My Book of Favored Sonnets
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "The Mending"My collection of various sonnets.
24 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
Flowing and emotional sonnet. It has good images and metaphors of how a new love can sew together a broken heart.
I see no errors.
Good luck and keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2009
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Flowing and emotional sonnet. It has good images and metaphors of how a new love can sew together a broken heart.
I see no errors.
Good luck and keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 14-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2009
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Thank you so much, really appreciate your review.
Comment from rhymelord
Dear Dawn of Tomorrow,
There is no doubt that the sonnet is the acme of poetry, with rhyme, rhythm, structure and feeling needing to be perfect and when it is, as in your poem here, it really fills my heart with joy. Having said that, There is one word that, to me, does not quite fit, although it makes sense. I would prefer to see a "A lover" (or some such) rather than "An ally", which to me does not have the same emotive appeal so apparent in the remainder of the work. It may be that you have chosen "ally" for some very good reason, say related to "battlefield", and, if so, I retire, but, anyway, it is a lovely work.
Regards
Reg
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2009
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Dear Dawn of Tomorrow,
There is no doubt that the sonnet is the acme of poetry, with rhyme, rhythm, structure and feeling needing to be perfect and when it is, as in your poem here, it really fills my heart with joy. Having said that, There is one word that, to me, does not quite fit, although it makes sense. I would prefer to see a "A lover" (or some such) rather than "An ally", which to me does not have the same emotive appeal so apparent in the remainder of the work. It may be that you have chosen "ally" for some very good reason, say related to "battlefield", and, if so, I retire, but, anyway, it is a lovely work.
Regards
Reg
Comment Written 29-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2009
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Well somewhat related to battlefield but more because he is my greatest support and constant companion, of course he is my lover as well but so much more. Thank you for your beautiful comment and I do agree that the sonnet is the acme of poetry. You have a blessed rest of the week. Jo Lynn
Comment from Bryana
Amazing sonnet Dawn. Beautiful rhyme,
rhythm and flow. It was certainly a
pleasure to read it.
I love this stanza...
Within my dreams I saw a brilliant flame
that wrapped itself around me in the cold,
but why cannot existence be the same?
Perhaps it is. It's starting to unfold.
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2009
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Amazing sonnet Dawn. Beautiful rhyme,
rhythm and flow. It was certainly a
pleasure to read it.
I love this stanza...
Within my dreams I saw a brilliant flame
that wrapped itself around me in the cold,
but why cannot existence be the same?
Perhaps it is. It's starting to unfold.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2009
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Thanks so much, my friend. So glad you enjoyed.
Comment from missy98writer
What a beautiful sonnet you've presented for the sonnet contest. I love sonnets and this one was excellent. I liked your line: "Within my dreams I saw a brilliant flame". This was a well written sonnet. I'm giving you five stars for this sonnet. Thanks for posting your sonnet. The art work you used was too cool.
missy98writer.
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2009
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What a beautiful sonnet you've presented for the sonnet contest. I love sonnets and this one was excellent. I liked your line: "Within my dreams I saw a brilliant flame". This was a well written sonnet. I'm giving you five stars for this sonnet. Thanks for posting your sonnet. The art work you used was too cool.
missy98writer.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2009
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Thank you so much for the beautiful review.
Comment from adewpearl
A lovely love sonnet, Jo Lynn, beautiful throughout - but my favorite stanza by far is the third quatrain - the imagery and the positive spirit of it just really reached out to me. The emotion of your sonnet is true and the imagery beautiful - and it is all extremely well composed, too! Good luck in the contest :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2009
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A lovely love sonnet, Jo Lynn, beautiful throughout - but my favorite stanza by far is the third quatrain - the imagery and the positive spirit of it just really reached out to me. The emotion of your sonnet is true and the imagery beautiful - and it is all extremely well composed, too! Good luck in the contest :-) Brooke
Comment Written 23-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2009
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See helped to pray to the muse gods, LOL I don't have a chance of winning, not on the site enough but at least it gave me enough inspiration to write. Thanks as always, Brooke for your thoughtful reviews.
Comment from LadyBrendragon
Good word choices and a nice constant rhythm and rhyme scheme. Comparing putting a life back together to mending threads was a good visual method. Nicely done
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2009
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Good word choices and a nice constant rhythm and rhyme scheme. Comparing putting a life back together to mending threads was a good visual method. Nicely done
Comment Written 23-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2009
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thank you so much for taking the time to read and review.
Comment from WRITER1
I certainly hope that soon we will see peace. This war has gone on far too long. I liked your poem. Sometimes love is like a war, it might be much harder to win.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2009
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I certainly hope that soon we will see peace. This war has gone on far too long. I liked your poem. Sometimes love is like a war, it might be much harder to win.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2009
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Poetry with all its different meanings. I can find 3 different visions in this piece although I really intended it to be a love poem, there are many messages within those lines and the war is definitely one of them. Thanks for taking the time to read and review.
Comment from another jim
What a terrific sonnet, DoT! Such a nice mix of concrete and abstract images, all leading to your conclusion that love conquers all (or at the least can thoroughly mend one's life). Glad your narrator found her faith in love restored!
For some reason, I'm reminded of my favorite Beatles lyric:
"And in the end, the love you take is equal to the love you make...."
Call it karma, but I think the three main characters in your sonnet will find that that quote contains more than a grain of truth.
Nicely done! Thanks for sharing, and good luck in the contest...Jim.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2009
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What a terrific sonnet, DoT! Such a nice mix of concrete and abstract images, all leading to your conclusion that love conquers all (or at the least can thoroughly mend one's life). Glad your narrator found her faith in love restored!
For some reason, I'm reminded of my favorite Beatles lyric:
"And in the end, the love you take is equal to the love you make...."
Call it karma, but I think the three main characters in your sonnet will find that that quote contains more than a grain of truth.
Nicely done! Thanks for sharing, and good luck in the contest...Jim.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2009
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It truly does, I would agree with that. Thank you for the wonderful words very much appreciated.
Comment from Debbie0
Very beautifully written, I have just joined this site and hope that someday I can write as well as this.
Truly an inspiration, a very lovely poem
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2009
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Very beautifully written, I have just joined this site and hope that someday I can write as well as this.
Truly an inspiration, a very lovely poem
Comment Written 23-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2009
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thank you so much, I'm sure one day you will far surpass, welcome to the site.
Comment from amada
This is a very beautiful sonnet because you have strong methaphors, as for example the flame with life. My fav line: "A miscued vow can leave a life in shreds,but true love found will bring the mending threads."
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2009
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This is a very beautiful sonnet because you have strong methaphors, as for example the flame with life. My fav line: "A miscued vow can leave a life in shreds,but true love found will bring the mending threads."
Comment Written 23-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2009
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Thank you so much for the lovely review.