Animal Talk
NOT a children's story.44 total reviews
Comment from BeasPeas
Oh, good write until the end. A butcher--no way. I'm vegetarian. What could be worse for a vegetarian. On the other hand, I guess it has significance in your story. He went from a place of wanting to commune with animals until he got to the point where he wants to kill them. A little irony there. Marilyn
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2016
Oh, good write until the end. A butcher--no way. I'm vegetarian. What could be worse for a vegetarian. On the other hand, I guess it has significance in your story. He went from a place of wanting to commune with animals until he got to the point where he wants to kill them. A little irony there. Marilyn
Comment Written 17-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2016
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Thanks, Marilyn. Yes, he put all that work into his book and finally realized that animals had nothing interesting to say. Guess he felt cheated. LOL!
I've known a few vegetarians. I could almost be one because I don't like meat, but I do like fish and shrimp.
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Well I'm allergic to fish, so that's out. I don't want to eat anything that had to die for me to eat it. I even feel bad about the plants. Studies show they have fear, too. :(
Comment from Alex Rosel
...And Pokey met his gaze with ears forward, as if listening to every word. - A great description, very indicative of dogs.
Mid-story, you threw the book review at me. I wasn't expecting that. It's neat crafting :-)
Ha, ha. The review brought a smile to my face.
I was a little disappointed by the butcher twist. But, overall, this is a highly original piece and provide an enjoyable read. :-)
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2016
...And Pokey met his gaze with ears forward, as if listening to every word. - A great description, very indicative of dogs.
Mid-story, you threw the book review at me. I wasn't expecting that. It's neat crafting :-)
Ha, ha. The review brought a smile to my face.
I was a little disappointed by the butcher twist. But, overall, this is a highly original piece and provide an enjoyable read. :-)
Comment Written 14-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2016
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Thank you so much for a thorough review, Alex. Always appreciate your input. I have to ask why you didn't care for the butcher ending. I was thinking Jack realized that the reviewer was right, that animals didn't think about anything interesting after all. So he no longer felt fond of them, and it didn't bother him to be a butcher.
If you have a better ending in mind, I'd certainly like to hear it. Thanks, again. :)
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Yes, I understood the intention with the butcher twist. Perhaps, since the entire piece came across as exceedingly original to me, I was expecting (hoping?) for a twist with a bit more impact. Perhaps I just read too much flash fiction.
BTW, if I could think of a better twist, I wouldn't be sharing it, I'd be using it myself ;-)
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Thank you for saying it was original. I try to come up with new ideas, although it's verrrry difficult, as you know. And I don't blame you for keeping a better ending to yourself. LOL! :)
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Comment from P1
where on earth did you pull this one from
really unusual entertaining and i enjoyed every
word of it. well done on this unique piece
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2016
where on earth did you pull this one from
really unusual entertaining and i enjoyed every
word of it. well done on this unique piece
Comment Written 14-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2016
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Thanks, Lynda. It's hard to come up with something new--as you did with the story of the priest in love with the young girl. I would buy the book if you had it published... what a masterpiece. :)
Comment from Gloria ....
Haaaaaa, this is hilarious and incredibly well written Phyllis. Believe it or not, I went through all the animals in the one star review to make sure they all had the same thoughts.
Beautiful thing is, a person likely could make a bit of cash from being a butcher.
Tremendously funny. Yeeeeeeeeees.
Gloria
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2016
Haaaaaa, this is hilarious and incredibly well written Phyllis. Believe it or not, I went through all the animals in the one star review to make sure they all had the same thoughts.
Beautiful thing is, a person likely could make a bit of cash from being a butcher.
Tremendously funny. Yeeeeeeeeees.
Gloria
Comment Written 14-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2016
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Thanks, Gloria. True. It's a real art. And if you do it right, you can get loyal customers who won't buy their meat anywhere else. We have a pricey place like that here. Of course, the people who live here have so much money they have to be creative in finding ways t waste it. I buy hamburger. :)
Comment from zekeziemann
Very interesting and cleverly written. The ending made me chuckle. Why would he end up being a butcher? My Dad loved animals too and he was a farmer. He could identify which black calves came from which black cows as they mingled in the pasture. But he also could distinguish between pets and products.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2016
Very interesting and cleverly written. The ending made me chuckle. Why would he end up being a butcher? My Dad loved animals too and he was a farmer. He could identify which black calves came from which black cows as they mingled in the pasture. But he also could distinguish between pets and products.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2016
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Thank you for reading. Wow, that would be hard to do, since black cows look pretty much alike as do their calves. He sure was good farmer. :)
Comment from robyn corum
HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA! Only it's almost not funny because it's so true! We all want to publish those great books that will enlighten the world on SOMETHING. I think you just told my whole life story! hahahahahahaha
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2016
HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA! Only it's almost not funny because it's so true! We all want to publish those great books that will enlighten the world on SOMETHING. I think you just told my whole life story! hahahahahahaha
Comment Written 13-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2016
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Thanks, Robyn. Glad you got a kick out of it.:)
Comment from Judy Couch
Funny. He must have really been mad at the animals to go back to school to become a butcher. I wonder how much of so called mental telepathy is just made up.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2016
Funny. He must have really been mad at the animals to go back to school to become a butcher. I wonder how much of so called mental telepathy is just made up.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2016
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Thank you very much, Judy. I know mental telepathy works, but with animals? Probably not. :)
Comment from F. Wehr3
This was loopy good fun. Phyllis, you're funny lady. I enjoyed this little story of Jack and all his animals. The book review made me laugh. Well done!
Take care,
Russell
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2016
This was loopy good fun. Phyllis, you're funny lady. I enjoyed this little story of Jack and all his animals. The book review made me laugh. Well done!
Take care,
Russell
Comment Written 13-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2016
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Thanks for reading, Russell. Loopy is what I was going for. Glad you liked the silliness. :)
Comment from Ulla
Hahahahaha, Phyllis this is just so funny. So he couldn't convince the world about his and the animals' ability to communicate. If you can't beat them join them springs to mind. Loved it. All the best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2016
Hahahahaha, Phyllis this is just so funny. So he couldn't convince the world about his and the animals' ability to communicate. If you can't beat them join them springs to mind. Loved it. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 13-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2016
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Thanks, Ulla. All in good fun. I know animals can feel/think more than that. I have three dogs. Anyone with cats or dogs or horses know animals are more complex than we give them credit for. Except chickens. Chickens are really REALLY stupid, even for animals. LOL!
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I know, we have five cats and a dog, and I have had numerous horses. I've always loved animals.:)))
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Well, if you can't beat them...join them. On the opposite end of the spectrum.
That is what this story seems to be saying.
Now, what if "Jack the Zoo Keeper" was right along?
Having in excess of 400 pages of animal thoughts would be rather monotonous indeed. So perhaps the reviewer made a very valid point after all.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2016
Well, if you can't beat them...join them. On the opposite end of the spectrum.
That is what this story seems to be saying.
Now, what if "Jack the Zoo Keeper" was right along?
Having in excess of 400 pages of animal thoughts would be rather monotonous indeed. So perhaps the reviewer made a very valid point after all.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2016
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Thanks, Brett. He can still "work with" animals in his new careeer. :)