You Are Being Watched
Happy living Protect and keep safe 202 words A Non-Fiction122 total reviews
Comment from Kidlike101
I'm going to be generous with my review and say 3 stars.
It seems like might have had a bit too much to drink when you wrote this and the message in it is unclear.
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I'm going to be generous with my review and say 3 stars.
It seems like might have had a bit too much to drink when you wrote this and the message in it is unclear.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2013
Comment from cvcopac
This is how people talk when they had too much to drink, or the morning after. I can't tell if you're intending this as a political, or spiritual metaphor, or what. It come across as paranoia. This work needs clarification, definition, and a little more structure might help.
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This is how people talk when they had too much to drink, or the morning after. I can't tell if you're intending this as a political, or spiritual metaphor, or what. It come across as paranoia. This work needs clarification, definition, and a little more structure might help.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2013
Comment from write hand blue
I'm being generous here three stars are far more than this self righteous twaddle deserves.
If you spent a few minutes sorting out your words and use a dictionary your nonsense may for once be comprehensible.
I asked you before if you think of yourself as a sort of oracle. We know the answer.... DO YOU???
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I'm being generous here three stars are far more than this self righteous twaddle deserves.
If you spent a few minutes sorting out your words and use a dictionary your nonsense may for once be comprehensible.
I asked you before if you think of yourself as a sort of oracle. We know the answer.... DO YOU???
Comment Written 28-Jul-2013
Comment from Zue65
I subscribed to the point raised by the author in this non fiction article that we should strictly conscious of what we have, belongings,properties and documents, for somebody we may not be aware of is waiting for a chance to violate our rights to safety and our properties. It is brief bu concise in nits attempt to deliver his warning to the readers. I do prefer short pieces than the long ones. God bless, well done.
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I subscribed to the point raised by the author in this non fiction article that we should strictly conscious of what we have, belongings,properties and documents, for somebody we may not be aware of is waiting for a chance to violate our rights to safety and our properties. It is brief bu concise in nits attempt to deliver his warning to the readers. I do prefer short pieces than the long ones. God bless, well done.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2013
Comment from robina1978
You are so right in this story. For a start The US is tracking everybody for no obvious reason. And even in our small Dutch community houses get broken into, murders and rape happened nearby as well.
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You are so right in this story. For a start The US is tracking everybody for no obvious reason. And even in our small Dutch community houses get broken into, murders and rape happened nearby as well.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2013
Comment from adki6
I really like the message you're delivering with this work. You've kept it short and precise so that the message will be clear. Nice work :)
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I really like the message you're delivering with this work. You've kept it short and precise so that the message will be clear. Nice work :)
Comment Written 28-Jul-2013
Comment from visionary1234
Al, I'm sorry, but this piece really needs some sentence structure that actually makes sense dear. Paranoia I can understand. Just plain bad writing I cannot. Repetitive and not well expressed I'm afraid. Not one of your better ones I'm afraid!
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Al, I'm sorry, but this piece really needs some sentence structure that actually makes sense dear. Paranoia I can understand. Just plain bad writing I cannot. Repetitive and not well expressed I'm afraid. Not one of your better ones I'm afraid!
Comment Written 28-Jul-2013
Comment from Razz
Okay, I'll play along.
Still not sure who you are or your game.
The difference between your "reviews" of other posts and your own posts, is glaring. Something is just not quite kosher.
As to this particular post about being watched, do you know something the general public does not?
But you sure do pay a lot to read and review...almost like pennies from heaven!
Thank you.
Have a good day.
Razz
P.S. Who are you?
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Okay, I'll play along.
Still not sure who you are or your game.
The difference between your "reviews" of other posts and your own posts, is glaring. Something is just not quite kosher.
As to this particular post about being watched, do you know something the general public does not?
But you sure do pay a lot to read and review...almost like pennies from heaven!
Thank you.
Have a good day.
Razz
P.S. Who are you?
Comment Written 28-Jul-2013
Comment from AnonymousWisdom
There are some gems of knowledge hidden in this.
It's difficult for the reader to connect to this piece because you don't explain what you're saying in a relatable way. Give examples of specific circumstances, in your life or in the world at large. Without interesting focus points that are carefully developed to prove your points (which seem to be good ones) this reads more like an extended fortune cookie proverb.
Keep writing and have a nice day :)
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There are some gems of knowledge hidden in this.
It's difficult for the reader to connect to this piece because you don't explain what you're saying in a relatable way. Give examples of specific circumstances, in your life or in the world at large. Without interesting focus points that are carefully developed to prove your points (which seem to be good ones) this reads more like an extended fortune cookie proverb.
Keep writing and have a nice day :)
Comment Written 28-Jul-2013
Comment from barkingdog
We need to be watchful in order to keep safe those we love as family and friends. The unknown stranger often masquerades as one to be trusted. Be wary, all is not what it seems. Take time to assess before offering a key.
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We need to be watchful in order to keep safe those we love as family and friends. The unknown stranger often masquerades as one to be trusted. Be wary, all is not what it seems. Take time to assess before offering a key.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2013
