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Beautiful Son

A mothers look at her son

27 total reviews 
Comment from steevie
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This is a touching piece you've written about your son.

Its easy to read how fond you are of him and by all accounts, he turned out to be a young man whom you approve.

Well done, Happiotter

steve

 Comment Written 26-Sep-2012


reply by the author on 07-Jan-2013
    Thank you Steve, Happi
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2013
    Thank you Steve, Happi
Comment from adewpearl
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Your poem is in good 5/7/5 form - I'd advise you not to call it a haiku in your author's notes because of a variety of haiku rules - if you just call it a 5/7/5 then reviewers won't ding you for haiku rules :-)
I like the consonance of L sounds in life/swiftly/tall/deeply
and the observation you make about the nature of our children's lives moving past so fast :-) Brooke

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2012


reply by the author on 02-Aug-2012
    Thank you so much for the warning this I will study up on the haiku form. Thank you for the review and I appreciate the advise! Happi
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2012
    Thank you so much for the warning this I will study up on the haiku form. Thank you for the review and I appreciate the advise! Happi
Comment from Jaxson Phoenix
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I think you can claim success. It is a perfect haiku and very descriptive of what, by all accounts, is a remarkable young man. I am sure he will love it. Keep up the good work.

 Comment Written 01-Aug-2012


reply by the author on 02-Aug-2012
    Thank you so much for the review ! Happi
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2012
    Thank you so much for the review ! Happi
Comment from marycec
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Well crafted haiku about your son..I like the fact you used present participles, growing giving it an immediacy of feeling.Humble and kind. You must bevery proud.

 Comment Written 01-Aug-2012


reply by the author on 01-Aug-2012
    Thank you for the great review! Happi
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2012
    Thank you for the great review! Happi
Comment from Bobbi22
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As the mother of four wonderful sons, I can certainly relate to this. They grow so fast. Treasure every moment. Very well written 5-7-5 poem.

 Comment Written 01-Aug-2012


reply by the author on 01-Aug-2012
    Thank you so much and I know you totally understand! Happi
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2012
    Thank you so much and I know you totally understand! Happi
Comment from Doc Holiday
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Beautiful 5-7-5 tribute poem to your son.
Having four sons of my own, I must agree with you on how quickly they do grow up and become men.

 Comment Written 01-Aug-2012


reply by the author on 01-Aug-2012
    Thank you so much but you know we wouldn't have the other chapter if they didn't grow up but I just wish it were a little slower ! Happi
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2012
    Thank you so much but you know we wouldn't have the other chapter if they didn't grow up but I just wish it were a little slower ! Happi
Comment from Mary Ann MCPhedran
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A good write with imagery and needs edit. The poem has a tribute to your son theme and us Mothers love our sons. The colour and the words blend well together. I see no reason to change any of it. I enjoyed reading your poem. Mary

 Comment Written 01-Aug-2012


reply by the author on 01-Aug-2012
    Than you an you have no idea how
    Much I appreciate you reviewing and reading my work. Happi
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2012
    Than you an you have no idea how
    Much I appreciate you reviewing and reading my work. Happi
Comment from ennahanid
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This is a lovely tribute to your son and I am so glad I did not pass this up because of being so unadorned. That is a bad habit of mine I am trying to break, I am getting better - hopefully. I have a grandson who is going through this not 16 yet, taller than his Dad bigger feet too and a voice that is getting down there. I enjoyed reading you today - Dinah

 Comment Written 01-Aug-2012


reply by the author on 01-Aug-2012
    Thank you for such a kind and humble review! I appreciate this so very much! Blessings to u! Happi
Comment from rjuselius
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your son seems to have gone from baby to adulthood in just a few words. nicely written. good execution.
thank you for sharing!

rebekka x

 Comment Written 01-Aug-2012


reply by the author on 01-Aug-2012
    Thank you for the review. The sad thing is that I feel this time has flown by so fast that in only a few words he has grown this quickly! Haha happi
Comment from Titanx9
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This is a beautiful haiku to your beloved son. I am sure he will appreciate this one and many more you will probably write. I enjoyed reading this well-structured piece.

 Comment Written 01-Aug-2012


reply by the author on 01-Aug-2012
    Thank you for taking time out to read and review my work. Many blessings! Happi