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Comment from Amicus
This is really good, Brooke. Witty, wise, rhymed and in perfect cinquain form. It's one of those little poems I like to carry around in my head to remind me not to overreact (as I am prone to do) to closed-minds that feed in themselves.
Great job.
reply by the author on 23-May-2009
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This is really good, Brooke. Witty, wise, rhymed and in perfect cinquain form. It's one of those little poems I like to carry around in my head to remind me not to overreact (as I am prone to do) to closed-minds that feed in themselves.
Great job.
Comment Written 23-May-2009
reply by the author on 23-May-2009
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Dogmatic people really get my goat! :-) Thanks, my friend. Brooke :-)
Comment from Eaglewolf
So very very true. And yet, so many people refuse to see that by refusing to open their mind up to new experiences and thoughts they are refusing to actually open their lives up. I hate to think how many things I would have missed out on if I didn't have an open mind. (Mind you, I have been told Im so open minded it's scary.) Wonderful Wonderful poem. I love the message.
reply by the author on 23-May-2009
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So very very true. And yet, so many people refuse to see that by refusing to open their mind up to new experiences and thoughts they are refusing to actually open their lives up. I hate to think how many things I would have missed out on if I didn't have an open mind. (Mind you, I have been told Im so open minded it's scary.) Wonderful Wonderful poem. I love the message.
Comment Written 23-May-2009
reply by the author on 23-May-2009
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Thank you so much for this generous review and your perceptive comments. I know so many people with closed minds, it's scary!! Brooke :-)
Comment from MumEsGirl
What a delightful way of expressing such a mundane truth. So many people are not receptive to the realaities of life and living.
The cinquain works exceptionally for this work
hugs
kate
reply by the author on 23-May-2009
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What a delightful way of expressing such a mundane truth. So many people are not receptive to the realaities of life and living.
The cinquain works exceptionally for this work
hugs
kate
Comment Written 23-May-2009
reply by the author on 23-May-2009
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And I know a bunch of them! :-) Thanks, Kate. Brooke
Comment from Sasha
I found this very interesting and I liked the message. As always, I go for short, sweet and to the point. A closed mind is a sad thing and you are so very right to add ... all it hears is what it first supposed. Something I never thought about. Very well written and also thought provoking.
reply by the author on 23-May-2009
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I found this very interesting and I liked the message. As always, I go for short, sweet and to the point. A closed mind is a sad thing and you are so very right to add ... all it hears is what it first supposed. Something I never thought about. Very well written and also thought provoking.
Comment Written 23-May-2009
reply by the author on 23-May-2009
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Valerie, thank you!! Brooke :-)
Comment from Loyd C. Taylor, Sr
Well Broke that was a great eye catching photo pic and the short poem was packed with a life altering message. It is well worth pondering more by your readers. Good work. LOyd
reply by the author on 23-May-2009
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Well Broke that was a great eye catching photo pic and the short poem was packed with a life altering message. It is well worth pondering more by your readers. Good work. LOyd
Comment Written 23-May-2009
reply by the author on 23-May-2009
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Loyd, thank you!! Brooke :-)
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It was my pleasure, Loyd
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
This is a good piece, my friend,
your words ringing true.
I thought I'd review yours before
going off for the night.
Won't be on until late tomorrow, if
at all.
Take good are of yourself.
God Bless.
Margaret.
reply by the author on 23-May-2009
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This is a good piece, my friend,
your words ringing true.
I thought I'd review yours before
going off for the night.
Won't be on until late tomorrow, if
at all.
Take good are of yourself.
God Bless.
Margaret.
Comment Written 23-May-2009
reply by the author on 23-May-2009
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Have a good Sunday, Margaret!! Brooke :-)
Comment from Peter@Poole
How neat is this! The thought itself is worth circulating, but you've said it in so few words, adhered to a traditional poetic form, and incorporated rhyme, Brooke. It's a gem. Peter
reply by the author on 23-May-2009
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How neat is this! The thought itself is worth circulating, but you've said it in so few words, adhered to a traditional poetic form, and incorporated rhyme, Brooke. It's a gem. Peter
Comment Written 23-May-2009
reply by the author on 23-May-2009
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Peter, thank you - I thought it was a little throw away while I try to think of tomorrow's poem, but people are liking it. : -) Brooke
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Your throwaways are other people's gems, mine included.
Comment from Treesaw
Good Golly, Miss Molly! :-) This was another winner! It boggles my mind how good poets can say such awesomely intricate things in so few words. You could base a whole college thesis on this little piece. Excellent!
reply by the author on 23-May-2009
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Good Golly, Miss Molly! :-) This was another winner! It boggles my mind how good poets can say such awesomely intricate things in so few words. You could base a whole college thesis on this little piece. Excellent!
Comment Written 23-May-2009
reply by the author on 23-May-2009
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Thank you!! I wrote enough college papers in college - you're welcome to the thesis. LOL Brooke
Comment from AlvinTEthington
There's almost a major and minor turn in this cinquain. The major one is between the third and fourth line and the minor one between the fourth and fifth line. It has very good metaphorical, aphoristic and didactic quality.
As my mentor used to say:
"You can't get a person out of a position by reason that s/he didn't get into by reason."--John Boswell of Yale
Good juxtaposition of picture and poem.
reply by the author on 23-May-2009
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There's almost a major and minor turn in this cinquain. The major one is between the third and fourth line and the minor one between the fourth and fifth line. It has very good metaphorical, aphoristic and didactic quality.
As my mentor used to say:
"You can't get a person out of a position by reason that s/he didn't get into by reason."--John Boswell of Yale
Good juxtaposition of picture and poem.
Comment Written 23-May-2009
reply by the author on 23-May-2009
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Alvin, thank you for your analysis, thoughtful as always. Brooke :-)
Comment from Phil Kitom
A very profound poem this Brooke and symptomatic of a lot of the ills we have to contend with in this day and age.
If more time was spent looking for that key then creation would again find its true rhythm. Great poem...
reply by the author on 23-May-2009
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A very profound poem this Brooke and symptomatic of a lot of the ills we have to contend with in this day and age.
If more time was spent looking for that key then creation would again find its true rhythm. Great poem...
Comment Written 23-May-2009
reply by the author on 23-May-2009
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Dave, thank you - I truly appreciate your perceptive read. Brooke
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best wishes
