Reflections Of Color
Viewing comments for Chapter 46 "This Is Where You Walk Away"A collection of my All-Time Best rated song lyrics
26 total reviews
Comment from ruzu27
I read your lyrics aloud a few times and thought to hear the music. Very well done. I hope this is just a song and the words are not true...
Thank you for sharing.
Ruth
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2015
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I read your lyrics aloud a few times and thought to hear the music. Very well done. I hope this is just a song and the words are not true...
Thank you for sharing.
Ruth
Comment Written 22-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2015
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Comment from Jesse James Doty
Very well done. I am all for not having a set rhyme scheme. I say let the rhymes flow were they may. Free verse fits more for lyrics, anyway. I think some writers get too hung up on technique, whereas I believe the content to be more important.
A very poignant and heartfelt piece. Thank you for sharing your feelings and thoughts about romance.
Peace, Jesse James
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2015
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Very well done. I am all for not having a set rhyme scheme. I say let the rhymes flow were they may. Free verse fits more for lyrics, anyway. I think some writers get too hung up on technique, whereas I believe the content to be more important.
A very poignant and heartfelt piece. Thank you for sharing your feelings and thoughts about romance.
Peace, Jesse James
Comment Written 20-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2015
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Glad you enjoyed these lyrics. Free Style is the only way to write them, as far as I am concerned. Your comments and support appreciated.
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I am glad to be supportive of the writing of lyrics. I used to write and perform lyrics and music for a few different rock bands when I was younger. The experience has helped me with my writing of Free Verse poetry.
Comment from Patti R.
Okay, I was about to comment on the changing rhyme scheme and meter.
I guess there's no point in doing that.
This is posted as poetry, and romantic it is; however when a poet tells me at the end of the poem that in fact it's meant to be a song -- well, I'm at a loss. I can't hear your music, Brett.
To me, this is a poem.
The rhymes are very good even though you change up the scheme for the last verse.
How is it that when men mess around, it's expected that a woman will overlook it?
How is it that when a woman messes around and gets caught, she's history?
Don't answer that, lol.
Patti
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2015
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Okay, I was about to comment on the changing rhyme scheme and meter.
I guess there's no point in doing that.
This is posted as poetry, and romantic it is; however when a poet tells me at the end of the poem that in fact it's meant to be a song -- well, I'm at a loss. I can't hear your music, Brett.
To me, this is a poem.
The rhymes are very good even though you change up the scheme for the last verse.
How is it that when men mess around, it's expected that a woman will overlook it?
How is it that when a woman messes around and gets caught, she's history?
Don't answer that, lol.
Patti
Comment Written 20-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2015
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Glad you enjoyed this. I have about 40 others in my portfolio. All lyrics, as I do not write "poetry". Your comments and support appreciated.
Comment from kiwijenny
I love free verse the best because you can say just what you want to with no rhyming constraints
This song is a great country song...
Why do something so stupid as cheat?
God bless
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2015
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I love free verse the best because you can say just what you want to with no rhyming constraints
This song is a great country song...
Why do something so stupid as cheat?
God bless
Comment Written 19-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2015
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Comment from Domino 2
Very good rhyming song lyrics, Brett.
I assume last stanza would be the repeating chorus (say three times in all) with more stanzas surrounding it each time.
Nice one.
Best wishes, Ray
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2015
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Very good rhyming song lyrics, Brett.
I assume last stanza would be the repeating chorus (say three times in all) with more stanzas surrounding it each time.
Nice one.
Best wishes, Ray
Comment Written 19-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2015
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Comment from Pantygynt
This is the second lightning strike running i have reviewed today. Well you seem to have done it this time. She's gone. And I don't reckon she's coming back, not in this song anyway. Breaking up makes for far more drama in a song. if you look at the english folk tradition and C& W together it really is mostly gloomy stuff - but great songs.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2015
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This is the second lightning strike running i have reviewed today. Well you seem to have done it this time. She's gone. And I don't reckon she's coming back, not in this song anyway. Breaking up makes for far more drama in a song. if you look at the english folk tradition and C& W together it really is mostly gloomy stuff - but great songs.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2015
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Comment from JTStone
You're the guy that writes those generic reviews I see on my works and those of my friends...
Shame on you.
You and those like you are the reason I'm leaving this site. You just throw out a plain copy of just enough syllables to gain fan dollars to gain status and speard your own glory.
You aren't a writer...you're a poser.
JTSTone
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reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
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You're the guy that writes those generic reviews I see on my works and those of my friends...
Shame on you.
You and those like you are the reason I'm leaving this site. You just throw out a plain copy of just enough syllables to gain fan dollars to gain status and speard your own glory.
You aren't a writer...you're a poser.
JTSTone
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Comment Written 18-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
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Your accusations do not merit a response.
Comment from LanceHill
Well written. The flow and rhyme pattern made it easy to read. As you have written, choices are made and we have to live with the consequences. Unfortunately, those choices are often a direct reflection of selfish desires.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2015
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Well written. The flow and rhyme pattern made it easy to read. As you have written, choices are made and we have to live with the consequences. Unfortunately, those choices are often a direct reflection of selfish desires.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2015
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Comment from RGstar
I like the angle this of approach here. The perpetrator's thought process is a valid one with the acknowledgement of wrong doing for what its worth...and that worth? Nothing at all, perhaps curiosity the answer. Yet! The end is inevitable.
Nicely done.
Have a great Sunday.
RGstar
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2015
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I like the angle this of approach here. The perpetrator's thought process is a valid one with the acknowledgement of wrong doing for what its worth...and that worth? Nothing at all, perhaps curiosity the answer. Yet! The end is inevitable.
Nicely done.
Have a great Sunday.
RGstar
Comment Written 18-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2015
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Glad you enjoyed these lyrics. Your comments and support appreciated.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
I'll be here if you need me. I just wanted you to know
Love is like a candle we can warm up in its glow
But, it's too late to say I'm sorry
It's too much to ask you to stay
I can see the dark clouds forming
This is where you walk away
Oh, dear - betrayal - heart-breaking to find the one who holds your heart in another's arms. Not easy to forget.
Albeit a rather melancholy song, it's well written -
to be sung in country-style, I presume.
Margaret
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
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I'll be here if you need me. I just wanted you to know
Love is like a candle we can warm up in its glow
But, it's too late to say I'm sorry
It's too much to ask you to stay
I can see the dark clouds forming
This is where you walk away
Oh, dear - betrayal - heart-breaking to find the one who holds your heart in another's arms. Not easy to forget.
Albeit a rather melancholy song, it's well written -
to be sung in country-style, I presume.
Margaret
Comment Written 18-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
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Country, of course. Is there anything else? Glad you enjoyed these lyrics. Always appreciate your comments and support.