write. I wrote children's story about a little pig who think she a super hero. I'm kinda amazed I'm able to do this. =} Thank you again for your encouragement. Have a good day. Rox
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
Ahah!
Now comes a fair maiden to addle his mind. Lol.
Another very interesting chapter with much detailed planning.
Joshua now thinks he has conquered a tough battle with the intense training but he has not found love yet. Or hs he?
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2018
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Ahah!
Now comes a fair maiden to addle his mind. Lol.
Another very interesting chapter with much detailed planning.
Joshua now thinks he has conquered a tough battle with the intense training but he has not found love yet. Or hs he?
Comment Written 11-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2018
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Yes the fair maiden, much more about her in chapter 11 =} Thank you again for the 6 stars. Roxanna
Comment from Harry Smith
I really like the picture selection selected for this chapter that is outstandingly well written with lots and lots of imagery. The reader really enjoyed the read and will be returning to read more.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2018
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I really like the picture selection selected for this chapter that is outstandingly well written with lots and lots of imagery. The reader really enjoyed the read and will be returning to read more.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2018
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Thank you so much.
Comment from Ricky1024
"Joshua Meets Duster was well written with great theme and imagery.
It flowed well and read well with no grammar issues as well.
Adjective Content was aligned well with Objective Content and Descriptive Measures aligned perfectly.
Thanks for this and have a blessed day.
Dr Ricky 1024.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2018
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"Joshua Meets Duster was well written with great theme and imagery.
It flowed well and read well with no grammar issues as well.
Adjective Content was aligned well with Objective Content and Descriptive Measures aligned perfectly.
Thanks for this and have a blessed day.
Dr Ricky 1024.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2018
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Thank you Ricky.
Comment from K.E. Edwards
Dragons and Big cats! This is my kind of story. I am going to go back and read the chapters before this one. I enjoyed this and look forward to reading more. I didn't notice any typos. Thanks for sharing this.
Karen
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2018
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Dragons and Big cats! This is my kind of story. I am going to go back and read the chapters before this one. I enjoyed this and look forward to reading more. I didn't notice any typos. Thanks for sharing this.
Karen
Comment Written 10-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2018
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Thank so much Karen. I usually have a million typos no matter how many time I read it over, but I have on reviewer who find everyone. He must read slowly line by line. =} I too lazy to do that kind of a review. =} Thanks so much again.
Comment from poetwatch
This is a good chapter, a good story. haven't read one from you but i like dragons. i don't like Hamish, he sound like a spoiled lord that keeps his servants locked up in the nighttime. A glory-hound riding the backs of people.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2018
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This is a good chapter, a good story. haven't read one from you but i like dragons. i don't like Hamish, he sound like a spoiled lord that keeps his servants locked up in the nighttime. A glory-hound riding the backs of people.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2018
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Hamish is very bad and he gets worse. =} Thanks so much. Rox