The Ottava Rima
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Comment from Jazh
This is a lovely piece of optimism after all the dark Halloween poems. I really like the rhythm of these 'ottava rimas'. "my doubts encased in darkness are dismissed" - that's exactly how I feel most mornings! Good luck with the contest. :)
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2009
This is a lovely piece of optimism after all the dark Halloween poems. I really like the rhythm of these 'ottava rimas'. "my doubts encased in darkness are dismissed" - that's exactly how I feel most mornings! Good luck with the contest. :)
Comment Written 23-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2009
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Thank you, Adele - so glad you enjoyed the light after all of my dark poems :-) Brooke
Comment from missy98writer
Another excellent offering you have presented. I'm giving you five stars for this enjoyable poem. I liked the line: "How could disquietude or fear persist." The ottava rima poem you did was great poem that represents a sense of wonderment or mystery. The photo you matched the words in your ottava rima poem.
Thanks for posting for us to read and review.
missy98writer.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2009
Another excellent offering you have presented. I'm giving you five stars for this enjoyable poem. I liked the line: "How could disquietude or fear persist." The ottava rima poem you did was great poem that represents a sense of wonderment or mystery. The photo you matched the words in your ottava rima poem.
Thanks for posting for us to read and review.
missy98writer.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2009
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Thank you - the disquietude line is one I like too :-) You are most kind :-) Brooke
Comment from pixiemillie
Nothing like waking to the wonder of the morning to begin anew, Brooke and you have given it such meaning in this write. I'm loving these ottava rimas of yours- -well thought, well expressed and perfect in rhyme and meter. I'm having trouble just getting a rhyming couplet in something other than first grade words- -can't figure what's happened to my vocabulary. Anomia is my enemy :+). Thank you for your expressive talent. RoS
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2009
Nothing like waking to the wonder of the morning to begin anew, Brooke and you have given it such meaning in this write. I'm loving these ottava rimas of yours- -well thought, well expressed and perfect in rhyme and meter. I'm having trouble just getting a rhyming couplet in something other than first grade words- -can't figure what's happened to my vocabulary. Anomia is my enemy :+). Thank you for your expressive talent. RoS
Comment Written 23-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2009
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Thank you, Rose of Sharon - I am honored by your comments. Brooke :-)
Comment from sara-beth
You have so eloquently expressed that feeling we all have, the sun chasing away the dark shadows, and all the fears that lurk amongst them. Great job!
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2009
You have so eloquently expressed that feeling we all have, the sun chasing away the dark shadows, and all the fears that lurk amongst them. Great job!
Comment Written 23-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2009
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Thank you, Sara-beth. I so appreciate your gracious response :-) Brooke
Comment from MsRefusenik
About time you gave us something to hold on to after all those terrible nightmares from hell. This is FULL of wonder. It is soothing, peaceful and reminiscent of glorious morning afters extremely rough nights. It captures the feelings of peace restored to the spirit very well. Lovely and nicely done.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2009
About time you gave us something to hold on to after all those terrible nightmares from hell. This is FULL of wonder. It is soothing, peaceful and reminiscent of glorious morning afters extremely rough nights. It captures the feelings of peace restored to the spirit very well. Lovely and nicely done.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2009
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Thank you, Maryellen - yes, some light in the midst of the dark - thank the contest organizer for inspiring me :-) Brooke
Comment from Amfunny
Oh, yes, the beauty of the sunrise. I love it. Sunset, too. Very nicely written and your words paint such a lovely picture. Well done. :)
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2009
Oh, yes, the beauty of the sunrise. I love it. Sunset, too. Very nicely written and your words paint such a lovely picture. Well done. :)
Comment Written 23-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2009
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Thank you, Norma Jean - I figured I owed people a light poem after all the dark : -) Brooke
Comment from babylonia
brooke,
i always like the way the dawn brings to light all fears. nothing looks the same. made me smile. imagery is excellent. love the pic.
love,
barbara
good luck~
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2009
brooke,
i always like the way the dawn brings to light all fears. nothing looks the same. made me smile. imagery is excellent. love the pic.
love,
barbara
good luck~
Comment Written 23-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2009
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Thank you, Barbara - glad you enjoyed :-) Brooke
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brooke,
you are welcome~
love,
barbara
Comment from Deejharrington
In dead of night, things always do seem at their worse. With dawn comes new hope and bravery. You captured that feeling very well. It's a very "up" poem. Best of luck in the contest.
deb
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2009
In dead of night, things always do seem at their worse. With dawn comes new hope and bravery. You captured that feeling very well. It's a very "up" poem. Best of luck in the contest.
deb
Comment Written 23-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2009
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Thanks, Deb - Yes, this contest inspired the "up" side in me today :-) Brooke
Comment from Olfovikoff
Hi Brooke,
Pardon my directness this morning.
Another good poem that will stand on its own. However, in this context, using a short verse form, I find the word wonderment, to be glaringly redundant. It appears in the Contest Title, shortened in the poem title, and again on the first line of the ending.
I leave the artistry to you, but possibly something about "breathless", or such.
Let me know if you change anything,
Good luck in the contest.
Thanks,
DaveO
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reply by the author on 23-Oct-2009
Hi Brooke,
Pardon my directness this morning.
Another good poem that will stand on its own. However, in this context, using a short verse form, I find the word wonderment, to be glaringly redundant. It appears in the Contest Title, shortened in the poem title, and again on the first line of the ending.
I leave the artistry to you, but possibly something about "breathless", or such.
Let me know if you change anything,
Good luck in the contest.
Thanks,
DaveO
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2009
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I must admit I was stuck for a good title for this one, so I take your point that the title is less than inspired - though I have no idea why I would care whether something repeats a word in the contest wording. The second the contest ends the poem lives on without it. If I come up with a better title, I will let you know, but wonderment is definitely staying in the final couplet as I could not care less about the contest title. Brooke
Comment from Adri7enne
You've captured the essence of a new day, a new page on which to write a life. So true that fears are often shown to be just dark shadows that dissapear when the sun shines through them.
I love the Ottava rima. And I had never met him until you introduced us. LOL! Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2009
You've captured the essence of a new day, a new page on which to write a life. So true that fears are often shown to be just dark shadows that dissapear when the sun shines through them.
I love the Ottava rima. And I had never met him until you introduced us. LOL! Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 23-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2009
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Thank you, Adrienne. So glad you enjoyed this upbeat ottava rima :-) Brooke